All Comments on 'Puppy Girl Ch. 01'

Lol my wife and i masturbated and the fucked hard... Great start

Love your first time "giving back' to the site. I like the story and how it is developing. I won't be one of those who tell you what to do next, except ask to please keep writing. I sense that we will love what is in your mind, a lot!

This is excellent, engaging, and erotic writing. Your style is easy-going and very believable, plus you handle the reality-to-fantasy transistions with skill. You have a well-grounded start to what promises to be a great story. By all means continue.

You truly put the reader into her mind, allowing us to follow her doubts, frustrations, rising hopes and dashed expectations. Very real, very human, very well written. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Excellent job! I love that you took the time to let us get to know who she is and what she wants, and to give us a contrast view of her current/previous relationship showing what's not working for her. There is a clear sense of promise and potential here and I look forward to seeing where it goes. If I had to offer anything "constructive" I'd say that you didn't need the paragraph where she backed up and described herself (age, fitness, etc). It stopped the momentum and it really wasn't needed. I'd like to see that stuff worked in casually, a little here and a little there as part of the story. But that's relatively minor.