- Incest/Taboo
- Wrong Number
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All Comments on 'Wrong Number'
by TrampsAnThieves
- 22 Comments
I liked the format (it was different) and was enjoying the developing storyline and banter between them, but I started to suspect where this was going and was hoping that I was wrong. Unfortunately, I wasn't and it was my own fault that I didn't read the story rosa-blanca.ru that gave the hint. Turned me off in the end. Sorry
Not thrilled that this isn't labeled/tag to let us know it is an incest story.
Not bad but still needed work the flow was fine until we reached dialog sections that weren't texts at those points it should have shifted to a regular story style... other than that it was perfect
Was unsure at first, but glad I stuck with it. Figured it out about half way through. Very clever story writing. 5⭐s
Not sure if this moved categories, or what - this is in the incest/taboo category (now). Given that, unless we were assuming the incest was from the ex-wife / nephew, the only options were the daughter or the niece, as no one else was mentioned in the story.
Anyway, other than it feeling like there was too little emotion from Jerry in/re his wife's cheating, it was an interesting and decently written story.
A novel way of writing this story. It is an interesting experiment. It was not hard to see through/figure out but interesting concept just the same.
The father never mentioned incest or possible birth defects. Seems irresponsible.
I had it figured out pretty quickly. Of course the category helped.
It’s still interesting to me that some readers still worry about things like birth defects in this imaginary world.
Great flow and pacing. The idea is fabulous. I’ll definitely be reading more from you.
5*
Tc
Over 2-weeks of single line texting for any activity to occur was a tad overkill that significantly changed to the divorce processing side.
The story started the intrigue but the multi line texting with no definitive activity, from my perspective, dropped the ball.
Beautiful build-up to some explosive sex. Loved the reveal at the coffee shop, though I had pretty much worked out it was the daughter by that time
Would have been hard pressed to have not sent the pictures to mom's sister.
Sure, mom cheating freed dad up to be with her, but mom cheating *also* hurt dad so surprised she wasn't only too happy to hurt mom.
"If you didn't love Dad you should have just offered to divorce him when that happened."
I knew it was Jerry's Daughter Jess,she just seemed so determined and patient.What a fool and rotten ass cheater Mom turned out to be,but what she threw away her Daughter ended up getting.
Jess bless her heart was the absolute perfect daughter to be there for her Dad,but also for her guns blazin' attitude to replace her Mom as Jerry's Future Wife and Mother of his Children.It just astounds me how the author portrayed the characters in this story with 85 or 90% text talk with the rest being normal conversation and of course Jess finally getting and fucking her dad Jerry.Its like they say "all's well,that ends well" and Jess and Jerry can live their lives without Jess's Mom in it. Awesome story author.
Oh fantasy world. Mom don't give a fuck. Her sister don't give a fuck. Dad don't give a fuck. Cousin fucker don't give. Daughter right on it just because hey every daughter wants dad or something. Plow away I guess.