by darkoverlord6
Nice job. Nice characters. Marcie’s turnaround may have been a bit too quick.
Thank you. Please continue this story.
I would have to disagree a bit with MajorRewrite. The combination of someone really caring for her, combined with her totally loveless parent would, IMO, accelerate Marcie's turn around. Marcie's parents are not going to be happy their daughter is a lesbian. This has legs.
Really enjoyed this story. You are developing some neat characters and have a solid basis for future development of more 5* stuff should you choose to please your readers that way.
I'm interested in seeing this develop. There are many avenues available for potential conflict. I'm sure Sophia's parents will disapprove of her relationship, either on the basis of age or David's not being Indian. Tip: Take your time and plot it out. There could be many more potential chapters before the inevitable finale of a double wedding.
Well written on all levels. Your evenness in quality of plot and characterization shines through exquisitely
Captured attention; well written. Erotica interwoven. Look forward to more stories.
Great story, but have you ever been to Beacon Hill … there are no mansions like this. Yes, it’s the most exclusive neighborhood in Boston, but it’s all brownstone-style townhouses. Most of them have even been subdivided into condos. It totally yanked me out of the story, hard to get back into it.