All Comments on 'Ransomware Degradation Ch. 03'
by DarkVader
- 15 Comments
good story so far
like to see how far you will take her down the dark road
She went to a lawyer, the lawyer went to the cops. End of stupid story.
This could be a horrible story that wrecks this made-up woman's life, but I have hope for the plot.
This troll will have to play elsewhere. Good series, strongly following.
Couple of ideas. One, if you don't like the stories, don't read them and quit trolling. Two, post comments under your username rather than anonymous so those of us with less literary expertise than you can read your writings and therefore become much more enlightened. That way all of us who write the bizarre, out in left field fiction that populates this site can benefit from your brilliance.
I'm going to address your comments to the asshole not to defend him but to point out why your response is off base on several levels.
The fact that someone response to your story is rude or insulting or is something you don't want to hear didn't make it trolling. There are alot of really bad stories on here, whether it is the basics or simply a story that is badly put together. People will call it as they see it.
Second, lose the sanctimoniousness on the subject of anonymity. Fact: YOU are anonymous. You use a pseudonym. Nobody knows who you are, and because of the type of story you wrote, you would never want your name publicly associated with the subject. The only reason for someone to expose themselves is so that they can be attacked
Take comments for whatever value they possessed. Asskissing and asshole posts have no value to the author. I'm going to weigh in with a comment that you can take for what its worth.
I have only read this chapter, but it appears You are trying to write a character wrote a character who is categorically insane; he simultaneously believes he is only acting on slightly over the top impulse, but at the same time is actively trying to destroy a woman's life in a way that will be cause her to lose her kids, be impoverished when she loses her job, and basically become a slave. These are the real and literal results of the action he is undertaking.
Ok, we get it. She's dumb enough to fall for it because she's lonely/Stockholm, but his character makes no sense unless this is intended to be a poor attempt at the character analysis of a psychopath. You're damaging your story by over explanation. Someone who is evil and simply doesn't care about destroying lives makes sense. Someone who is evil bbc and trying to rationalize their evil as impulse does not. You have to be a far better writer than you or i to pull that off.
There's also the c question of whether someone could ever be so stockholmed that theyre willing to give up their kids and their life to be a slave without drugs to help, but perhaps there's something in those first two chapters that explains well beyond Intro to Psych how he managed to condition her to that extreme. I can't see reading them simple because character destruction stories like this are more fetish than non con, and it takes a highly skilled and darkly imaginative story teller to make those plots work. There's no apparent originality here - no disrespect, but the i have tapes, therefore you are my slave forever trope is done to death.
There's actual feedback here, and I'm going to call the asshole for what he is, you really need to toughen up. Writing for readers on lit is hard enough, but You are writing stories that explicitly capitalize on negative emotion, and people do not handle that well.
Same old...she's super dumbass seeking solace and consolation from her sickfuck blackmailer tormentor?!;))stockholm syndrome or super dumbass syndrome?!;))..story getting dumb,dumber and dumbest with Brian Webb being writer's only man around!! ;)) can we get a dynamic blackmailer cum hacker buster cool dom please!! ;))
I actually really enjoyed this as a piece of fiction sex or not. I particularly liked how you described the trepidation, fear and thrill of being the manipulator. Most stories pretend the dom is a pro when they feel the same range of emotions as the sub.
"You are writing stories that explicitly capitalize on negative emotion, and people do not handle that well.".....I was of the belief that this category was "non-consensual." The very subject begs negative emotion. But I appreciate your feedback, even if it is longer than any of my actual chapters. I get it that some people, even in a non-consensual context, seem to want the rape victim to end up enjoying it to the point where she's screaming "ride me big Sheldon" like the line in When Harry Met Sally. Yes, the story line is incredulous, as are about 99.9% of the storylines on this site. Excuse me for writing it.
I can't wait to see Margie's next degradation!
Please keep going with more chapters. I hope that you will not stop with getting Margie into more hot activities. So many other authors start well and then just quit leaving so much more that could happen. Nice beginnings and would like to see what Brian has in store. Eventually I would like to see a happy ending of some kind however there is so much more that can happen.
This is the kind of story that demands more! it inspires erotic desire from conservative women such as myself! Keep the story flowing ,please I beg you!
Just wanted to leave a quick note of thanks for writing it. It was a fun read, I only wish there was more!