by Shybunny93
Get an editor or at least start using a word processor with spell check and actually make an attempt at fixing what it points out.
It started out interesting, then got dumb. A young, testosterone filled guy, working on a girl, would gladly say "fuck off" mom and dickhead. There's just not a chance in hell, with his thoughts being what they are, he would slink down and put a cage on and blow some asshole. He could have slowly been brought back around with the hormones, maybe some surgery and training, but this thought he would just fall in line, totally ruined the story.
Enjoyed the story and would love to see more of the stepson serving his stepdaddy. Definitely a good amount of spelling and grammar errors but it is getting better. Keep it up!
"Also you beter be ready to do this every morning before school, when you get of school and before you go to bed. because this is your now Dailey life style."
There are five typos in this one sentence alone. It's very, very difficult to appreciate the content when you have to ignore so many errors.
This story is not well written. There are too many "grammatical" errors to start. Additionally, the story lacks imagination. Boring.
Good content, but for the sake of all that is Holy, at least learn to use a spell checker!