by Nozza
good start - if mom was waiting for it, what have sister & dad been doing?
Misuse of words plus it was rushed and the abrupt ending.
The title caught my interest right away. There needs to be more introduction. The characters could use more attention. What happened to the sister? She seemed to have been introduced as a character with high sexual interests and could have been brought into the story as an important person. the story line was very good just needs more development.
'Her tits were coin shaped and the breasts were large' ..... The way I read this, she had both tits and breasts. Is that right?
How can anyone write this shitty? You're fucking with us, right? The problem is, even as a parody, the story sucks.
I read your piece and popped a five star grade to it as an encouragement for first time submission. My experience is for a proof reading and still overlooking one, what is for others, glaring beacon of a mistake. It is usually a simple mistake such as your "coin" for cone or even conical but someone always stands tall like a ground hog in the weeds to make me appear foolish. Fuck em. Proof read and improve. Story is fine for an Incest piece. I like hair on a woman and prefer more build up to the connecting of sex parts but your work still holds up.
Keep writing.
an excellent first-time contribution. 19 year old James lives in the middle of a whacky, fuck-happy family. It's inevitable that he's going to take part sooner or later. Luckily, his mother takes the initiative--for quite a while mom's been hankering for what her boy's got jumping around in his pants. It's cute how James the virgin concludes that "orgasms during sex were way better than masturbation." They sure are, kid, especially when a boy is blowing his balls up the same warm wet hole he came out of. James and his mom have discovered the perfect match--his young cock and his mother's seasoned cunt. Face it, at least some of a boy's semen belongs up his own birth canal. After all, at his age his young balls never quit. He's got plenty of that glorious stuff and, like a good son, he'll be gifting his mother with lots of it from now on.
Well you've got a start but you quit to soon. There were several more pages if not chapters in this story. Get busy.
"I read your piece and popped a five star grade to it as an encouragement for first time submission."
It's people like you that ruin this site. You give 5 stars just because it's a first time effort? What an ass. How about grading the story based on the content?
cant quite understand why you kept your virginity for so long, when will you be having a threesome with mummy and your sister, maybe even daddy as well, perhaps he might want to fuck you and your sister at the same time.
Another 10 inch virgin living with a sexually active sister and mom.
BUT!?!? You left out you are as big aound as a beer can. You also forgot you are between 5 foot 10 and 6 foot 2 while only weighing some where between 180 and 210. Oops! I almost forgot your blonde hair and deep blue eyes. And you are the most considerate and noble person for 10 states.
Folks help me, remind me of any other stereotypes our genuine author left out
Pure BS written by someone who has no idea about sex. Calling nipples tits?!
You guys that come on here to try out new joke material are funny. But keep your day job this sucks.Thanks for the giggles.
it is a start not bad but read it back before sending it in so you can filter out the big mistakes.
The majority of nudists do it for the freedom on not wearing clothes, it does not have anything with being obsessed with sex. The parents of a nudist family would definitely not be having sex out in the open for the rest of the family to see.
Next time write about something you actually know about.
Ended to abruptly. As for the people saying it isn't real nudism... Jesus you are reading porn. What do you expect... everyone simply sitting in their living room doing chores and living normal lives. You knew what you wanted by the title. Also... having interacted with nudists... while it is not about incest... sex can be a big part of it. I say this having been to several nudist places with my wife frequently.
whenever I walk nude inside of my house I feel total freedom. my mom accepted my nude walk, so I am happy always. she never care my nudity. I am always her dotting child.
All Young Tenage Boys shold get to Fuck their Naked Mothers all the time !
Could have added a more detailed or drawn out handjob scene. Also your mom giving you a bj. More detail about your sister noticing you're hard while watching tv
Pathetic, this story isn't even a full page hahaha. It's sad that allot of the writer's on this site are only one pump chump stories. I wish there was a way to filter out stories that are one page or less, that way I don't waste my time on this teenage fantasy trash that a 15yo could come up with.
James is one lucky young man could be able to have sex with his mother fantastic great story
This story got me so wet, I sent my cunt out to a dairy farm with instructions to have it hooked up to a milking machine and sucked for a period of several days.
Sincerely,
B4PW.