All Comments on 'My Daughter Amy Pt. 01'
by herdarkestdesires
- 28 Comments
well wrote with the knowledge of what most fathers want for their child,,, and being so gentle as you proceed to make her a woman ,,, thank you ,,,,,,
I though it was awesome. 5/5 stars. Since you asked for thoughts, here goes. The only thing I would do differently, and this is just me as it was a great little tale, is this. When dad asked about what she wanted to try, and he was shocked to find she had never been with a boy, being as she was in all girls school, she kept something from him. She'd never been with a boy, but having gone to an all girls school, she was well instructed and extremely talented at eating pussy. But again, that's me. The story is great on it's own, and I see it's a chapter one, so I hope you have many to add. Again 5/5.
Dewey Cheatham
Most virgins have this thing called a hymen. I suspect that since you expect your readers to tell you how to write the rest of the story you also need them to tell you that you need to either deal with it at the time the virgin loses that status, or as part of the character development. I for one can’t stand lazy writers. Your visuals are passable but this is far from a completed story. Don’t write again until you can be bothered to complete a full story.
Your writing is so sensual, that I had to cum back to finish after finishing. PLEASE keep writing!
This is a wonderfully written story. So descriptive and erotic. I hope you enjoyed writing it as much as I did reading it.
Must point out that you deflowered her with your finger as most do on this site.
Seriously, Seriously mate...exquisitely written, delightfully descriptive, definitely arousing & impatient for more!! Loved it ..
Too fast, too shallow. No attention for the feelings of the girl.
That said, this is a classic coupling, wished by every daughter and father
A great start! MBy the third instalment, mommy should be ready to join in. 😈
Hot fantasy! I love the hints of impregnation. I’m curious if you know what direction you might take for the sequels? Maybe leave some hints here in a comment about where this is going? I’m hoping for Amy to become a devoted sex slave of a daughter, Sarah to discover them and love it and get involved, and for Amy to delay college to raise our narrator’s granddaughters (with an epilogue set 18 years in the future?). But I’ll be reading however you want to take things.
You pushed the pace too quickly having your father character afraid the daughter might change her mind. This is a recipe for regret on the daughter's part, even though she was consumed by her lust during the experience. You also left out teaching her how to touch and prepare her partner. Since she had no experience with men (boys), she would very likely have considerable curiosity about their bodies and I was expecting her to ask to see him and touch him while watching the movies. That type of action would have built the bond better between them.
With that said, your writing is sensual and I particularly liked the early scene with the father looking in on her while she slept.
Well fuck me, my pussy us so wet after reading that! I wish I had a daddy
Loved the build-up on his part. Also loved that he couldn't help himself and came inside her, despite his awareness that she was fertile. So yummy..
Absolutely loved the build up of how badly he needed her and I loved, loved the manipulation!
Please please, a part 2! My pussy is on fire and is sooooo wet, I want.. no need a part 2
Please don’t add the mother. I don’t know why but weird forced lesbian cuck stuff is so off putting. This was lovely. There is no need for anything else.
Reminds meof the night my girl friend and her two daughters one 14 and one 20 stayed over because of a blizzard. I hankered fucking her 20 year old every time laied eyes on her. We all retired each daughter in a separate bedroom. After eating my girfriends pussy and fucking her she fell immediately into a sound sleep. I couldn't sleep wrestling with the idea of visiting the 20 year old in her bed room. Finnaly I could not take it and found myself slipping out of bed walkingto the end of the hall an opening the door. The light on peak of roof shed a dim glow into the room. There she was sound asleep. I sat on the side of the bed and stroked my rock hard cock. That was not enough. Next thing I know my hand is sliding along her bare are. She awakened and rolled over. Strangly not startled. For lack of something to say I asked her how she was doing as my hand embraced he side of her face. She replied OK. Then I asked if she had a boyfriend to which she replied yes. The my hand slid over her breast and thumb and forefinger messaged the nipple as I asked, "does he ever touch you here." I noted her breathing increase as she replied, "Only once we have only been together a few weeks." "Do you like it?" I knew the answer. I slid my hand down under her panties and ling finger into the depths of her pussy which was nice and wet. I asked if he ever touched her here. She said no, adding no one had ever touched her there bus she does often and likes it. I worked her clit ever so lightly. She responded, "Feels better than when I do it, as sh rocke and pressed wanting additional stimulation. I extracted my hand took hers brushing against my cock whispering, "put your fingers around it and pump." Then she starteled me exclaiming, "so this is what it's like," having never stroked a cock before. I bent over and we kissed passionately. She hugged me tightly and panted now breathing hard, "I want you to do it to me, my first time. I rolled on top she spread wide. I ran the head of my cock grasping the shaft through he slipperyy slit stopping and rubbing on her clit several times. Then positioning the head unable to control myself any longer at her entrance. She pushed again ed it and with a little help of mine the head popped in. Slowly I fed my cock to the hilt her pussy tight around my cock I had to stop a few minutes to keep from ejaculating. We fucked slowly full stroks for several minutes when she suddenly stiffened, doug her nails into my back and let out a soft whimper falling limp while my cock pumped my load into her. We agreed I better get back to her mother before she wakes up. I had to put a T shirrt on so mother didn't see the claw marks. We agreed she would come back the following night and pick up where we left off. We continued for several months until her new boyfriend started screwing her.
Excellent story !!! I loved the buildup, the allure. Great job !!! Please, keep writing !!! Please continue/finish this story !!! I love it !!!