by Slirpuff
This is excellent writing.
I read another story here about a spoiled rich girl who owned a oil company.
she had her army of lawers try to screw over her husband.
THAT story was so ridiculous and devoid of any realism I felt robbed of time.
This is totally realistic and superbly written.
5*
The journey from death to life is a step so short ..like a thin line .... you cover this thin line so well ......
Simple and clearly told. Thanks.
And to the guy still whining about the other story...get a life, moron.
Very good...Short, to the point...the thoughts, alone in a hospital bed can be tremendously disturbing for someone that saw his life transformed to worst in seconds...Only angels can sent those thoughts away...4*
sucked! Still a five though.
Kids will do that to you.
Keep at it!
Why is this in this category?
I thought we were going to find out that he was trying to kill himself because he found out his wife was cheating, but apparently not.
It might have been a 4 or even 5 in a different category, but frankly I don't think it belongs in Literotica at all.
And not your medical insurance, vehicular insurance.
An interesting if bleak story but it should really have been posted in non erotic.
Only a warped puppy thinks this is hot.
Take this mess to the Lifetime Channel forums.
It's a powerful glimpse at a moment in the life an Intensive Care Unit patient. I have to agree that it is in the wrong category, but that doesn't take away from the story itself.
I've been a respiratory therapist for 20 years and I have had patients who have tried and sometimes succeeded in disconnecting themselves from the ventilator. Even with restraints it happens because if you are determined to pull out your tube, you'll find a way. If the doctors think you are suicidal vs just confused from injury and drugs, then you can bet on a psych consult. I have seen something like this scenario before. It's tough on us healthcare professionals too. I can sympathize with this man. His quality of life is definitely going to be hard. I've asked myself many times what would I do if I was going through "this" when I am treating patients. Most people in healthcare do and if you haven't heard this before, most doctors and healthcare professionals don't die in a hospital. They have made arrangements for themselves and their families if/when the time nears.
Sorry for the speech, this story just touched something in me.
Thank you for the story. Well done.
P.s. There is always a nurse just like this one in every hospital. It's usually the new nurse who hasn't been changed by the day after day of healthcare reality.
I'll always look forward to one of the masters of this category ! Please post more, because this L.W. category has been overrun by cuckold ' s and sissy boys ! My god its nice to get a story from you and Daniel Q. Steel in one week ! Wish some of these newbies posting now would go back and read some of yours and afore mentioned DQS, Qhm1l, Rehnquist, Laptopwriter, leapyearguy, just to name a few of the really good L.W. writers , and stop posting this drivel that this category is getting now !
For loving wife category. Some wives may discard their husband knowing the future difficulty esp especially starting in at lower economic status
The story really spoke to me. I faced a time in my life when I was having much the same thoughts for similar reasons. Someone was there to stop me as well. It's not exactly a happy memory you've dredged up but it is a powerful one and it reminds me of how precious my life actually is. Thank you
Are these recent flash submissions prelude to a longer tale? I hope so.
But I didn't like it. Not really a LW story. More like Non-erotic. And in that condition he would have been better off dead. So would his family. After some time passes they'll be able to move on with their lives, find a replacement husband and Father and live their lives not taking care of a shell of a man. Not worrying about where the money is going to come from to pay the mortgage or put food on the table. A man that can't take care of them. That will drag them down everyday they have to try and take care of him. So no, I think he had it right in the first place. The right to die should be a choice.
Very good. Made my hurt all over ache. This was word smithing at its finest. Thank you.
It seems we are all worth more than the sum of our personal equation. Thanks for this one 5 & FAV
Slirpuff, decided his story character chose to make lemonade.
Obvious (3) reasons, If you ain't got family you ain't got nothing.
Thanks for sharing on Lit.
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I found that it left my emotional reactions dancing in circles. His pain and the sense of uselessness call for death but the kids call for life. Still the deciding vote comes from his wife who knows what is going on in his heart or head.
Great flash story about something that is a personal nightmare of mine. It left me feeling emotionally raw, just reading about his pain and desire to die. Of course, the reversal at the end was uplifting. I wonder, though: why put this story in LW?
Carbinemaster nailed it. Great scary, thought provoking, tale ... we could feel the pain! But it is NOT Erotic and there is NO adventurous wife included!
Non-Erotic
This story is LW story to show if the wife had been cheater bitch and the kids had supported her he would have gotten suicide instead of being a creampieeating cuckold!
I do understand why the cuck supporters do not like this story!
makes a man overcome all obstacles. TK U MLJ LV NV
Besides, he'll have plenty of other opportunities to do the right thing. And after a while, Sue will eagerly help him.
Because of the WTF factor. This seems to be several paragraphs out of another story. Made no sense at all.
... welcome all the same. Short, sweet and strong. Wonderfully written. 5*
Usually you just make it too easy for people, sometimes you force us to think on our own. That's too difficult for some to grasp, good job. Signed: BTW
My children and my grandchildren are all that keeps me here.
A lot longer. This is a tiny fraction of a story that should have much more depth to it. Also, wtf at the nurse threatening him? Could have been a good story, but it falls far short of the mark.
to move him over the top of any hill. TK U MLJ LV NV
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Pull the tube or whatever you need to do to get out of the life. His family will survive on his life insurance, the mortgage insurance will pay off the house and her lawyer will get her enough money so she and the girls can live well from whoever it was that caused the accident. She'll even get her Miata back! Bad ending
What was the point of the story?.As for medical expenses,if the driver of the SUV was in the wrong,then he pays big time.
Wow! I've never given Slirpuff 1 star before but my only regret here is that I can't give him a minus star. What a stupid waste of time this is.
I liked it. A lot. Because I’ve been where he was and made it back. Great story.
If he is in La La land how does he know his foot is amputated and that his arm will never work properly in future?.
not what i expected and would love to know more about how he got there but in usa i get his motivation
Where's the other half of the story?
What is here is good...but it's not finished.
I'm a 71-year-old man and I didn't want to live 15 times in my life. The first time I was 7 years old. My mom and her boyfriend beat and tortured and molested me everyday. I was scared 24/7 I could never get rid of the pain. I woke up 3:00 in the morning one morning and mom was holding the butcher knife to my throat. She said I was no damn good and she might as well put me out of everyone's misery. Finally she left and I laid back down on the bare mattress in the Attic where I had to sleep. I set fire to the mattress. Hoping that my pain and suffering was over. No such luck. A fireman saved me.
Odd, why in loving wives, unless we missed Sue was driving the white SUV?
Short and uncomfortable... Not certain if it's in the right category, but has potential to be so much more. If you're still submitting stories, Slirpuff this has enough interesting possibilities that you may want to revisit it and flesh it out.