All Comments on 'The Empress' Body Double Ch. 02'
by Iwroteathing
- 14 Comments
Incredible story. I have trouble seeing where the story could continue, and I am sure you could do that masterfully
I really enjoyed the original entry so i was elated to see that of all the choices available for a follow up this one came out on top. Unfortunately I found myself not enjoying it for some reason. I've come to the conclusion that it didn't really feel like she was anonymous like before, just another sex doll being handled by strangers. Starting with the first fellow who --after getting a great deal on a sex mannequin that he's been assured is a noblewoman-- immediately tries to force her to reveal her identity... despite the sign saying she's doing this because she enjoys it and not because someone was able to force her into it. Meaning she still has the power of noblewoman and she can see and hear him. This dummy would be dead soon after, she even may know where he lives if she was paying attention when he hauled her back. The next renter showed she would likely achieve better results as a random mid-level sex mannequin. Saying she wanted it just made her a target for the templar deacon.
Chief Heldar was interesting in that he was going to teach her to do more with the spell and control it herself. Then I realized that gave her too much control and it felt more like she was just sneaking out and having sex. Her time spent in Willowleaf was basically just that. Going away from home to do a bunch of naughty things and then just going back and using the defense of how outlandish the stories to shut up anyone who brings them up.
Being anonymously used by people who know her but have no idea who the sex mannequin is would have been nice. Maybe a visiting noble of high status decides he's gets drunk and visits the establishment she's being offered at and takes her back to the palace with him. Then he feels awkward about it and doesn't want to make the trip back to return her while at the same time not feeling any threat from not following the rules of the establishment he may pass her off to one of his servants. At this point she's basically free and no one knows who she is, leading to complete objectification. This very close to what happened in the first part but achieved through a different path.
I suppose I prefer it when she is trying to engage in some deviancy but things get out of hand for a bit and she experiences things she never planned on, pushing her in a new way each time. This felt like she just grabbed a heavy rock and jumped into the deep end.
Also Chief Heldar completely broke any trust by exposing her identity in front of all of his influential and powerful supporters without asking. Her identity being protected was the whole point of the portal magic in the first place.
Was waiting for this for long. Will read with a Lovense Lush buried in me... Thanks
Good but I would say your other stories have better potential for sequels, shame people vote for their favourite story not sequel potential.
Good continuation. Sad to see the one I voted for didn't win.
Can you please provide an epilogue to Dixie's Downfall.
Please post new works more regularly.
love the sequel. As always your writing is some of the best this site has to offer.
I'd be interested to know what the breakdown in voting was, and if you plan on doing any other sequels/continuations of other stories.
But if she is cut in small pieces then anything she eats... This portal thing is rare. Immaculate conception seems like a good business. She will be invited to many talk shows.
Glad to see that the UN work in fiction because in real life they are pretty disappointing.
Very good sequel man, in the same spirit more o less of the first part (that I've read for a second time). Perhaps Henrietta has taken too many risks, endangering whole countries. It is the first time that you go that high. But well, you have proven me wrong, an unplanned sequel can work fine. Watch and learn JJ Abrams!
Thanks for being so fast. Like always waiting for your next one.
-Onkana
honestly going to have to mostly agree with dtrelsky here. It was decent as far as most of your work is but definitely felt like it lost that thing that made the first story unique and really interesting. Biggest opportunity loss I personally think was the stable hand and the promised debauchery there, this time actually witnessing it with her own (anonymous) eyes rather than it just being 'random' sensations she has to endure. Loved the idea of her being taught the magic and seeing what new ideas/debaucheries she could come up with when she's slipped the logic barrier that her loyal guard and royal mage provided, that didn't honestly go anywhere. Also agree the wannabe emperor's throwing away of any trust by revealing who exactly she actually is was dumb but by that point she's hit hentai corruption levels of depraved so of course nothing comes of it. Tanking a minor reputation hit while playing up how he let them 'talk him down' to where he actually wanted to be while having a secret assured ally who wasn't one reputable visitor to his city away from seeing said ally lose all powers and throwing all negotiations she oversaw into question.
Not saying this is a bad story, far from it. It just doesn't live up to its predecessor in my mind and felt like it deliberately took every opportunity it had to be great and turned away from them to settle for merely good, if that makes any sense whatsoever.
Never thought I would read a sequel to legendary Henrietta. I love all your stories but Henrietta's adventure is the best. It was a bit confusing at times to figure out where her body parts were. But otherwise fine plot. Hope there is a part 3.
Like other readers said this one seemed like a different story than the Original. Portals do exist but the first was unique for maintaining anonymity with the portals. But we got a story where the queen participates in it herself most of the times. Sad that we got a nice story but didn't get what we voted for.
Hopefully, the author will plan a different route for this one in future. Thanks for the story anyways.
I like the first part of the second installment but it goes too far and kill the fragile equilibrium.
Great story but a bit too pushy.
Thanks for the read