by steelring
Good story with a unique twist. Generally, the narrative was solid but you spent too much time in his head. 4*
The story is coherent, believable, and extremely well written. Congratulations!
I liked it, but I'm with Mr. Fantastic, above: saw the ending coming ten miles away. (It was also the same basic plot of a Cinemax-type movie from the '90s with Tanya Roberts and Joan Severance.)
I wonder if Mike will ever remember vasectomies are reversible? probably not given this is a fictional story. Then again, I wonder if the author knows vasectomies are reversible?
You’re a technically gifted writer, but in every story you choose to create characters who are cringe worthy. If your stories are meant to entertain, then your choice of characters is preventing you from succeeding. You don’t give the reader a character he can like, which makes liking the story impossible also. Hence the low scores on your stories.
Oh what a great well written story, loved the character descriptions and sex,
Excellent tale. This is perhaps the fourth story of yours I've read since discovering your work in the past few days. I love the different perspectives on the "Hotwife" theme, and the O. Henry twists at the end. Yes, the characters are often morally ambiguous; and they acknowledge it. Personally, I like a little guilt and remorse and blatant rationalization with my erotica. It can be just as intense as an orgasm and it certainly lasts longer ...
This was enjoyable, and not the first of yours that I've read...
...they all do have some kind of twist in them, and that is a bit different from many of the others who postponed LW.
This one got four stars from here.