All Comments on 'The Neighborhood Slave'
by Gizmosgurl
- 9 Comments
Please stop writing, you have absolutely no talent! I would give you negative stars but even that would be a compliment to this horrific garbage!
The story was not consistent and it was a horrible story. Please proofread your story before submitting. In one paragraph he threw his pants on the bed and in the next he was unzipping his pants. I would never tell you to stop writing but try to get an editor next time.
but parts had me turned on how he took her for his pleasure
the way most black men take my wife
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Good start. Keep trying.
Just some constructive criticism, some proof reading would be good.
Absolutely hot! I'd love to be you and look forward to all that black loe and happily raise all their black babies.
The violence and abuse portrayed here is more racist than the interracial aspect of the story.
Theres nothing more exciting then a Strong Black Man that knew how to Take me and Make me his slut. There used to be a guy I seen in Porn name Mr Marcus I always wanted to fantasize about and wonder how he would Take me and make me feel on the end of him.