by KaneSubotai
Good premise.
But sex is MUCH too fast. Starting. Continuing. Finishing.
All that setup about her breasts and nipples, and then nothing with them?
Nothing with her ass?
No description of her pussy? (And VAGINA is internal, not external.
An editor/proofreader would help. You wrote "...vice-like..." but you meant VISE not VICE.
Three stars.
I like this story and the two main characters. Let's see where this goes. More please.
Yes, I have to agree with the other comments. It was a good start now all you have to do is finish the story like so many of your other stories all incomplete.⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️