by Twisted62
You did a fantastic job with your story!! Please continue the saga and let us know what happens to Beth and her children! 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻
I loved this story, wish it was longer. Many more chapters please.
Well, it was long so you've got that going for you. But what this story needed was some filling out. It was so direct and straight to the point that it doesn't leave any time to build that excitement. Not to mention how everyone just approaches incest as if it's no big deal takes away from the excitement of the act in the first place. Then there is the whole fact that you make no indication of scene and character changes that I got ripped out of the story multiple times while I had to go back and read through the last few lines to determine where things had changed and it just killed it for me. I won't even bother getting into the spelling and grammar issues, I'm sure someone else will point that out for you.
Please continue. It would be nice if Chad is also engaged in incest with his own mother or sister. Then they will all enjoy going to a nudist camp, or just lounging around on a backyard pool.
Great story, my girlfriend and I wanted to be them, had to take a few breaks just to do it then catch our breath. Don't stop writing, you have a gift.
Other than a little name confusion at the beginning (Who the hell is REX?) pretty well written.
I will agree the characters could have used more of a fill out - the only real motivation backstory was of Emma's mother - but in the main an entertaining tale.
A part two is warranted.
Stars wise I was torn between 4 and 5, you got 5
Great sharing story. Five 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟! Hope there's a chapter it two down the road!
fun very hot story
5 and fave
PS loved that Gwen had full bush, at least at first
I loved the first 2 chapters, the end is disgusting as the daughter is nothing but a lowly slut who used her mother as sperm garbage bin for her so call boyfriend.story got twisted by twisted.