All Comments on 'Step-Daughter in Need Ch. 01'

Have it that the mum and daughter planned it out this way. Conveniently taking the grandchild with her so the stepdaughter could get the stepfather to go for it.

That would make sense if the stepdaughter confessed to her mum what she's always felt about the stepfather.

This would assuage my own guilt for reading about two people in a cheating senario.

I am on my third marriage, my wife's oldest daughter is married has a son and has been having problems with her husband also. I want to give her all the love I can along with pleasure of sex. I dont think it will ever happen but a man can dream anyway.

The sudden switch of tense from narration of past events to the present tense ("we did" to "we are doing") was a bit distracting from a literary perspective, along with a few missing words indicate sloppy or no proof reading before publishing. Nonetheless, a pretty sexy story and good story development. Five stars

Would love to have an experience like this with my stepdad

Nice :)

>I reached down and pulled the covers up over us.

Thats the only part I dont believe, hehehe. Man, I would be overheating and letting the fan blow on my to cool me down and dry off the sweat! ...and we keep it at 68f in here when we sleep, lol!

I was going to say, the entire start of this story is about how cheating ruined all their lives and how mistrustful they were, yet the narrator and step daughter betray their wife/mother. Irony

So reminds me of my first first filling of my step daughter, she was much younger but had many of the same reactions

You had me in the story for the most part, but you lost me when you switched from "past tense" (she leaned over me) to "present tense" (i take her and put her legs up) in the MIDDLE of a sex scene. Why did you do that switch? It's unnecessary and breaks the reader out of the time tense they've been in. It's really disorienting. Please get an editor to read your work over so that it doesn't happen.

Definitely not a fan of drug use. Would be helpful if you added a tag so people could choose another tale.

Never let a woman who has lost her husband into your home. This isn’t the first story I’ve read where something like this happens. I think when people lose someone or get cheated on, it’s spoils their morals as they simply don’t fare. Then they hurt other people to feel better about the hurt inside them. If Erica was so hurt by her husband’s betrayal but then turned around and seduced her own mother’s husband, then Erica deserved to be cheated on. I hope Beverly rearranges her face.