All Comments on 'Emily Untethered Ch. 04'
by Mentalcase
- 12 Comments
Christine's interlude was poorly written imo. She just arrives and immediately move in as forgiving her was natural and obvious, repeating the same things.
Then there are her tears, then the slaps from Emily, then she alternates between horror at her daughter's stories of California and being snide about the fact that her father wouldn't want her anymore.
In the end we found out that the only thing she came here for were the money and she even speaks freely on the phone about it in close range to Emily.
After that scene there's no emotional backlash for Emily and her father, none whatsoever apart from being mentioned.
It all felt awfully incoherent, and kinda ruined this chapter for me...
Seeing Emily and her father close to sex sure looks good, until her mother showed up out of the blue. But Emily finally confronting her shows she has character and loves father. Her mother pretty much showed her true colors as a bad person who never regretted cheating on Emily's father and return only to take away his money. Unforgivable. A normal Christian will never go that low unless he/she truly regrets their sins and actions. Emily's mother is the ultimate sinner.
Anonymous-E
a little odd, but I'm glad you got it out of the way, you know? It certainly didn't detract from the story, for me, at least! I'm dying for the next installment, but I'm not trying to tell you to hurry; take all the time you need. I'm getting better at handling the withdrawal twitches, lol... five stars! (of course)
-Anubelore :-)
I've quite enjoyed this, but you're dragging it out. Four chapters in and daddy and daughter still haven’t fucked. Some build up is nice but there are limits.
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I enjoy reading your story's and I have like to know if where are more chapters of Emily untethered?
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Could you please do another chapter of this story. I'm thoroughly enjoying it.
Another fabulous well written series. I can't believe that you ended it over a year ago. I was so looking forward to seeing this scenario continues on!
What about the daughter. She nedds him more.
Some of the comments are a little harsh. I agree that Christine turning up was a little brash and didn't feel realistic but you could have capitalised on the emotions of such an event pushing them closer together. The sexual tension has been built amazingly and I can only aspire to achieve this in my own stories. I can't believe I have waited so long to properly read this as I have been a massive fan of Mike's stories.