- BDSM
- Portmanteau Ch. 01–03
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All Comments on 'Portmanteau Ch. 01–03'
by IdeeFixee
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Great start. Please continue with much more detail and possible including a few more Ds scenes. Love your work !
and well-written. A wonderful enjoyable story. It will be fascinating to see what comes next… Thank you for sharing your talent and ideas.
About all you say about her is that her breast size seems to be growing and that she is small. Other than he is in shape, we know nothing about him other than he is very nosy. Speaking of breasts, what is this fixation with breast size? You mention that she is not really an A but a B or at the end a C at least 3 times. Its repetitive and boring. Sort of like those stories where one has to hear about the exact size of his equipment every time he strokes in and out.
He seems to have some idea about how to be a dom; where does this come from? At the same time, he is moving very fast, and never gave her a safe word; does he really know what he is doing?
. . . BDSM as story material, but this one has a high level of erotiism along with the torture and punishment. The notion of opposites, movie star as submissive, is intriguing. The nerd as dominant works well as juxtaposition to Natalie's submissive nature. I wonder if the next chapters will reveal what she found so attractive about Phillip? Good start.
Awaiting a full introduction to at least the primary characters of this story, so far we know she is a film actress who appears to be a teenager but is in fact twenty five and he is an editor or proofreader for a publishing house. Whilst I enjoyed reading this section I hope that we find out more of the background to these people.