by llambert
You need to Proof Read before Posting!
Example - "A young woman, about college age was laying face down on the sidewalk in front of a closed Chinese supermarket. The way she was laying, he could say the white of panties underneath her black skirt."
I think he would be more likely to 'see' her panties than to 'say' them!
but this one does not have one shred of credibility.
I really enjoyed the "reluctant sex". I think you have a great idea here. Unlike some, grammar doesn't turn me on.
Correction:
laying - lying (The former means to actively put something down, the latter 'to recline')
The warming therapy seemed so unrealistic, a 911 operator would never have a stranger do such things to an unconscious girl.
It was great, but a bit too short for an...ah...erotic story.
"author" confuses the verbs "to lie" and "to lay" as well as the nouns "hypothermia" and "hyperthermia". piss poor self edit. one star.