All Comments on 'Outside of their Jurisdiction'
by JimBob44
- 76 Comments
5*
Handled this like a large glass of Canadian Club whiskey, a slow read to savor every nuance it has. Simply love your work.
Thanks
That was excellent. Thank you for the little history lesson about the goings-on & the folks in Arkansas. I enjoy the way you weave the stories together, and seeing where some of the folks we've met in previous stories come from. Thanks for another enjoyable read!
This is the kind of story I had been wanting from you for a while. Lots of tragedy to overcome, lots of life events and a good solid length.
Thanks for posting. Five stars.
Always a swell day when you get a chance to read a JimBob44 story. As refreshing as a cold Fresca and as entertaining as John Candy jello wrestling a pit full of exotic dancers in bikinis. You just grin and enjoy it while it lasts.
What a sprawling story and what a cast of characters. Keystone Kops, wiseguys, hippies, bootleggers, and of course childhood sweethearts. Crazy like a John Waters movie. I especially liked the hanging hippie scene - it brought me back to one of my all time favorite JimBob sequences from ‘Zwilliger’ wherein the title character, a returning Vietnam soldier, encounters stoned hippies, and sends them to their maker. Thanks for a thoroughly enjoyable Sunday afternoon read.
Great story, but I got a bit lost with all the names. Have you ever thought of a cast list for your stories, at least one writer does them as I recall reading them?
Yet another entertaining and well written tale from Jimbob44. 5 stars DMW aka Sumnut96
Love the stream of consciousness style of this. Just dive right in and go with the flow.
I don't believe I've ever thought or commented on a story in LITEROTICA, that "this would make a helluva movie." Of course. there would have to be slightly violence and less blood shed.
Fantastic story! Good plot, great characters, and hot sex! Five stars! I love the way that you write. Thanks for sharing your work with us.
So cool to hear the back story of Spuntzin's bakery. Excellent character development and story line. Like someone else said, it should be a movie, I'd watch it!
I LOVED everything about this one. But,
"Hey, Deputy, where's your car?" Suzie asked, looking past Charlie to the large plate glass window.
"That new kid's filling it up," Charlie snarled, still attempting to intimidate the girls.
"What new kid?" Francine asked from the grill.
Was by FAR my favorite moment!
Excellent job. 5 Stars.
Quite a tale, I had a hard time keeping track of all the names and relationships but it was still a very entertaining story. What with the gangster guy taking care if our god boy and his family it was all well told. Some of these backwoods stories are very entertaining like Luther's War. Seems the bad guys always underestimate the so called hillbillies and simple southern patter. But they got some real life learning goin' on and you better pay attention. 5 stars.
Always great stories, I read them through slowly as not not miss all of the relationships and interrelationships and then a few months later come back through all of his great work picking a story or 2 so I can smile.
One of the top writers on this website. He winds things around, adding or subtracting people or things, keeping you in the story. Still with some sex but it is not forced in but a seemingly natural part of the story!!
Wow! Quite an entertaining story.
I really can't understand what Polly was up to and it seemed kind of ridiculous the way she was done away with.
Their was almost too much tragedy in this but the joy was still the winner.
Loved the story but I had to build a database to keep track of the characters and relationships. 5
I kept hoping there was a point … but nope. Arduous, disjointed, collection of situations confused by too similarly names jumping forward in time at random nonsensical times. What did the civil war have to do with inbreeding and corruption in the 1980’s, the mob, and butt fucking? Stupid attempt to make a pointless story sound epic. Again… nope.
A wonderful story. Great characters and the evolution of a small southern town was very engaging. Terrific.
It wasn't bad, but far too rambling a tale. There was a LOT of detail, but not much depth to any given scene. Would have been much better with about half the number of characters and longer scenes.....
Have no idea how you keep all the characters straight. But well written as usual.
I have some issues with keeping up with sooo many characters, and maybe I missed how the ending story meaningfully tied into the Civil War preacher beheading at the beginning … Overall, I enjoyed the read. 4*
Absolutely love your stories. Didn’t know where this was taking us but so entertaining! Please keep writing.
fun read. could spawn off some interesting stories from there - detective novels...featuring a "revenuer"...lots of ways to maneuver that lot of interesting characters.
Your stuff is fun but I'm just not quite sharp enough tp keep track of all of the characters as they come and go. Still, a great read as usual. Thanks!
I like how your cast of characters reveal great feats and disappointing foibles;
a full crossection of the spectrum of humanity.
From Francine’s simple wish to wed and bear children to her fervent cry of ‘Uncle’
at the birth of their 6th child, she covered the spread.
I especially like the deeper empathy shown as they experience life’s joys and sorrows.
You are one of the best authors on this site. I’m always happy to see a new story posted by you. Thanks. 5*
You tell a fun story, complete with mobsters with hearts of gold and a couple who managed to hang on to a semblance of a moral compass in spite of everything.
Not everyone likes George RR Martin's or Tolkien's writing style and other authors don't need to replicate them. That was a hard read. Maybe include a family tree or encyclopedia to keep track of all the characters next time.
(approx 12 mins ago) I've been reading JimBob44's stories for a fair while now. It's a different writing style to be sure, but his stories are good and his accent and ear for the way people speak is very engaging. If it doesn't sit well with you then maybe give them a pass.
I was raised in a small town in Florida in the 50's and 60's and could put faces to everyone in this story. It is fantastic. Thank you
Nice story, entertaining all through. Making the marine and the deputy gay porn stars….baaad. Lol
Love your stuff. Sometimes I wish I had a scorecard to keep up with the characters but all in all...great!
While you do occasionally go off on some strange tangents in your stories, there are very few writers around with your skill at world-building. I. so look forward to your contributions. 5*
Great story even though I had a hard time keeping up with the growing number of characters. 5 stars from Xluckylee.
Love your story and I learned to write the characters down with lines going to different people like a family tree so I can keep track of them all. I also add enemy, cousin, rival etc on the connecting lines
Thanks for writing
As always a great read, wonderful characters. Thank you for all the wonderful stories
5 stars.
Reminded me of the Battle of Athens/McMinn County War when local citizens - mostly returned WW2 Vets - violently overthrew a bad Sheriff in 1946.
I love this story and gave it a 5. But I do have a slightly off-topic issue with Literotica writers in general. There seems to be a dirty little secret, or maybe I should say a shitty big secret, about anal sex. I'll admit i've only tried it 2 or 3 times. The last time there was shit all over the place. Both of us were grossed out and embarrassed. and certainly never tried it again. Many years ago I had anal sex and I don't remember a shit problem, but then again i was tripping and didn't even know i was in the wrong hole. I'll admit it felt really really good. But the Literotica writers always seem to ignore or minimize this aspect of things. The only reason anal sex looks so awesome in porn videos is the women give themselves an enema, or maybe 2, before filming the scene. But nobody on Literotica ever mentions enemas.
The Literotica writers also appear to be supermen when it comes to sex. They never seem to have the slightest performance anxiety. Their cocks always turn into crowbars just from seeing a hint of nipple bump 40 feet away. The only exception i can remember is a guy whose wife had fucked like 150 other men over the years. (Of course he eventually said "that's ok honey" and took her back.)
The other superpower is that the Literotica writers can smell a woman "arousal" from a distance. As soon as they walk into the room the can tell if any of the woman in there are "juicy". Sort of like a dog smelling a bitch in heat. I'm don't know what what's wrong with me. I have to have my nose practically in there to know what's going on.
A great story.
Colorful, interesting
and never a dull moment.
Top ratings from me.
I have to keep reminding myself to not give up after the first page. I had to start this one three times. You’ve got several stories like that with 15 characters introduced in the first few paragraphs. They usually end up being good ones. 100° In The Shade started out like that and it ended up being one of my favorites.
This read was easy and enjoyable and did not/could not skip or scan a single moment. With so many characters many authors mix up names or otherwise lose track of them somewhere in the story. For me I had little trouble keeping up with everyone because, until the epilog-ish ending, every character was basically kept in the story one way or another. One of you best for me!