All Comments on 'Eye in the Sky Bk 02: Artifact'
by blackrandl1958
- 12 Comments
It's always good to see a new story from Randi, or a continuation of an old story. They are always well written and paced. Top marks from me.
Your creativeness and writing blend to make a wonderful experience for us readers.
The challenge is finding the jewels hidden on this site. Well done!
Okay. I'm hooked. Great story, Randi. I anxiously await the continuation. Thanks for sharing your talent.
I was convinced you were female, having read our name as Randi..And surprised at the range of characterizations. Now i know better, i think, but still impressed .
May your writing success buy you that island!
Barely started this chapter and the hero asks to turn the boat left. That is port for you landlubbers.
A nicely written piece but no idea where it's going yet so will have to read on.
As has already been said it's good to read another story by Blackrandl1958, although the Irish girls backstory reads more like a US schooling than Irish so may need a few tweaks before publication.
In the UK there are very few scholarships linked to sport rather than academic achievement and while there may be halls of residence for anyone who didn't live locally solo apartments at universities tend to go with postgraduate rather than undergraduate studies.
Similarly a high school is unlikely to share a campus with a college or university and a village of 1000 people might have a junior school but the senior high and/or local college would probably be in the nearest town a few miles away. Local distances in the UK tend to be counted in terms of a few miles rather than in 10s or 100s of miles like the US.
I gave this four stars because the plot is unfolding.
P.S. I thought the distress flare was shot,by pirates.
Does this story have anything to do with the original eye in the sky chapter?
You are such a wonderful writer, I was disappointed in this first chapter’s development with regard to chapter’s 2 through 6, the development is so much better and more in line with your talent as a writer. I was also surprised at the difference in airport issues at the beginning and those presented at the end.
I always look forward to your stories.
Mike
A well thought out and written story. I look forward to reading the next chapter. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.