All Comments on 'Downfall of Heroines Ch. 03'

I was worried that this was an abandoned series so this was a delightful surprise, especially with the cliff hanger from Ch. 02, I wanted to see what would happen to Vivian, and wow that's kind of sinister to be turned into a demon!

I can't feel too bad about the girls though, they seem to be having a great time, as did I, reading this!

This chapter took me a bit to finally find a direction that inspired me. Even then, I wasn't happy with the beginning, though once Vira got into the action, I began to really enjoy it. Sometime down the road I should be doing a chapter 4, once I feel the inspiration again, I just kinda work that way.

You have a very sensual writing style, which amplifies the gross out factor of all the monsters but still makes everything else really hot. I love the way the story is going, it's exactly my cup of tea with the whole "corruption of innocence" thing going on.

Please do get inspired again, sooner rather than later because this is some good shit.

To those who have been enjoying my little story...

Is there anything you would like to see in the next installment? Or perhaps a direction for the story to take that you would find inspiring?

I am looking to further the story, and some new ideas would be great!

Shereena

Since you ask,

we have no idea what Vivian's master originally had planned for them. Do you think this was part of his deal or would he be infuriated that his once-loyal servant had been stolen from him by these demons? Somehow I don't know if the undead get along with the demons...

Alternatively the demons could send the girls out on some mission, maybe to go seduce [demon]. There, you now have an excuse for a road trip where more eldritch abominations lurk.

Additionally, as of now we've had demons and undead. Are there mages in this world? Vampires? Werecreatures? Ghosts? Shapeshifters, either the change-body-part-at-will or the everything or nothing kind? Are there supernatural creatures that are independent from the above factions, who are equally monstrous but operate differently and/or for their own agenda? Giant arachni, cockatrices, etc...

I wouldn't stay in this inn/basement though. Send them somewhere else, whether by escaping, sending them on a mission or getting abducted/rescued by [faction].

Please don't keep us in suspense for too much longer.

Your work is excellent; grosses me out so much but not enough to make me stop due to your fine writing technique. But is there no righteous happiness to be had with this story? Corruption of innocence in such terrible manner...

Ok I hoped the girls will be rescued properly by their holy mates and cleansed from all the demonic changes to them, but this being whaat it is, why not gross me out some more and make either of them temporarily come to her senses and witness the defiling both of them are going through, her own powerlessness to do anything about it at that point and maybe make a choice between suicide or escape or battle if she got enough strength for it, or even willingly succumb to it, perhaps through acceptance of more mind altering demon potions?

Then I can read and despair, or be happy depending on how you make their fate. :(

This story is so dark, sultry, erotic and absolutely scorching HOT!!! I love how Vivian is so seductive and demonic now. I'd love to see more of her crawling on all fours and wiggling that juicy ass of hers before she devours and slurps fat demon cock. Everything about her is just fantastic, and the grotesque nature of the demons and undead is so gross but makes it so interesting. I'd love to see more of Vivian, maybe like what someone else has said; they have a mission. Thus a trip to a new area, new landscapes. And perhaps it backfires. I'd love to see Vivian thinking she has it all in control and is subjected to a ruthless throat banging and gang bang. Getting to absolute submissiveness and corruption is a perfect place to take this story in my opinion. And perhaps there is some more fun that could be had with this set of demons. Seems like they are not quite finished with enjoying their new sluts. Could make the next chapter rather long but it'd be worth it. You should corrupt the whole damn order of female paladins!

are there "natural born" female demons? Do the males come into existence as corrupted human men? This could also be explored.

great writing, but it needs to be completed. please.

Just waiting on the approval process. And, I am faster than G.R.R. Martin :P

Loved it!