All Comments on 'The Girl Across The Street Ch. 03'
by HStoner
- 6 Comments
I've really enjoyed this story arc having only discovered the author last night. I hope to "see" more of Will, Danielle and Trish soon. Of course, Alicia is most welcome to join them as often as she's able!
Again, another riveting chapter, with the addition of Alicia to the group...the ladies are diverse, yet have Will in common; and, no jealousy between them...this works out quite well.
Still concerned about Fred and his photographs...
**5** Stars
really enjoyed ch1 and ch2. the bits about the girls leaving to his house or on a roadtrip without any clothes (in a private setting) is hot shit- i haven't found it anywhere else, so i recently began writing. you might see my first story in the next month or so.
also, let me just say a few things about working for a bank (as a person that works for a very large bank, and not just as a teller or some shit). there is ZERO chance that the CEO of a bank would terminate 90% of non-revenue producing employees, unless they wanted to be fired. CEOs do not report to stockholders; they report to the board of directors. callously, indifferently, and publicly firing that many employees for that trivial a reason would cause the people that didn't get fired to look for work elsewhere. stock would plummet as stockholders saw that media response was unfavorable, and realized they could get a quick windfall but only if they acted immediately.
also also, working for a bank and getting a promotion with a raise of a few thousand dollars per year is an insult, by no stretch of the imagination. to anyone reading this story, if you work for a bank, and you are *gifted* a promotion (i.e., you didn't seek it out), and then gifted *another* promotion, and the recruiter doesn't negotiate salary with you, or else you just ask for a raise of a few thousand dollars, then i've got a bridge to sell you. don't be as stupid as the main character in this story. i would honestly turn down the promotion and find another job, because apparently i can live off of the change i find in my couch cushions.
long story short- don't write about something you have zero experience with.
onto chapter 4!