by dutchpantyraider
It was a great story, all you really need to do is work on grammer and spelling. That was slightly out, other than that, good job. I'm looking forward to reading more chapters.
A fair story spoilt by poor grammar and worse spelling. Edited this would be a 75 to 80
from England, Canada, Australia and others (I include others than England as I do not know where the writer originates) that they cannot or refuse to comprehend the difference between "then" and "than'? A basic way to understand the difference, "then" is a time difference, "than" is a comparison difference.
Due to too many typos I've posted an edited textversion; this should be replaced within some two weeks. Many thanks for pointing out my misspellings… I'm not a native English writer, so your comments do help me to get better.