All Comments on 'Joey Finds a New App Ch. 18'
by Daddy_0H
- 6 Comments
You should have Kevin or Jane get control of the app and have them make Joey their sub.
Sure wish you could write a story with out the ...'s, the dot dot dot dot's. All the authors I follow doesn't use them as they know a reader can place a pause where ever needed. Load it into a text reader like Text Aloud and for example this sentence in this chapter. "I'm not sure I can do it....but......maybe". This is what it sounds like. "I'm not sure I can do it dot dot dot dot but dot dot dot dot dot dot maybe". Get my point? At least try to be a good author and not like other cheap writers on Literotica! This is constructive criticism, if you can't take it as that then sorry, you need not quit your day job. 18 years as an editor does give me the right to say this!
Re: RanDog025 - I hadn't even considered a text reader. I used to use one of those before and thought the same thing. Moving forward, I'll leave them out (hopefully I remember.) I actually am not planning on quitting my day job, so no worries there. I was mostly doing it because I couldn't find many stories that catered to all my fetishes.