by execuwriter
I am absolutely spellbound by this entire story!
I do hope you continue it, soon and not after waiting years; because if I’m understanding correctly, the first three chapters were written in 2011, the fourth in 2012 and the fifth chapter waited six years to be written this year, 2018.
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I believe a good writer should make the reader interested in the characters and the outcome of their experiences. While a great writer should make the reader feel something for both characters (god and bad) as well as hope something good happens to or for both characters.
Thus, you are a great writer in my opinion!
Because, as most people would, I do hope Rebecca (as the victim/heroine), will stay alive, remain healthy, escape or be rescued and continue to live a reasonably good, long life. However, I also hope Garth continues in the way he seems to be and becomes a better, more caring man, with less prejudices and the understanding that each person is a completely unique being rather than a carbon-copy of their race, religion, sex, etc.
Of course the ideal ending, in my opinion, would be them falling in love and both choosing to stay together. Though I’m not sure how that could happen.
Anyways. Thank you for writing such a compelling story, and please continue it when/if you can.
"Art is the supreme task and the truly metaphysical activity in this life.”
Friedrich Nietzsche
I find it interesting that you write from Rebecca's perspective instead of Garth's. I note that there's a heavy element of rigging here but this might be more appropriately put in the Non-Consent / Reluctance category. Is it weird that I find it touching that he was about to cut his own foreskin off? (I work in neonatal care so I think we both know that'd hurt like a motherfucker for an adult to do that. Don't think the little Jew babies like it either - but at least the skin is softer!) At least, the meaning behind the gesture is profound. I'm curious as to what becomes of Garth's development. Your writing is more "realistic" as opposed to less talented writers who rely on women enjoying the whole kidnapping thing. I don't know how much you have planned out but keep writing and creating this story here! I think Garth has a unique Dominant-masochistic side worth exploring sexually or as character development. I hope this story has a lot more chapters. I'd write BDSM too but I have two boys and a little girl to look after while their mom's in chemo.