All Comments on 'Emma's Thrall'

Excellent story. Being a nerd myself, I cant wait to see what happens between Emma and Kitty.

That was hot. And interesting which isn't necessarily the same thing. Looking forward to more of this.

Very interesting and exciting concept. Great writing as well.

Can't wait to read more

Incredible story, hot and some unexpected turns of events. Way longer than the previous ones which in my opinion is a good thing. I'm really looking forward to reading more of this 😌

First off, excellent story. Secondly, this was so incredibly hot, beautiful and sad. You did a spectacular job of pointing out how people who seem to have it all will still have so many problems that we would never think of and can be so much worse than ours. It is wonderful how she has learned to trust Liz although considering how much time she has spent in Liz’s head without her knowledge, she could drop her into trance and wipe it all without a problem. I guess that is the trouble with one person holding all the power. It is also one of the reasons I don’t easily trust shrinks, no matter how badly I need one.

I can’t wait to read more.

J.D.

JD:

Thanks for you comment. I appriciate your analysis, and yeah, there's gonna be some sadness in this story. Not everything is sex and control.

Regarding you mistrust of therapists, I hope you will reconsider that position. For the most part, they are trustworthy people who want to help you work through your problems. Emma's therapist is certainly the white whale exception. If you think you need a therapist, shop around until you find one that clicks.

I wish you the best, and thanks for your comments.

Care has power. When a submissive feels cared for, limits move. Emma cares, she isn't abusive but she is a slaver.

She makes me yearn to be taken, surrender everything to one who will use, but not abuse, you as her plaything.

Old Al normally stays in the incest/taboo section, but Ventured out to read some contest and award materials. I cannot tell you how AMAZED I am by the OUTSTANDING quality of your story! I could easily see myself reading this in a hard bound book I had paid $12- $24.00 for the book on Amazon or in any book store , ( if those still exist). This is not so much erotic literature as it is main stream top shelf literature. And that is my honest opinion of what I have read. I mean, to go WAY BACK in time, one of the first N.Y. TIMES best seller list books i read was VALLEY OF THE DOLLS in about 1968 and it had more sex in it than this story has had. So, again, there is absolutely no reason for you to think you are relegated to erotic literature, because it just is not true. Books with more sex were out in the open and making their authors millions 55 TEARS AGO!!! And that is as far back as I can personally vouch for and easily document! Who knows how much farther back it goes

Not sure what else to say. I am undecided as to whether i will read part two, as I found this part so darned outstanding, I don't want it compromised. That is awfully selfish of me, so maybe I will give it a read, although there are just so many ways I can see the story getting messed up. I almost need to find someone who read it and ask them 4 or 5 brief questions

to decide.

At any rate I wish you all the best and urge you to pursue your dream if you want to write professionally.

Old Uncle Al

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Glad I read the comments and your reply. Old Al has had all the sadness and misery in his life he cares to have, and a Lot more. Like Many, I believe, I come here for " recess from the realities of daily life." Recess is no place for more misery, so I will stop reading at chapter one.

Let me be clear, this in no way changes a word of my first comment! I still believe you are a gifted writer. But this particular story is not for me.

Old Uncle Al

Fine writing, very erotic, and a nice exploration of the desire to be in thrall to someone else, to give up will and responsibility and not worry about consequences. This story could be a trigger for lots of people who have been sexually seduced by someone older or more experienced. Unfortunately, predators are attracted to people who don't have barriers against being used. But you worked hard to reveal the underlying desire of those who are different or outside to be loved and accepted. And you showed that being some kind of 'kinky' is a home to many people. Perhaps I would be happier if Elizabeth showed a little more trepidation and self-questioning. When does a person say, "I don't give a shit that someone else is manipulating me?"

Dang, but this is a really good story.

I really felt like I was reading teenagers. Like back in high school. People making the new kid feel uncomfortable.

Emma ... as someone who has a hypnosis skill and fetish, seeing an opportunity to both help someone, and gain a new sub, seems very real and relatable.

I am curious to find out what happened to that "therapist". She clearly went from helping Emma, to ... that, and having video evidence should have been the end of her. And then some.

I can relate to Emma's concerns about being hypnotized. I enjoy -- seriously -- a good relaxation trance, and I have good subject agency up to a point -- and beyond that, I'm out. So there's that point of fear, and a desire for it up to that point.

There is one thing I'm confused about. She turned 18 in the middle of her junior year ... normally you'd turn 18 in senior year, right? So she's 19 now, and Liz is 18.

i think this is genuinely the best story ive read on here

Lovely. Intriguing - five mesmerized stars.