- Incest/Taboo
- Unbridaled
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All Comments on 'Unbridaled'
by Fatdog25
- 36 Comments
A well weaved story. Flow was good, But the elephant in the room remained: children
and birth control were skipped over. Could been addressed, throwing in another plot
twist. Ah, but there was too much fun to be had…. 5⭐️
M
Great story! Well paced and well told. Not sure of the Nude Day connotation but a great story on it's own.
Keep writing and keep posting. Your fans need you!
Cheers
SAGE
What's this weak-assed crap? Guy getting restrained and slapped like it's all OK? Painful read
Only wish I could have given it two or three 5s! Well written, awesome storyline!
The sudden transition to the first sex scene was a little harsh, but otherwise, great story.
Thanks!
Well done.
I would have thought a couple with their intelligence and no-nonsense personality would have discussed birth control and kids.
Perhaps he knows she's on the pill so there was no need to bring it up?
Children would have been an interesting conversation, though probably not during the cruise.
You developed such nice charactets, how about an annual follow up?
They need not be long, just let us know how they're adjusting and any new habits they develop.
Great story!! Loved the cruise idea. The talk about birth control should have taken place before the first sex. After the first sex they should have talked on how kids were going to come into play as their mom would be after Sherry to get married and give her grandkids.
Very good story. Very well written. A great lead in and a wonderful finish. Great ending that did not leave me wondering how things ended. Thank you.
Good story, would have been nice if you let them pretend to be married and have some kids together. So they can tell the parents that they are grandparents.
You got that right Fatdog25, skin cancer SUCKS. Use sunscreen people.
I had a spot of basal cell carcinoma on my neck, thankfully, it was all removed successfully.
Quite good, with an eye-popping cruise to REALLY get their relationship started off with a bang!
Moving seems best, and BC discussions were lacking, although, it was quite obvious both were sexually active previously, without resultant children.
Hello!
I'm not sure, but I think that this story is one of only 4 or 5 on this site that really rate in very high marks. And by high marks, I mean a score of 100 out of 100.
That, being based on every aspect that makes a story satisfying, readable and memorable.
It's pretty rare for me to find a story on here that warrants no negative marks, and I'll be the first to admit that I'm picky.
I've read hundreds of works on this site, and while a decent percentage can be described as good, most rely too much on common trends in descriptory language, unnecessary vulgarity, character promiscuousness, mysoginism and overly inflated physical dimensions to allow the stories to be really meaningful.
Basically what this means, is that if you write a story that reads like well written page turning novel of fiction that's very interesting, I'm yours for life.
And this story meets that classification totally.
I REALLY loved how the story carried way for the first page and a half or so, establishing its plot and characters in solid detail and impactful sentences without any incident of sex at all.
The maintaining of monogamy among the principle characters was very strongly appreciated in a setting that could have easily led into group sex and partner swapping by so many other authors.
It's nice to know that genuine love stories aren't dead.
I also loved that you included a M to F trans person among a seemingly all hetro passenger roster in the story.
The cruise ship concept you've used here seems very original, and makes me wonder if they might actually be a reality. That it was portrayed with such respect to all the participants was certainly a breath of fresh air.
The sex descriptions were all quite delicious, and that Ronnie and Sherry didn't have sex every day was also thoughtful, particularly after their epic performance in front of their new friends.
I want to formally thank you very much for posting this wonderful story that you obviously put a great deal of thought into, and hope very much for the creation of a second chapter detailing Ronnie and Sherry's new life in Kansas City!
THANK YOU!!!
Sincerely,
B4PW.
This is great writing. Proofread and edited properly. The character development was very good. The dramatic part was excellent. And the sex was wild! I love discovering little nuggets like this story in the vast mine of stories on this site.
This was probably one of the best stories I have read on here in a long time. I read it in one sitting as I didn't want to stop. I used to hate multiple chapter stories, but I have actually come to enjoy them. I feel like the mark of a great story is that it leaves me wanting more. This one definitely did that. I can't help but wonder, did their family finally accept it, did they end up having kids, what other trials did they face once they got back to the real world.
The lead up to them consummating their relationship was almost perfect. I might have added more conversation about how they felt for each other before they jumped into bed together, but otherwise it was a perfect story. Thank you for putting so much effort into it.
Advice from a Flight Attendant (not me!) -
"Don't or try not to wear shorts when you're on an airplane.
It's the same thing as the window, you never know how clean it's gonna be, so if you have pants, you're gonna have less germs."
So, if you don't want your legs soaking up all of those nasty germs, opt for something long instead."
Fantastic sexy tale. More please. Eager to know what happens with the rest of the family and if they make a baby.
I have to be honest I never thought I would be reading this story. Once I started I couldn't quit so here I am at the end and writing that if anyone reads referals then this one will keep your interest from the first word to the last.
Thanks for allowing me to be part of your time and effort.
You did a great job. While the sex just for the sake of sex in the beginning put me off a little, Ronnie and Sherry actually making love for the last leg of the cruise eased my pain. It wasn't really the intimate love story that I would have wanted, but it's not just a fuck fest either. 4/5
BTW...I forgot to mention that I'm very familiar with Harlingen, Mercedes, McAllen, and Brownsville. I've run Greyhound trips down there with the charter company that I used to work for many many times. Kerrville Bus runs too. So that's something that clicked with me and gave me a better enjoyment for your story. I've flown in and out of the Harlingen airport several times during the late 1970s and early 1980s when The Confederate Air Force still had their big warbird airshow every year. Great memories!
Extraordinary, and not one mention of measurements of the participants. Thank you for this story.
A great story, one of the best I read here and, as Bucks7T2 already mentioned, not one measuring or even a "wow, what a big cock" or something stupid. Thanks for that!!
The past 3 story's iv read have been like this one and I'm honestly going to miss reading them
Great story! How about a follow up, let them have kids, it would be a great sequel.
Yet another brilliantly written story. I am working my way through your stories one by one.