All Comments on 'The Red Ledger Vol. 03 - The End'
by LT56linebacker
- 48 Comments
"If you don't like this, there's no help for you"
That's as far as I got, never read anything by you and now never will. There's clearly no help for YOU if you think every reader will like what you've written, talk about being full of yourself.
A lovely romance, you should’ve put it in the Romance Section.
Thanks for a great story
Scores 5/5
Good ending to the story, I loved the other two, it took me a bit to tie them together. 5 stars for the series.
Schmaltzy, but well written and far better than the vast majority of what appears here. 5
I enjoyed this and went back to read David's Revenge again, I don't know about anybody else but I liked it, Glad you zapped the assholes, 5 stars on both
Wow…8 fucking months for part three…
BTW..what were part 1 and 2 about??? Forgot…and don’t hve the inclination to go back and read…
So I’ll just give it a 1 and say fuck u!
One of the best stories I’ve read here. Even felt my old eyelashes get a little damp from time to time.
You could be a very good author but one major flaw you have. It takes entirely too long for you to continue a story. By the time you post we have completely forgotten what the original plot was. Not very smart of you. I gave the story 1 star because of that!!!
I missed the Celeste connection early on and was wracking my brain trying to see the tie-in with the series (getting old). Nice dovetail and a really uplifting story! 5*
Anonymous about 2 hours ago
Wow…8 fucking months for part three…
BTW..what were part 1 and 2 about??? Forgot…and don’t hve the inclination to go back and read…
So I’ll just give it a 1 and say fuck u!
If you had the balls to go look how long ago one and two were written, then you would have been able to read them. Lastly, this was really a stand alone anyway. To bad you're afraid to write so we all could give you a big old one.
Very good story, but I'll follow suit with those who take issue with the length of time it took for this to hit the boards.
I didnt bother to go back and reread them but this was decent enough without spending the time doing that.
Could not get past first page. He deploys to country and Thinks it is muslim. Why is army at the embassy? Green berets would deploy with local army. When did usa take over Ethiopia? That is only way they could deploy with weapons wherever they want. Boma harem is Nigerian org. Etc etc. Garbage
Really liked the tie in from Houston to Ethiopia and back to Houston. Very interesting how the first two Red Ledger tales fit into this story. They are all good stories in and by themselves the three together bring a new dimension. Thank you for great tales. LP
I ahd to go back and read the first two again but it all fit nicely. Well done!
Well shit, that was great! A happy 5 for the entire series. I'm a bit behind on my LT56 reading, because I like to go in chronological order, and haven't been able to tackle "Product Liability Lawsuit" because it follows on a S56, and I just haven't found the time to read through, in chronological order, HIS epic linked stories. But since this one was a follow-on a series I'd already read, I figured it was OK to catch this volume 3. Glad I did. Loved it. And now, for some constructive criticism for this fine author. First point, and I'm assuming the author can have some control over this, is that there are a couple of screwups on his list of submissions. The "Perfect Crime" 7-part series is listed twice - the duplicate listing should be removed. And on "The Red Ledger" itself, the posted "The Red Ledger-Life Goes On" (whose listing appears below that of this Volume 3) is a duplicate of the original "The Red Ledger - Life, Such As It Is" and therefore should be pulled from the site. Another glitch, not on the list of submissions, is that in this story, "Shawn" occasionally becomes "Sean" - I mean, I knew who he was talking about, but this is something better proof-reading (with eyes, not software) would have caught. And finally, the continual shifts between first and third person narratives should be resolved in favor of one or the other. Or, if LT56 really feels the perspectives should remain as they are, then the shifts between first and third should be highlighted by something like "*************" between them. LT56 writes excellent stories, for the most part, and there's no reason why the technicalities shouldn't be on a consistent par with the inspiration.
QM
This is a nice romantic story.
The constant changes between first and third person were disconcerting and thankfully seemed to end before the end of the story.
I see you have nearly mastered the movie script writting style. You just forgot to put 'NAME:' of person speaking in front of all those sentences.
This story kept getting better by the chapter!
GREAT JOB.
ABSOLUTELY loved the characters ❤ 😀
The abrupt change from 3rd to first person just after Donald saved the doctor was annoying. Don't do that. (I quit reading after that, so I don't know her name.) Also, keep the names the same. It was Shawn in the 1st chapter, Sean in the second, and back to Shawn in this one. Pay attention.
More of this Backer. You’re good at it. Just really good atory telling, and a story worth telling, with uplifting about outcomes. One diverse couple who are rock solid for each other throughout and thus deserve the very best of what life and each other have to offer. And, a couple whole first spouses were trash, and ended up in the trash where they belong with the two faithfuls hooking up in perfect symmetry in the end, as they should.
As an 83 year old Marine, I thoroughly enjoyed the story. Good plot. Thank you and top rating, of course.
Damn, you know how to write one and put it clean out of the Park, bringing home three loaded bases! Sure you need some work but you know how to write N.Y. Top 10 Best Sellers! I f you ever need help contact me! 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS. Thank you!