All Comments on 'From Mars to the Stars'
by MattblackUK
- 18 Comments
An implied revenge story by a usually excellent writer. I felt the plot was contrived and shallow and the characters in general not very likeable. Despite a few clever contrivances it just seemed flat to me.
Weak ending. Should have shown the two "first families" being embarrassed.
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The word is "cachet," not "cache."
Hi, Matt, as a long-time Mars-story fan (hey, I even read all of ERB's Barsoom series in college), I enjoyed this, particularly with the little historical and SF Easter eggs scattered throughout it. The machinations by Paul and Emily's families seemed be similar to some practiced in upper echelon colonial societies in centuries past (hopefully past!) and I felt really sorry for Sandrina, even more so than for Paul...at least for a while.
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The story was well written and covered everything quite well, with just rewards being handed out to those who deserved them. The one exception was that I didn't quite buy the aging Emily as presented. She'd proven herself to be quite the social climber earlier so I figured she would have moved on, hooking someone else to maintain her status and lifestyle. However, after thinking about it, perhaps the stigma that Paul suspected for himself might have stuck to her in a different way after the divorce and the final line was hilarious anyway.
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In the end, this was a sweet tale that fit very well with the challenge. Thanks for participating and for sharing your work.
sbrooks103x, thank you for poining ou hat I missed he t on cachet. :)
It would have been nice to see some payback against the older brother and the parents but great story.
Crossovering with another SwaA story, "good thing cats weren't allowed on Mars" :P Amazing BTB story, both as a SciFi work and as LW/BTB work. Pity the evil parents of the main character didn't get any negative fallout (Emily's presumably did by her not having kids). Easy 5 stars.
I enjoyed the story. Interesting theory on the common ancestor. Five stars!