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Thanks again to D. for a wonderful editing job. I hope everyone enjoyed this story. I value your comments, it's how I improve my writing.
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Dream weaver. I was so enchanted. Thank you for your lovely story of submission and trust...lc
That was amazing! I don't think I have ever been so engrossed in a story.
Beautiful, So many words, I can not choose the best to describe, portray, say what I am feeling. Keep it up!
It took me a while to read all the chapters but I'm glad I did. This series I have to say is now one of my faves. I wish you the best in your writing and in life:)
Your writing is very beautiful. I loved the way you described the characters and their love and pain. I have to disagree with the previous reviews about sloppy seconds. I related to Carla in the story. There are varying degrees of submissiveness. Melanie had the highest and was very much into pain and the desire to be used completely. Carla, although aroused by the feeling of possesion and punishment was happy with the levels she went to with Quinn. She wasn't Melanie and I think if she tried to be it wouldnt have worked. It was very brave of her to sacrifice herself for Melanie and Quinn and proved her love for him. Lets face it, Melanie could have decided to be selfish and take her body to be with Quinn forever. The writing was so good that I was scared that she just might do that. I have really enjoyed this story and it has given me a lot to think about. You wrote it so well that I was completely absorbed. I hope you continue to write.
This is one of the finest stories I have read on Literotica.
Exceptionally well done!
As an author, I appreciate the work you put into it, and the care with which it has been so superbly crafted.
My Respectful Compliments for an exceptionally Fine Tale.
Blessed be, and warm Regards, ^Uyraell^.
i thought this was ana amazing story
it had me wet for ages
however i reckon it could of kept going
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I'm not an avid BDSM fan and did not really enjoy the brutality scenes, even though they were skillfully written. However, your writing style, the detail you exhibited in your text, and the character development you so beautifully exhibited, made this an enjoyable and fulfilling story. Your ending, with the comparison to Demi Moore and "Ghost", was a brilliant stroke of writing genius. Good job.
- Ron -
Today I had a need to read a beautiful slave story such as yours. I am glad I found it and took the time to read it all the way through. I really enjoyed your beautiful story, although I agree somewhat with the writer of "Sloppy Seconds." I would have liked to finished the story by reading more about Quinn and Carla and their relationship, and Carla's slavery, once Quinn had been freed of his guilt. Perhaps something for the future . . . ?
I really enjoyed this series, but I have to say you lost me at the ghost bit.
I really enjoyed the beginning and middle of your story. I couldn't wait for more. The ending however disappoints. I hate that Carla ended up being sloppy seconds behind Melanie. To me Melanie had it all wrong. When she gave herself to her Master, it ceased to be about what she wanted and her desire should have been about what her Master wanted. She was wanting to dicate to her Master instead of allowing him to lead. To me Carla was the better submissive and should have been recognized as such instead of the focus being on Melanie.
I've waited anxiously to see this story completed. You've done a beautiful job. I love a story that can make me cry happy tears. Yours did that beautifully.