All Comments on 'My VideoChat Error Ch 32'
by NaughtyOne88
- 120 Comments (Page 2)
I would love for this story to continue. If you pick it up, please don’t rush an ending. I feel there can be a lot more. Maybe more feminization, more sexual cravings for anal, reluctant acceptance, etc.
I made suggestions about a year ago.
I suggested the story needed to add more context. Shaun is (1) a cuck/femmed husband, (2) father of two, (3) who is cheating on his wife en femme with a black married man, (4) is being forced into a cheating relationship en femme with his office subordinate, (5) is submissive in an office subordinate with his former secretary, (6) is working as a surface male, (7) participates in orgies, and (8) services his faithless, hotwife after the fact and (9) has to deal politely with her lovers. All great but there is no through-line.
Time to throw the reader a lifeline.
I made suggestions about a year ago.
I suggested the story needed to add more context. Shaun is (1) a cuck/femmed husband, (2) father of two, (3) who is cheating on his wife en femme with a black married man, (4) is being forced into a cheating relationship en femme with his office subordinate, (5) is submissive in an office subordinate with his former secretary, (6) is working as a surface male, (7) participates in orgies, and (8) services his faithless, hotwife after the fact and (9) has to deal politely with her lovers. All great but there is no through-line.
Time to throw the reader a lifeline.
If some one picks up this story, please eliminate some of the branches and reveal a few more clues. Mostly for why is naughty putting Shaun/Shauna through this.
Lit sponsors invitationals all the time, but I don't think it would sponsor one for a single story. So, here goes. An open invitation to continue this story, anyone can submit their version of Chapter 33. Rules: (1) All versions must post by 5/28/23 (45 days); (2) your plot line has to be consistent with Chapters 1 - 23 and extend from the end of Ch. 32.; (3) there's no limit on what you do with the existing characters and which way you want to take the story. Of course, all of us are free to keep submitting our own version but readers are urged to vote and comment as a guide to what the readers want to see. Hope to see something from many of you. BTW, I plan to post something. Lotsa ideas.
To: Michael Fitzgerald
Please post on here where we can find the continuation stories.
Thank You.
Msdanie
I post on Lit. I’ll post a note here when a chapter goes up. Or give follow and get notified directly. Hope you like it
In progress. I'm busy making sure my continuation doesn't follow the prior plot. There a ton of characters and plot lines. I had to make a spreadsheet to keep up. So give it a week or two and it will be ready.
Happy this is getting continued. It was one of my favorites back in the day.
Michael Fitzgerald
Not to 8nterupt your writing but just saying that there are parts of chapter 28 that should be incorporated in the on-going Shauna story.
msdanie, I agree. I hope we are looking to the same parts. Fair warning, things are going to get darker.
Excited to see the continuation and completion of this story. Would be fun to see someone close to the story be naughty
I keep finding backstory that needs to be included in this and/or the next chapter. Definitely in July.
I wish Naughtyone88 would continue the story. There are so many paths that are open. If not her then someone else.
I just submitted Ch 33 (FTDS). You can find it in non-consent or my Lit page - MichaelFitzgerald.
In rebooting, I wanted to fill in background that readers asked for. And more will be supplied as we go. I have the story mapped out for the next 4 chapters. Please comment. Anonymous rants get deleted. Constructive criticism helps me see what readers want. Give me a follow if you like the restart so I can see whether you like it. The trolls like to one star and kill a rating. It throws the author off from seeing what the audience reaction is.
Thank you for your patience. MF