All Comments on 'Born of Fire'

Very good, but I think it would have been better if she had not had exposure to the porno and had only petted with the boy friend. A true virgin first time.

good but u could use some words to make it more erotic

When I compare the garbage submitted every day to Literotica to what I have just read, I'm surprised that the first 2 comments contained some negativity. This was a refreshing and sexually exciting story!

Thank you all for the comments. Actually, I don't see the first two comments as negative at all -- I think the points are well taken and I might actually rework the story on the basis of those suggestions (just for my satisfaction). There's always room for improvement!

they were suggestions to improve the story for that persons scenario. I liked the story and also didnt care for the boyfriend in it. It is written from the viewpoint of having actually happened and came across as a girls story of her sex life. I dont understand how she was protected from pregnancy and see that as a detriment of the story. Smart as she was that is something she would have been prepared for. The girl would make a very nice mate, pet, sex toy for a man. She radiates what a man needs to be alive and successful in life. A very well written story, something seriously missing in Lit these days.

That........was.......amazing.....!

Beautiful writing, it all seemed so real! You're very very talented!

Good but u could use some words to make it more erotic. Narrating more in action,elaborate erotic feeling.

Hindu society can create artificial boundaries like caste....... but when it comes to natural selection..... the alpha Male always wins... irrespective of his caste.....hindu women must choose their own Male

Very well written, real, floating lightly into tantalising sex! Dark, dank, musty but in a wonderful world of ecstasy!