by Ephesus14
1 Why the hell can't I give it a 10 or vote twine?
2. VERY original and imaginative.
3. I may go back and read another of your stouries.
Glad you are back. Please make sure you have backups from now on. W
I really liked this one - maybe because it wasn't really predictable. There was the obvious "two old friends dancing around each other's feelings", but there were three sets of friendships and it was hard to tell where the bouncing ball was going to land. But with a large measure of patience on your part (and mine) we got to Cat in the end and it just seems like it was right. I must admit that I have never had the kind of relationship where you are close to someone sexually, but can easily tolerate that person having sex with someone else. It's a degree of freedom that I've never experienced and not sure that I want to. The whole thing just seemed to fall into place naturally and I'm comfortable with a 5* rating.
I couldn’t stop reading this one. Complex plot lines kept me off balance throughout. Towards the end I thought he’d end up with Edie, but you turned that theory on its head. Great job! 4.8*
I really enjoyed that.
What Overcritical said, I wasn't sure where it was going to land, but it was very satisfying that the end was with Cat. For a moment, I wondered if this was about to go into LW territory, but glad that it did not. I'm looking forward to your next one.
A most excellent story! It seems much informed by the sorts of plot twists and turns that occur in live and filmed scripts. That is no criticism. It was delightful! The only thing you may have missed is the deus ex machina complication that was mentioned but never came to figure in the final act. Come to think of it, that was a neat trick: mentioning the fact that a plot twist could occur as a stand in for an actual plot twist. After all, by this point the audience already knows there will be a happy ending, and probably expects a last minute contretemps before the tale's resolution. Yet I must admit to being Pavlovized enough to miss the final act commotion. At any rate 5 stars. A well written story in a style unusual on Lit.
Well written, and well though out - had me guessing right up to the end. 5*
All five stars turned golden. Glad I logged in today and check my favorite authors. I really enjoy your stories when you let your imagination flow.
I hope to see more from you Ephesus14. I miss your humor and tales. Thank you!
somewhere east of Omaha
I don't know what the fuck was this but it wasn't romance. I didn't care much for any of your characters.
Reasonable story,though the author needs to take arithmetic lessons.He quoted the Denver group consisted of eight,but then mentioned nine jobs.