All Comments on 'How Mom Became My Hot Little Slut'
by TMONY1
- 40 Comments
This story was like a rocket. It sat on the launch pad while Tori’s POS husband ignored her. Cody ignited the engines with the help of the booster Bryan. It went into the stratosphere when Cody arrived at the clun. It attained orbit when Cody took her home. It’s still orbiting, waiting for chapters 2 and 3 to be written…
Seriously, you’re on to something here…keep writing!
Want a part 2. How they act when dad comes home and how they deal with their friends. Tell them they are now having an affair and just act like normal boyfriend/girlfriend?
Fun story…but does he have to call her Tori in private? Kinda took away from the taboo perspective if he’s using her first name.
Best I have read on here in quite awhile. Looking forward to chapter 2. I just hope it doesn't go off the rails with silly things, and remains a romance between just the two of them.
A great story! I hope you will continue with the story of Cody and Tori! We need to what happens next! Please continue!
Nice start, now hopefully you will write more of Tori's adventures as a HOT MILF.
Not just with her son but with other 18+ hopefuls, particularly when Cody returns to University.
He cant always satisfy and protect her, unless he takes her back to school with him. If he does, then his buddies will find out who she really is!
Good hot story. Need another chapter or two while her son explores her submissive side.
wow that was a fantastic sexy story i live in sw florida also and id love to get to know you in every way beautiufl sexy lady Im Bob in Rotonda west thank you Toti dear
Lost me at her being married, right in the first paragraph. A skank wife, and a son that has zero respect for his father? Adios.
You have a knack for using the wrong verb tenses, failing to muster up an actual sentence, and putting just plain boring shit everywhere to fill out a story. All of that ruins it, and makes it boring as dog shit.
Learn English or find a new hobby -- one that you can actually do.
Good story. I enjoy incestuous love stories when the two mature lover recognize and accept the fact they can satisfy each other's unmet needs and wants. The husbad/father deserves the respect he has earned, if any. The chemistry and sensual sensitivity between mother and son is not forced nor contrived. The love the mother and son express to/for each other is not forced, expected nor contrived. It flows naturally between the two. Would like to see this story continued.
Ignore cageysea comments. Anybody who reads these stories for correct English is a moron. Keep writing. I love your stories. Ignore the haters who get off on criticism. They are the ones that need to get a new hobby
I liked it very much. Well written! I liked the different perspectives of what was going on.
Two perspectives is one thing - but you do it way too quickly often. This could have been a 5 - gave it a 4. Choose a character, play it all out, and then the other character's perspective. Quite frankly, the other character's perspective could easily be a stand-alone.
IGood story, but i guess that saying fuck 50 or 75 times makes it better. It doesn't.
Many thanks, TMONY1for a well written and thoroughly enjoyable story. IMHO, the way you have alternated POVs works very well. This is a fantasy, and, as such, the shots “slabs” of dialogue from both Tori and Cody are very effective, allowing your reader to better get inside the minds of your characters. Well done, and thank you. Well worth all of five stars, more if they were available.
This was a beautiful story. Truly the role that mothers should have for their sons. Any wait to read more.
One of the hottest stories I've read! I will try to pace myself, however, really looking forward to reading all the chapters.
Excellent, hot and well written. What more can we want? Five stars, more if they were available.
Great Story. I love the fact that she was, first, making out with his friend. I would love the friend to fuck Tori.
Wasn't a fan of her slutting it up in the club with some guy who was quite obviously feeding her lines from the Bullshit Lines to Say to Girls Playbook (honestly if women are dumb enough to fall for this shit they deserve to get taken advantage of and fucked by these assholes). I mean I can understand it to an extent with her husband not showing her any attention, but still, it was a bit much. At least Bryan got cockblocked, so there's some justice. Let's see where this goes. I'm fine with her being a slut as long as she's a slut for only her son - no sharing! I hope she get preggers at some point. Gotta claim your slut by breeding her after all. It's like a rule or something.
Ooooo....such a "great/hot" story...not really. The author is living up to his self-proclaimed disinterest in what his readers think (from his biography page...go take a gander at his comments).
Run-on commentary/dialogue, grammar issues that are easily edited with a bit of proof-reading!! And, they are in Cody's bedroom, on the bed, and 'mysteriously' end up on a couch??!! Attention to detail, yo!!
Story premise really is hot, I will give author that; BUT...just, BUT...
Three**3**Stars here...hoping next chapters will be better!! (Yes, IAM going to read them...comment??? We will see.)
Also, notice I am not "anonymous"...
Ooooh I’m so wet , can’t wait for my 19 old hung son to get off work , he still love to suck my 36DDD’s , when he crawls into bed with me that’s the first thing he does , we’ve started fucking kind if by accident he was sucking my tits one night , I look over and saw his big 9 inch rock hard black cock , I couldn’t resist I had to have it my mouth and pussy , we fuck all the time , he loves calling me dirty nasty names while he’s fucking me I love it , last night he and his buddy both fucked me I was a cum dump , I love it !!
Great storie it kept me going & wanting more the whole storie so exciting & such a turn on can’t wait for more
Cageysea9725 has a real point about the craft of writing, usage, etc.
But, you have more than enough imagination to generate a really good, involving, erotic story, with at least decent characters.
Keep doing that, but also work on the craft of writing, get an editor, etc.
Enjoyed it!
While cageysea might have a point about the need for editing and proofreading, his phrasing could perhaps use a bit more tact. Calling the writing dog shit isn't very constructive criticism.
Texasmaddog, while not an author here, is a prolific reader and commenter (1157 comments as of this date!), and overall I have agreed with most of his story ratings and criticisms. And, his criticisms here are valid.
As another (anonymous) commenter pointed out, why should the writing and editing matter if the storyline is good? Well, if you're going to do a job, why not do it well? If you're going to publish stories on a public website, especially one that has 10s (100s?) of thousands of competing stories vying for readers' attentions, why not take some pride in your work? There are free editors available on this site, which is prominently mentioned when you submit a story for publication, and most decent editors have built-in spell check, so there is no excuse for blatant misspellings. Grammar is a bit tougher, as the available programs aren't infallible. But anyone who has at least a high school education should be able to maintain the same tense throughout a story, which Tmony1 fails to do. Also, sentence fragments are such a basic error that it's inexcusable in a story if you've made any attempt at proofreading. Homonyms and poor word choice are more acceptable, as most programs won't catch them, but that's why we have dictionaries! And, there are plenty of free ones available online.
Ironically, the writing practice that I thought Tmony1 used very effectively was the alternating perspectives, which some commenters complained about. I guess some readers just have very short attention spans.
Finally, to those commenters who downvote a story because it has themes they don't like, or goes in a direction they wouldn't have chosen: if you don't like the theme, why are you even reading stories in that category? And, if you don't like the direction the story takes, write your own story, instead of whining about it in the comments! How selfish do you have to be to downvote a free story because you don't like the ending? No one's forcing you to read them (hmm...that would make an interesting humor/satire take on the nonconsent/reluctance theme!).
That brings me to a point I've brought up before in other story comments: I think we need to revamp the story categories and story rosa-blanca.ru into one streamlined system. A huge problem occurs when a story falls under multiple categories; which category should be prioritized varies between stories, authors & readers, and there's no consistent way to subcategories. Also "trigger" warnings could be implemented in the story rosa-blanca.ru, or brought up Ina preface to a story, but not every author or reader is going to see the same things as potentially triggering. (For example, not everyone likes anal, or impregnation, or drug use, or cuckolding, which are some of the most common themes I've seen complaints about in the comments.)
I propose a new category/tag system that uses something like hashtags. Then, every category that fits can be labeled, and any themes that are potentially triggering can be listed as well. So, the next time someone wants to write a BDSM lesbian incest story with non-consent, anal & drug use, every reader will know what they're getting into, without the author having to provide potential spoilers to those who, for example, don't care if there is anal or drug use in their story. And, if those themes are exactly what a reader is looking for, they can more easily find the story. Also, cuckold and BTB stories could be separated out from "true" loving wives stories, since that's probably the most complicated, and complained-about, category. And, the hardcore rape stories could be separated from the rape fantasy/roleplay and reluctance stories, as that's another very thorny category. And, if a story series varies in theme from one story to another, that will be more visible, if a reader cares to actually check the rosa-blanca.ru.
Anyway, lots of food for thought here. This story had a good premise and an interesting presentation, but lacked polish, and suffered from a lack of or poor editing. It'll be interesting to see where the story goes from here.