All Comments on 'The Gatekeeper Pt. 01'

very hot story, would love to read whats next :)

Oh my god, this is just incredible

Good one. Any chance we read about professor mark sampling the other naive beauties he noticed? I am sure some of his colleagues are doing the same, especially the older, tenured ones. Consider writing about their escapades as well.

I need to add to my comment before. This has lived rent free in my head since reading it.

You've managed to put some genuine evil into a protagonist that mostly recognises it, but still make it seem like they're acting benignly. It's captivating.

I don't know if it needs to be written explicitly, but it tantalises ... thinking about the inner monologue of the poor student as she realises what she needs to do and fights against it so much. The takedown happening over such a long period, the patience, it's something that I haven't seen written so well anywhere.

I'm very much looking forward to the next chapter, and seeing how the noose is tightened while she remains unaware with the full knowledge that the denouement will eventually happen once she is finally unable to escape.

Delicious is the only word that I can come up with to describe how your writing feels.

The premise is good and suitably sinister, but the multiple instances of bad grammar really throws off the rhythm of the work. It needs a proper proof reading and editing pass.

I'm still interested in seeing the next chapter, as I've mentioned, the core is good, just in need of some polishing.

Man this was well-written but by the second half I just wanna give this girl a hug and tell her it's gonna be okay.

Amazing story, can't wait for the next chapter

loved the slow manipulation that resulted in brainwashing her