All Comments on 'Autumn'
by onehitwanda
- 168 Comments
Oh my god, I really missed getting to read new stuff from you. You spoiled us a while back, you know, and I hold you personally responsible for me checking for new stories daily (tragically, not an exaggeration). And, of course, it's everything I was hoping for, and a brilliant start to my day. Thank you for taking the time to write, edit, and publish this for us! I will say that the whole "married and happily ever after" part is usually less interesting to me than your more open endings, but it does make a lot of sense structurally with regards to the introduction, and you did write it so elegantly that I didn't actually mind. So: Loved it! Be back at some point, please? :)
What a sweet story. Reminded me of my own experience with my wife, thank you for this.
Holy hell, your stories are always amazing, but this was even a cut above the rest. Just wanted to say good job, and that I love your writing, it has that rare quality on this site of being well written, even if it was compared to ‘normal’ stories, not just smut. Thanks for a new read. :)
Absolutely awesome. Great characters, great development. I felt the emotions as if I was there. Superb as always. Thank you
Hit me with your best shot! If this little gem is it, then I’ll be quite contented. But I’ll happily await your next story in the hopes that it’s at least as good. One very minor quibble…a king reigns, but one reins in horses and emotions.
There are few things that compare to the feeling of opening my feed and seeing a new Wanda story. Phenomenal as always.
A very heartwarming story. It was obvious from early on how it would end and there was no distracting trauma. It's hard to believe that 7 pages were involved when actually so little happened in actual events. Being written in the first person you get all the emotional thinking of a woman who has a lot of history and has never given herself a chance to reach out emotionally. I understand her reluctance to get involved sexually with men after her two years as a prostitute, but assuming that her daughter was about 5 when she gave up the profession and she's 25 at the time of her marriage to James that means that Rachel has been celibate for about 20 years. Hard to imagine. Still worth 5*
Absolutely loved this! Caleb and Rachel are so good together, they fit together perfectly, and love each other deeply. Loved your physical descriptions -- the sexy fine hair on his chest, which I imagine covers his chest and abs, his delicious cock and balls. You've got great lovers here who deserve every good thing than can come their way, or cum their way!
All the right elements in balance to create the sympathy, reflect the pain, display the trauma, reveal the thoughts and feelings of all involved, illustrate all the experiences, progressions and fine shades of meaning, life and pain...what did you miss? Nothing that I can tell. Great pacing, nothing rushed, not one iota out of place, not a single thing seeming unnatural nor unneeded. Exceptionally well-developed, slow-rolled, advanced and concluded. A hands-down 5 stars without any reservations.
So many of your pieces resonate with me — “Falling”, “Jetsam”, “Sketching Sophie”, “Kelpie” to name but a few. This piece is a poignantly beautiful romance that for me centers on the mother and daughter, yet I never really got to know the mother — the central figure in this romance — or the early mother-daughter relationship. So much attention is devoted to Caleb, which makes sense for the storyline, but what about her past and what she gave painfully; we never really know, yet that is what defines her. So I enjoyed this piece, but felt like I never got beyond the here/now — never got to know her. By the way, I agree that you can judge a book by a page chosen at random. In this case, not so sure — overall wanted more because I expected so much more. Love your creativity.
This is the first of your stories that I've read, and I absolutely love it!
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Lovely and layered story. 40 is not old by any standards js. Thanks for sharing.
As always, your story touches something in me. Absolutely stunning, well written and lovely through and through. Thank you.
OMG secrets are so hard. Releasing them harder, the reward, you captured it! So bittersweet. So good. We don't deserve you. Thank you.
I don't read a lot of straight romance but this was beautiful. Absolutely loved it.
Just one thing though. What was the Billy Joel song?
Piano man wouldn't fit.
Angry Young Man she'd have to sprint down the aisle.
This is the first of your storied I have read and I am blown away by your talent. I can't wait to read more.
Just... perfect. I wish it could've been even longer, but only because it was absolutely perfect, and I didn't want it to end. Marvelous...as usual.
I have to say this is an absolutely outstanding piece of work. All the technical aspects have been well and truly ticked; but what made this for me was just how real the characters were - especially given how awkward some of the conversations needed to be. Thank you for sharing this, I’ll be going through the back catalogue now…
I have to say this is an absolutely outstanding piece of work. All the technical aspects have been well and truly ticked; but what made this for me was just how real the characters were - especially given how awkward some of the conversations needed to be. Thank you for sharing this, I’ll be going through the back catalogue now…
Your best EVER, but I am an impossible romantically inclined optimist. WOW! 5 TO THE 5TH POWER.
Rachel is lucky. She has found someone who understands, someone she can tell her secret to. I've had a secret for 39 years. There is only one person I could tell, but I don't know where she is or if she is even alive. I can never tell anyone but her. No one would ever understand, everyone else would judge me for it.
5 stars! only because I can't give you 7 ...
You had me in tears throughout ... I guess I'm just a softy.
I'm an old man ... and something must have gotten in my eye ... there that tear took care of it.
I was supposed to go to bed at a reasonable hour last night because I had an early start today. Wait a second, a new Onehitwanda story just dropped? Sleep can wait; I will just have to rely on caffeine to do its magic in the morning.
Thank you for continuing to share your works here. All of your stories, including this one, are beautifully written, full of delicate and evocative turns of phrase. I am already impatient for your next story.
Oh Wanda. Bookend weddings and slow, hot languid love and sex in between. And your trademark fixing of something, er, someONE broken. The only bad thing about this story was that it took me days to find it and finish it. Thank you for it.
Just… Delicious. Reading this through, and for me it feels like an emotional spectrum viewed from a moving roundabout, that we had one complete revolution of and we experienced every single colour as we passed through it. Very, very good Wanda, many thanks for writing and posting, cheers Ppfzz. 5⭐️ Of course.
We need more than 5 stars for this one.
BTW I really liked your truama / cow analogy.
There are always two pleasures to finding a new story from onehitwanda. The first is anticipation when you see the new story tag because you know, whatever category the story is in, that it will be well crafted with characters you care about and moving storylines. And sex scenes so well written that they are almost lyrical. Then you read the story and the anticipation becomes delight. I have just one word to describe this latest edition to the onehitwanda collection: beautiful.
Amazing. You made the lives of these people so interesting and moving. The real adventure is always the inside game but very few can write it with passion, purpose, excitement, and tension.
Utterly perfect, as always. Cherish the knack you have for creating and communicating. It's precious.
What a delightful story! Your heroine was both three dimensional and believable. Nice pace, well done.
Very nice, I can't believe all the dust that gets in my eyes. Five stars.
What a burden to have hanging around your heart all those years. Great story that was touching and loving, thanks.
For someone who hadn’t had any sex, including masturbation, for over 20 years and who carried a ton of psych baggage from her days of prostitution, she certainly jumped his bones rather quickly. It seemed so out of character. It would have been far more believable if he’d shown at least a little reservation upon hearing her background and if she’d taken more time before tumbling into the sack. 4*
How can I possibly say what wells up within me right now from reading this? I don't know if it's it's possible. If words are there to do it, I'm not sure that they've yet been formulated for proper transference from human psyche to human tongue. I can only try..
The wondrous beauty of the inner spirit scabbed over and hidden by the superatiing wounds of life and sometimes apparantly necessary evil choices of life when no others appear to avail themselves, and those themselves walled away from prying eyes and judgemental minds until it seems there is no entryway admitting of the possibility of letting the beauty out for fear of the exposure of the other--- that may be and I think is the greatest evil ever worked on the human mind and spirit to keep the inherent beauty forever hidden and unacknowledged until it withers and dies and we with it. Love and courage. These two are the attributes most necessary to free the spirit and its innate beauty. That, I think, is what was really meant by "Know you the truth and the truth shall set you free." Your story epitomizes that. Thank you.
Beautifully and eloquently written. The descriptive prose and emotionality of the story was full on and refreshing. Naysayers be damned! ;-)
A truly wonderful story, so beautifully written and such a pleasure to read.
You are such a talented author, by far the best of those who post their stories on this website. I've read most of your back catalogue now, without exception they stand out for their quality.
Thank you so much for sharing, you can see from the many comments below how appreciative your readers are - you can certainly count me as a fan.
More London-based stories please (he types selfishly, having lived in London for many years) ;-)
"one hit" wanda. Yeah, sure. As we say on this side of the pond, knocked it out of the park..... as usual. The frequency of your home runs makes them practically monotonous. :)
Once again a fine ,tale written with exceptional skill. One day when I grow up I want be able to convey emotion through words as well as you do. Superb.
Simply splendid storytelling with the perfect blend of romance, love and sex. The sexual aspects of the story enhanced the overall work rather than overwhelming it. Thank you for your sensitive approach to a loving relationship with the sexual pleasures of said relationship an expression of the term “making love.”
Mum, when used as a name, like all names, should be capitalized.
Signed: Another Harsh Critic.
What a quandary! You have accrued so very much goodwill in a name that is utterly, almost comically unsuited to you. I had you listed among my favorite authors, but hadn't revisited my list of favorites for awhile when I discovered how productive a year 2022 has been for you. I'm taking the 2022 vintage in alphabetical order. />
Yours is a singular talent. I place you in a pantheon that includes Maonaigh and JCMcNeilly. Your writing is technically perfect (no small achievement, that!) but you plumb the human heart and soul. That's what makes your descriptions of your characters' lovemaking so evocative and uplifting. />
Rachel is broken. She accepted the cracks and fissures sacrificially for the sake of her child. Already captivated by this magnificent woman, Caleb instantly appreciated what an integral part Rachel's sacrifice played in shaping who and how she is. As Leonard Cohen put it, the cracks let the sun shine through.
Another tear-jerker. Beautiful story.
On a side note, I loved the trauma / cow analogy. Glibness hiding, or maybe enhancing, the profundity, and hilariously simply and well put. Up there with Terry Pratchett in those terms. Incredibly impressed.
Marvelous storytelling! This was a perfect blend of romance, pathos and erotica. Your achievement is all the more notable in that the story was written in the first person; something that in the hands of most authors becomes stilted and monotonous. Bravo! 5 stars
You are officially my favourite author on this site. This was even better than all the romance books I’ve read over the years. It was like watching a movie. Perfection!⭐️
What a beautiful love story. Thank you for sharing your gift in writing wonderful stories.
Please, all LW British authors, come together, and in a group, resolve to never again write about mouth curls, lip curls, and the like. It make my brain curdle to read those descriptions. A mouth can have a smile. It doesn't need to "curl" into a smile, or, God forbid, a sneer or other mouth action. After you've all come to that agreement, swear on your King's crown, that you will somehow drop the term, "gusset" from your vocabularies. What a mood killer that word is.
They don't get any better than this. The people are real, plausible humans, the plotting is powerful, the writing is flat out superb. What a writer!
Totally magnificent. The characters are plausible and convincing — so real I want to meet them. I love that this is about real adults, with real wounds and hard won courage. Bravo, bravo!