by ywbyj
I am enjoying the story and characters, well written and interesting. My only complaint is how short each one is and this one seemed shorter then the rest. Just settling in and it is over.
But it won't stop me from reading them, just an observation. I look forward to the next one.
I like how you're writing this. Perhaps you could inject a bit of conflict somewhere, or reluctance, as they become more intimate - they are distinct individuals and won't always agree on everything. Perhaps she wants to move in together, and he isn't quite ready for it, or she becomes comfortable enough with their intimacy to propose a level of kinkiness that catches him off guard? Perhaps she has some inner insecurities about her weight that he has to overcome?
Also, the BBW seems to be a bit more masculine in her thoughts than most women I've known - perhaps give her a more feminine perspective on love and relationships?
Great work - gave all four parts 5 stars - perhaps linger a bit longer on the sex scenes, such as showing her thoughts and sensations as she nears orgasm?
Oh man.. PLEASE write a bazillion more chapters, this is one of the best stories Ive ever read. SOOO fucking hot!!!!!
Sorry to be that dude...buut briefly as 'Captain Pedantic' -
It's 'T.A.R.D.I.S.' [Time And Relative Dimension in Space per Susan] NOT "tardis".
'Captain Pedantic' - out!
Still a cracking good story!
I like the characters, agency, respect and believability. But also your approach to copious cum and titty play is really nice