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Click hereHis smile faded and was replaced by...concern? She wasn't certain.
"Lena...Lena love," he said urgently, suddenly sitting up. He started towards her, and Lena automatically felt herself backing away from him.
It was only then that Lena realized she was crying and trembling heavily. The guilt was apparent on his face, but for some reason, it made her cry harder.
"Lena, I'm so sorry—"
His words were cut off by a loud, blood curdling scream that caused a painful shiver to travel down her spine.
Ava.
- COMMENTS
Ehhhh I too am confused, I've read this series over and over and this reaction is literally something I cannot understand. Is she projecting ? Maybe she doesn't understand what she's actually asking for, or is she so confused by the idea that she can enjoy this much, whilst feeling pain. And not processing it. Idk but love the plot ethier way, really hope they get their happy ever after
Ehhhhh I too am confused, I've reread this series over and over and this episode always puzzles me, as the rest of the plot relies on this strange interaction. Is Lena so confused by the fact that she can react so hard to renz when he is being too rough? Or the fact that she really like this amount of froce? Maybe she doesn't actually understand what she is asking for. Idk, but I guess it is the puzzle of being human. Overall great plot, Hoping for a happy ever after
Ehh I'm so confused she told him she secretly wanted to be raped even begged him this last time to use her. Then she scrambles away from him in anguish and tears I kno she is young but her indecisive in the bedroom hurts my damn head.
The Taking and Keeping of Lena series has me straddling the chapters to preserve each page. I am so in love with this romantic/non-consensual/consensual/erotic/spine tingling love story. Even though I am not at the end of this series, I am going to be greedy at this point and like the others ask for more, more, more please. Your writing and depiction inbreeded in the pages of this story is amazing. Please keep on writing and when I reach the conclusion of the Keeping of Lena, again, I will be begging and pleading for more. Thank you
I keep coming back to your page looking for the next story or update. Thank you for the time you give to your eager fans. Love your work.
sherrylee
Though it is an old comment, I'm sure there are many more like it. Please disregard the rudeness of others. Your time and storytelling efforts are much appreciated.
Can't believe the bloody cheek of some people. Writers have lives other than here. The stories post when they post. I appreciate them whenever they're posted. This is an excellent series or novel/novella. I'm thoroughly enjoying your writing. Thank you.
Pls when are we getting the rest ....
I can't wait ....pls pls plssss
I just discovered the Taking of Lena and this first chapter of the Keeping of Lena. I am enraptured by this story and am so eager for more! Definitely a premium story, far above the expectations I've had from Literotica offerings.
Love this story SO SO SO much really hope you come back and finish it <3
Yet ANOTHER lie from this 'writer' 15/3/17 chapter 2 will be posted this week, 11 days later still waiting, but then what can we expect from a writer who also lied about White Christmas chapters being posted as soon as the previous one posted back in EARLY January, still waiting there too.
So please ablondegoddess, stop bloody lying and post what you said you were going to.
Please dont promise if its not coming. I was so excited at new years when you said Lena would finally be up that next week. 3 months later you finally update and say a week which has now passed. You have people that love this story and I think its kinda of wrong to make false promises. Maybe just dont say anything until its done and submitted. Hope all is well.
Why would anyone ever expect you to keep your word? You said a week and yet here we are. Just admit you have no respect for your fans or your own timetable.
This has been my favorite story to date. I will be stalking for more. Thank you for an amazing story.
I see some impantient people here and on Tumblr blog that really triggers me to write this.
Let me get this straight - the author's NOT obliged to submit a story in a set amount of time. Life has a lot of commitments. Only when those commitments are fulfilled then author can have free time to pursue this hobby.
Let's just savour the fact that we are fortunate that author shares with us the amazing LENZ story. In the meantime, explore other options to entertain our minds.
As an avid anon reader of the vast store of fiction on these pages, I always find it bizarre to find a wonderful tale, wonderfully written that sets the reader up with an entire cast of interesting characters and plot lines....and then it just STOPS. Is there a syndrome at work here? it's so edgingly not fair. Lena needs more. Oh my Lord needs more. The nefarious evil- doers need more...need I say more? Please....the last possible plea. Continue.
I just realized I haven't begged anyone to do anything more than I've begged "ablondegoddess" to continue the story of Lena and Renz. I personally think this is hilarious :D
Lena & Renz! I never thought I'd see them again and then JOY, I finally saw the long awaited "The Keeping of Lena"! This story has been at the top of my most wanted list since you told us you were working on it. And you've hooked me again. But now I'm in the depths of despair seeing how long it's been since you posted. I'm BEGGING you to post the next chapter as soon as possible. 😩 At least please check in with us to let us know you're still there? Pretty please? I gave you five stars and would give you the moon too if I could. 🌖 See? 😃
Your eternal fan,
~K.
Wtf is your problem. Please come back. And finish Lena and Renz' story. Please.
PLEASE finish the story of Renz and Lena. I NEED THEM TO FINALLY BE HAPPY TOGETHER AND END UP FOREVER WITH EACH OTHER. Please for the love of GREAT writing
If you have stoped writing why don't you jst let us knw if you want to write yearly simply say so,so dat we your reader will stop stalking your page.it is simply faustrating.
Please don't make us wait so long. I love this story and the characters. So much talent. The sensual words flow like a strong current in a rushing river! Like drinking Tennessee Wiskey!
Please update and continue this story as soon as possible. I am totally in love with all the characters and the plot line. I need to know what happens next. I see that you have other stories that you are working on and I'm just hoping that you will update this one soon. Thanks!
I have reread your story more than I can count and have learnt to love most of the characters, dislike towards the others and humour towards the rest. Please continue your writing, it is an absolute delight to read and I cannot wait for future installments.
Best wishes
X
I don't think she's given up. She can't be running out of ideas now! I get the feeling that she has the chapters ready but she's waiting on something. Maybe she just can't come to agreement on sth with literotica, or maybe she has to deal with the issues of being plagiarized...
Loved the story. Your writing grabbed me from the the first chapter and has held me fast. Please please continue the story.
Can't wait to read the next chapter I was hooked on this story so please update
said look for the new chapter end of August/beginning of September. It's almost the end of September.. where are youuuuu?! </3
Where are you? Please, come back! Come back! You're such a great writer! This is still one of the best stories here!
💋💋💋💋
This story is just fantastic! I only happened across it the other day and have managed to read it all! You MUST right more. I need to know what happens!
I check in on your profile every month to see if there is a new instalment and get disapointed everytime there is not. Its been more than a year since this Lina story and almost a year since any story so I am worried that you wont give us any others. Please keep writing. I need to know what happens.
Par pitié, écrivez la suite, cette histoire est tellement incroyable ! Je l'adore !!!
Vous possédez un réel talent d'écrivaine, toutes mes félicitations !!!
I commented at the end of "The Taking of Lena" about my gross need for an update to this story then found this sequel. Which also begs an update! Just like me--begging for an update! I know it's been a while, but please write more if at all possible! This story is too good and too jaw-grindingly eventful/suspenseful/complex to lie fallow. Lena, Renz, Ava, Karl and Baby W need closure--which would come about much more quickly if Lena and Renz would JUST TALK ALREADY. And Wife #1 and Brother W #2 need to be ended. As I said in my comment at the end of TToL, please have mercy, ablondegoddess!
I've been so captivated with the previous series as well as chapter one of this one, to the extent that I desperately need the next chapter, I need this story to end. Everytime I settle and think it's near end, drama just builds up! Please finish this series and end the story because I am so attached to Renz and Lena's story. Please finish it.
This series is breathtaking and beautiful and at least mildly realistic... I cannot express how much I am invested in hearing more.
Brava!
You are an extremely talented writer, hopefully there will be more to come.
I really enjoyed this story. I found the plot and characters engrossing so much that the sex was not the best part. I hope you will find a way to resolve the plot lines so that Lena learns and finds happiness.
Omg what happened I'm so so anxious what happened to you :( I need the next chapter
As always with your work, this is a treat to read. Really lovely, and engaging writing -- filled with convincing tension, well-paced subtlety, and a vitality of language. Thank you for sharing. It's a perfect follow-up to your first series. Hats off!
- V
Finish the damn series! At least give us a link an email something! Let us know what's going on. Are you still alive!? Cause if you aren't that is... unfortunate. But finish the damn story!
I don't understand why u have kept so many people hanging....finish the story for ur readers..it's not fair to us..
It's not nice to keep all of us on a cliffhanger! I want to know what happens to everybody!
Best story on the whole site!! So engaging and beautifully written! Excited for the next chapter!
Would love know what happens to Ava, Renz and Lena. Please continue your series. These are awesome and would buy your books if you have any.
Please, please finish the series! Why would you start another one just to tease us with only one chapter?! I've been waiting for a year now, checking back every month or so, and I must say, I am personally offended.
:) In all seriousness though, you have a gift. I did not read your series simply because of the excitement of a dirty scene (for that, I could have gone to any of the literally hundreds of trashy novels out there *ahem, Fifty Shades, *ahem! No, I didn't read your stories for the sex (which, by the way, was beautifully captured), but for the plot, the story, Lina, Renz, Ava.
I always maintain that the mark of a truly good erotica is that it is one that does not arouse me in the least, but that keeps me hooked anyway. Maybe I'm just weird, but the best of eroticas just fail to get me going because I'm so invested in the characters that I kind of just glaze over the sex, no matter how well written. This, my friend, made me do that, and I thank you for that.
Now write more, or you're in for a spanking from a petite young reader.
You write so well, that I couldn't stop reading your stories & now I want to know what happens to the characters. There isn't an ending yet, hopefully they will stay together. We need you to finish the story, please. I really do care about the main characters. I have to know what happens next. It's been almost a year since you submitted this chapter. Thank you.
Please continue the story or bring it to it's conclusion. Your writing is wonderful. It's been a pleasure reading the Lena saga.
Who ever writes this story, I hope you are writing books. You are fantastic! Please, stop taking so long to post another sequel. Thanks!
Is it an abandoned story? There are several really good writers and stories that seem to be abandoned like an unwanted infant at a fire station. Iknow life forces many changes on usand our interests, concerns, and responsibilities intrude but to just drop it without concern is disconcerting at the very least. I hope you come back to this. I hope you are earning your living as a writer. You are very talented. Thank you for sharing.
After reading the first series, I happened to come across this continution. Stop teasing and give us more. ;-)
It has been almost a year, I hope you write another chapter soon. I check weekly with my fingers crossed hoping to see a new one posted. Please don't leave us in suspence much longer.
I've said this before, and I'll say it again. Girl, fo' realz, publish this as a complete book (once completed, of course). You're writing style is captivating, and you build the plot line and character development very well. So many of the stories on here are barely worth a glance. I was thrilled to find your work, where I found myself actually invested in the characters.
I agree with a few of the other commenters, that there are minor aspects that are frustrating. Such as Lena following the young boy into danger. As an outside spectator, I roll my eyes at her naiveté and feel that she should have known better, given what she's been through. But her character is inherently innocent and pure at heart, or as much as it can be, given the nature of the story ;). But I also admit that I don't know where you are taking the story, so her moment of carelessness might easily play into the future storyline.
That being said, when is the next chapter coming out? Please don't keep us in suspense :)
I would love if you end this series ASAP...because i really cannot wait so long for new stories to arrive
It has been months you did not contribute much to this series...
... I BEG YOU ....PLEASE COMPLETE THIS SERIES AS SOON AS POSSIBLE...
i am literally dying to read more of it...i keep reading the previous stories on and on...and wait for the new ones to come.....this series is totally my favourite in this genre ...
please write ASAP...and save my soul..
Please, please keep writing!
The story, it's depth and overall content is absolutely splendid!
Waiting in heightened anticipation for the next part, please post soon!!!
Thank you for a breathtaking story!
Puh-leeeeeze Finish this?? Amazing story I've been following for so long the suspense is getting me! ~~~LT
I've been reading this forever please please wirtie part 2 soon I love this story so much been reading it since u started love it!
Don't leave me begging for more, don't abandon your readers. ...
Been following this whole story for a few years now and I love it - re-read so many times. Please post the next chapter soon! Xx
Another hot Story unfinished. From now on i will onyl read, coment and vote finished stories.
the taking of Lena has taken a more thrilling turn in this new episode of keeping her! I am very excited about the next chapter.. the suspense is building! wow fantastic beginning.. as well as continuation..
Why is it okay for LuvTractor to post offensive, troll-like comments throughout various chapters but not okay for someone like Doc J to take issue with those comments? Simply because he/she included his credentials in his comment!? She/He's obviously speaking about a larger issue beyond the scope of the story....an issue that LuvTractor was the first to bring up, in a far more offensive manner towards the author, IMO. Doc J had every right to be pissed off and every right to express it. The subject of rape should piss people off. I for one am glad Doc J decided to post publicly rather than PM LuvTractor because it gave me a new perspective worth examining.
Anyhoo, to the author, THANK YOU for returning to this story.... yr first sequel was what first drew me onto this website and it's talented writing like yours that keeps me hooked. Bravo and well done!
I really loved Renz and Lena. The only irritating part was Lena's being so Naive and stupid. After been through with horrific tragedy, she should be wary of the people and her sorroundings. How can she expect people to always saved her bcoz of her stupidity.
I am not an erotica reader but I stumbled across this on tumblr and decided "what the hell". I was captivated by your writing style from the beginning, and the story has been intriguing in both a confusing and what should be wrong way (i too work with sexual assault survivors and have some thoughts about the character relations and development, but it doesnt matter tbh). However, I think you could be writing about squirrels and I would still be captivated. Brilliant writing, I've enjoyed reading this very much.
Was just curious when you would post more of this story..
Very excited to continue reading. Love this.
I read the original series when you'd first started and am extremely glad you've continued! You're a fantastic writer and I look forward to your next installment!!!
ablondegoddess is simply magnificent. Her writing appeals to me in so many ways I can't stop reading. I force myself to stay awake and read through the night. She's wonderful and I'm a huge fan. Also, Dr. J. love you, too.
I think you were fairly respectful in your response to Luv. S/he open him/herself up to this type of criticism when s/he suggested our illustrious author ought to familiarize herself with a psychology textbook. I don't believe it was 'douchey' in the slightest to close your letter in the way you did. You were trying to upbraid a commenter who was him/herself acting douchey.
Just yea! I'm so glad you're continuing this story. Can't wait to read the next!
So good to see you're continuing the story, yay! Such a great chapter, and I LOVE the ending, I'm so glad this issue is coming up in their relationship, you built it up so well! I was wondering about it a couple times, as Renz has such a strong 'selfish prick' vibe to him when it comes to sex, and I LOVE all the angst and him having to face how he hurt her and how she was trying to communicate her anguish but someone wasn't listening etc.etc... so glad she showed her pain and anguish, instead of just at some point switching to 'i feel some action on my clit, so all must be ok' -type of thinking. oh man, it doesn't get much better than this, it's all so well-written too, of course, as always... just sooo yummy.... can't wait for the next chapter! xxx
I've been watching this thread for a while now, and I have to say that the response against Dr. J is ridiculous. I love how it's no problem for LuvTracker to basically be a huge bully to the author (one of his comments on one of the older chapters literally says, "You are fucking stupid"), but the second a fellow reader points out an unfair generalization LuvTracker makes about rape victims, INDEPENDENT of this story and the characters, there's immediate backlash. So basically, the only person protected under "free speech" in the fucked up Lit world is LuvTracker. Nice.
I agree that Lena can get annoying sometimes, but honestly, so does every character in a book you read that's longer than 5 pages. If I loved Lena and Renz all the time, I probably would have abandoned this story long ago. I think the author does a good job of making her characters believable. They are flawed and human. Obviously, what I would do is not the same as what a FICTIONAL CHARACTER will do, and that's okay. Not to mention, it's hardly like the author has made any promises about magically turning Lena into some wonderwoman with the kung fu skills to fight of three attackers. Lena's growth has been subtle and realistic given the timeline of this story imo.
Anon below me said it way better, but I'll just reiterate. If you hate the writing or the characters, and feel the need to leave a comment, then stick to criticizing THE STORY. And then when you're done, STOP FUCKING READING IT. LuvTracker has left like 7 different comments on different chapters all saying the same thing, which is totally tantamount to bullying. Dr. J had every right to be offended by what you said about RAPE VICTIMS IN GENERAL, and I applaud him/her for speaking out.
Guys, you're being too hard on Dr J.
LuvTracker could have critiqued Lena's behavior on the basis of story ("I feel like I've seen Lena in this situation before and it's getting repetitive"). S/he could have criticized Lena on the basis of character ("I think Lena previously showed more spine and this seemed like an uncharacteristic step backward"). And s/he could have criticized Lena simply for not following the narrative s/he wanted to see ("I would rather see her develop into an independent, empowering heroine.") These would all have been valid criticisms! But LuvTracker instead criticized her by invalidating and denying the experiences of 100,000s of raped and abused women who trusted people not worthy of trust. And by calling such victims "pathetic and stupid".
Dr. J was clearly angry, and wrote that response in anger. But honestly, if any of us know someone who has been raped...and the statistics say we all do, unless we're living under a rock...we should be angry too. Because rape victims are constantly told, by police, by attorneys, by friends, by loved ones, that they can't be telling the truth because what kind of pathetic loser would just follow that person into their apartment or let themselves be led away from their friends.
I get LuvTracker's point from a story perspective. It's not fun to see Lena as a damsel in distress who needs perpetual rescuing. I actually agree.
But there's a way to say that without perpetuating skepticism about women who end up in dangerous situations.
82% of rapes are committed by someone the victim trusted. These women weren't warned off by their instincts. That doesn't make them "pathetic and stupid". And the last thing a raped woman needs to hear is "I don't believe you, that's not possible, nobody's that much of a trusting idiot".
Dr. J isn't so upset because s/he is defending a fictional character. Dr. J is standing up for real women who are disbelieved and criticized after their suffering. Maybe we cut him or her some slack.
This story is actually good....More than sex, it offers a nice storyline. i hope u complete this story n move it to ur own blog.
Dr. J
Thank you for your detailed feedback on my story. I do appreciate your professional perspective, especially since you are a sex therapist! Let’s please try to keep the comment area respectful though, everyone’s entitled to their own opinion =).
Always happy to hear from a fellow goddess ;). I am working very hard at writing, I promise! I just posted an excerpt of Ch. 2 on my blog!
Niki
Let’s all be respectful please =)
Thanks for reading as much as you have, and thanks for your feedback! I’m sorry you’re not enjoying the story as much anymore, but I’m sure there are lots of other stories in this category with characters more suited to what you’re interested in.
“what the hell”
Let’s all be respectful please =)
“Glad”
I do try hard to keep the typos/grammatical errors minimal ;). Thanks for reading and thanks for the feedback!
And just a general note: let’s all please please pretty please be respectful to one another in the comment section. I’m not bothered if someone says something negative about my story or about me personally, but I am bothered when the comment section on my story is used as a platform for mean remarks between readers/fellow Literoticans. My hope is for this area to be a safe space for comments, critiques, reactions, and feedback, whatever it may be. Let’s keep it respectful please =).
With love,
B xoxo
I was saying in my comment that I found Lena meek and doormatty not you. I was saying I agreed with what you had said about her.
- Clare
Wasn't giving an opinion, he or she was criticising someone else's, that's why I defended luvtracker, and I wasn't lazy to read Dr j comment, I read 6 fricken pages on lit of this story before I got to the comments section, that comment just wasn't worth it, ....meek and doormatty you don't even know me, this site is not for calling people names or judging their point of view... we don't just get off from the stories on here some of us actually like reading our fantasies written out on paper so to say. My last point is to ablondegoddess, you are the reason I'm even on this site... the taking of lena was the first story I ever read on lit, so I have been waiting and expecting a lot from the next installment and don't get me wrong the steamy scenes were hottt! And I love Renz, I just wish lena had more than half a brain sometimes
Finally to the people on this page who don't know what they talking about...2 hands up flipping you off
Love
Niki... not nikki
I, too, have read Lena's story many times and am anxious for more. I didn't read the nasty comments and didn't finish reading any of the rebuttals. Don't care. Please....write on. Oh, I appreciate that you don't have any grammatical errors to distract me. Thanks
Dr. J, you definitely took it too far, and a post like yours really doesn't belong on a site with people who are largely looking to do no more than get off. At the same time, I can see how you'd be offended by LuvTrucker's post about normal victims/etc I agree that it's shitty to say all women are supposed to act the same way if they've been raped. That's not cool. But that's a comment you should have emailed directly to LuvTrucker. Posting it here with your degree is just making you look like an ass and you're not going to gain anything useful.
Case in point: we've got Nikki here defending LuvTrucker's opinion, while at the same time telling you you're not allowed to have yours, which she was too lazy to even read. The comment section on Literotica is not the place for you to try to get a meaningful dialogue or educated response from people.
First of all I really enjoyed this story at the start, as I thought the sex was mad hot. I'm a lover of darker noncon, so when the story moved towards the romance side of things I fell off it, although I have kind of continued to follow it (the sex is still hot!) I have to admit I find Lena's character a litte bit doormatty and meek just like Nikki and Luvtracker - but I get this story is aimed at readers who are into a different type of heroine to me which is fine. I kind of see her as someone who is what she is because there's been a lot of magical dick and she's been eaten out a lot to the point where she's gone googly-eyed. Again all good it's not a story really aimed at me cause I don't prefer that type of heroine or romance but there's plenty of people who read noncon who do and this story is well written and deserves the praise it has received. Point is we are all entitled to our own opinions and to like or not like something if we want to. I do think that the esteemed doctor is being super rude. Okay Luvtracker might be pointing things out in a less-than-strictly polite way, but in my view he makes some very valid points. To take personal offence and rant like this is a bit ridiculous. You've gotta love when a supposed psychologist rocks up to Lit to start critiquing people's comments and trying to flaunt a degree or two. Particularly when it's from the pov of "look at me I have a degree so all you people who don't like this story or want to be critical, your views are invalid! I'm the only one who's opinion is worth anything I HAVE A DEGREE!" I love when people with PhDs put Dr before their name too so bonus points there for being cheesy as heck. Anyway. Sorry to the author for carrying on like this in her comment section - I mean no offence to you, you're a wonderful writer with a great story. I'm only commenting cause I am stumped by the anon Dr comment is all.
Wtf is up with you...everyone has their own opinion, I didn't read you comment fully it's way too long for me but I don't care whether you a doc or not show some respect!!! No one asked your professional opinion lol.
Ps I totally agree with luvtracker...a person can only be so dumb
Sincerely
Niki
I'm excited for more. Thanks for great reads! Cheers!! Now get back to writing. Lol
I've been re-reading The Taking of Lena today (for easily the tenth or eleventh time now) and I've been noticing increasingly asinine comments from LuvTracker on your last few chapters, that were all left today. My gut tells me this is simply the “troll” feedback of someone who is either jealous of your writing or threatened by this story’s success. I’m not one into troll-baiting, but on the off chance this is a person who actually believes the absurdity he is writing, I feel compelled to post my own response based on the feedback left below, which, in my opinion, truly crossed the line, and has personally offended me:
Dear LuvTracker,
Full disclosure: I am a clinical psychologist by profession, specializing in sex therapy and sex trauma recovery. I spend my days helping victims of sexual abuse develop healthy ways to express their sexuality and have fulfilling sex lives. Based on the increasingly low-brow comments you’ve been leaving on these chapters, I think it’s safe to assume you are not a psychologist. Which means, dear troll, that you are in NO position to assume ANY kind of authority on this author's demonstrated ability to convey highly realistic human emotions.
I ask you this simple question: who the are you to make ANY kind of determination on how a woman can or cannot handle trauma? It's precisely this kind of "not-a-perfect victim/survivor“ mentality that makes it so hard for victims of sex crimes to seek justice against their perpetrators, or even to seek help for themselves. I take personal offense to your most recent comment, because of the sheer number of victims of sex crimes I see in my practice on a daily basis who cope JUST like Lena. These are the women who “freeze” like a deer in the headlights when they are stopped by someone in the street, who experience panic attacks when they think that someone is violating their personal space, and who are filled with anxiety when they think someone they love is going to leave them. Trauma, especially sexual trauma, is a complex and oftentimes insidious devil that affects different people in vastly different ways. Which means, there is no “normal” or “abnormal” way to handle trauma. Everyone experiences it differently, and everyone recovers on a different scale. Others bounce back immediately, and others take years. For you to suggest that there is some kind of perfect victim/survival behavior formula is a dangerous generalization that reflects the thoughts of someone who is clearly uneducated, uninformed, and likely misogynistic based on your belief that her “stupidity” renders her a guaranteed target for additional rape and violence. Shame on you.
With that said, I would like to shift the dialogue to what I believe this author does very well regarding survival. Lena’s reaction to the assault by the Romany/Gypsies in this chapter, in my opinion, is the perfect example of Lena’s growth as a character between the last story and this one. In The Taking of Lena, she copes by mentally “shutting down” and losing awareness of what’s going on around her. In the sequel, however, we don’t see Lena going into that delusional headspace anymore. While she is ultimately overpowered by the thieves (which is only natural, considering she was 1. outnumbered 3 to 1, and 2. she’s a small-framed woman in Victorian-era clothing) she NEVER loses her will to fight. The internal dialogue reflects an awareness of herself that suggests she knows she was once a victim, and is determined to not be one again. Yes she is saved by Ava (I applaud the author for allowing a female to be the “white knight” in this scenario), but she never succumbs to the victim mentality that prevailed in a large part of The Taking of Lena.
I’m going to take a cue from fellow fan Bella_Marie and save my additional praise for the author in another follow up comment, but let me conclude by saying this to you LuvTracker, and to all people who would try and criticize a woman for not handling her trauma “well” enough: you can go fuck yourself.
Sincerely,
Dr. J , Ph.D.
“omfg”
I’m so happy you enjoyed this chapter! Thanks for reading =).
“Yes!”
Thank you for the warm welcome, it’s certainly great to be back =).
Thank you! I do hope you continue to enjoy the sequel! I’ll be posting the first half on my blog this weekend =).
Anon “Yes!” (2)
I’m glad you enjoyed the chapter =). This comment has made my day!
“Extremely happy”
Thank you for the patience! I assure you the wait for chapter 2 won’t be anywhere near as long ;).
“I’m so glad…”
You’ll be seeing a lot more of Karl and Ava next chapter ;). I like them too!
“Brilliant”
Nothing wrong with a little healthy masochism ;).
Thank you for being willing to pretend this was worth the year wait ;). I really appreciate the feedback! And I’m especially happy to hear you were able to connect with the story on a personal level, that means a lot to me and thanks for sharing. I promise you won’t need to wait another year for chapter 2 =).
“Welcome Back”
Thanks for the warm welcome =)
It’s great to be back! =)
Thanks so much for the constructive feedback! Hopefully the next few chapters will clear that up a bit by revealing one big fundamental flaw with Renz the first part of the story didn’t quite explore ;).
“Confused”
It looks like this got cleared up in a separate comment before I had a chance to reply (thanks !). Thank you for reading =).
“Sash”
Thanks for the feedback! I really appreciate your analysis of this chapter. Ch. 2 is going to have a scene with Ava’s POV, so I do hope you enjoy that =). And I am glad you were able to appreciate Lena’s correction of Renz’s opinion of the Romany =).
I absolutely love receiving comments, you’ll never hear me complain about that =). Thank you so much for answering “Anon_Confused” and thank you for the amazing feedback! You’re so sweet!! I’m so happy you’ve been enjoying my story =).
Thanks for the feedback! I’m very flattered to hear I’m one of your favorites =). There is a big flaw with Renz (related to women and pregnancy) I’m hoping will be more elegantly revealed in the next chapter, but thanks for letting me know if it wasn’t very clear in this one. Thanks for sticking around for chapter 2 =).
Thanks for the feedback! Perhaps consider reading something else in this category that’s better written/more suited to your tastes =).
With love,
-B xoxo
For the lack of better word referring to Lena's intelligence.
Normal humans become traumatized and learn from their past experiences, they become paranoid and sometimes hyperaware especially of what happened to Lena. And you still want me to believe that such pathetic stupid person exist? She had a brutal past and she did not used those past experiences for self-preservation.
She was once again taken advantage of by thieves and rapists. Again.
Is this going to be a cycle because you have to seriously think about your character development. You insist that she is changing, but really she's not. She's the samw naive pathetic country bumpkin.
So author, take note. You need to read more of basic human psychology and survival. Because Lena will be dead and raped again and again and again and again by now if she truly existed.
Well written and captivating and sexy as usual! Although I do have to agree with Fefe428 a bit. .. this being manipulated so easily by his ex seems a bit out of his character, but I know you're setting the stage for anther wild ride, which I'm sure will be awesome :) and whatever blackmail she has on him must be pretty hard core. also, i can't imagine him encouraging Lena's heavy drinking after he's learned she is likely pregnant.... not trying to discourage you in any way, your writing is tied with one other author on here as my favorite! Please please write more and more as fast as you are able!