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by stepjones
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I've been a Literotica member for about 2 years now and i can honestly say this is one of the best stories i've read in a very long time. Secret Kisses piqued my interest very quickly and held it there throughout. This is the first time i've written a comment about a story but, i felt it deserved it. Kudos to the writer for a story worthy of an award.
but why is most of page 4 one long paragraph?
Overall, though, this is one of the better stories that I have read here in a long time.
The build-up to the affair was delicious, the love-making scenes were well-written but almost exhausting to read. Some may criticize the ending, but what the hell, it worked out well for everyone. Steph committed adultery but so had her husband. It was a marriage that needed to be brought to a merciful end. I don't exactly know what Ben will think of his teacher coming to live with him though. Anyway, great story and I can't wait for more.
Sweet, hot, sensual and romantic.
A very good first effort.
Well done.
I thought this story showed wonderful patience, really taking the time to build up. And the detail was pitched just right. Thanks for taking the time to write this and share it with us.
I don't give out 5's often. If I could give a 4.5, to account for the bad formatting on page 4 (which was a gigantic pain to read), I would, but I'll ignore that, and just give it a 5. Masterful story. Well done.
Outstanding story (with the exception of the formatting error most of the others complained about)! I loved the build-up; it is very well written!
Your story is so carefully written, but not contrived. It's clear that you put a lot of thought into it even as the prose seems effortless. Great story!
I have been a reader of Literotica for several years and I believe this may be one of the very best stories I have read yet! It was lengthy, but your writing style kept me interested to see what these two lovers were going to do next on the following page. What new and unique kind of lovemaking will the younger Kelly introduce Stephanie to?
The ending was somewhat cliché' but you left yourself an open door for a couple of sequels which I am desperately hoping for. There are any number of directions you could take this beginning including other women, more seductions, maybe even seductions of other young teachers, or perhaps other bored, horny, "desperate housewives"; they are the best.....
I think these two lovers have just scratched the surface of their sexual potential with each other, especially with the recent introduction of their toys......food for thought.
An excellent first effort; keep it cumming! I will be re-reading this story often - every time I get horny, as I am now!
Great story thought characters were interesting & loved the intense, erotic sex. Hope to read more from you.
Great story - not just a rush to the sex scene. Loved the tension and the build up! You have written a beautifully erotic story!
wish i was a lesbian, every woman should have a lesbian.bisexual relationship. fucking good story*
Congratulations!
Your first effort and you're on page one of the Top Rated list -- now that's encouragement!
Please keep writing!
HOTTEST STORY. KEEP WRITING. LOVED HOW IT WAS ACTUALLY A STORY. WOULD LOVE ANOTHER w/ THE SAME CHARACTERS.
That was the best story I have read in such a long time!! I hope to read more from you soon!!
this is a very hot story. it left me very wet. keep writing.. i hope some of this is your own experiences.
it hink it whould be a GREAt idea if you made a second one. =)
ahha i love it! u got me sitting here like totally dripping babe!!! im a lezo myself and i think that u describe everything perfectly ;) im sure i'll b tryin some of those moves with my gf soon
thanks babe! gr8 story
xx
very well written, exciting, I love dirty,wet lesbian sex. your story left me aching and wet
I'm a Bi-sexual girl and reading that makes me so wet. I just had to get off, I called up my GF and we tried some of them postions. Instead of the double ended dildo I pounder her long and hard with a big strap-on. Great story please more like it.
It will keep me masterbating for many nights to come I loved it
had me panting and wanting more... good story... would love to see more.
Your first time writing had my panties soaking wet. I enjoy a commanding teasing woman and with a BDSM flavor..I want more please. You wrote with feeling. I was glued to my screen reading each chapter. Not to mention I read Your other two stories and...I need to stop now and go play with myself and put out the fire down below...
Here is a request...as you seemed to touch on it and made my mouth water for more...How about writing a BDSM Lesbian story? Please....with a cherry on top...thanks very much
I love a sensual read.. rather than just a rushed sex scene... you wrote really well and I could picture the characters. I'm in a lovely relationship with a man but I do have my fantasies about women.. it definitely got me wet!
Don't stop writing.
Oh my God! I loved your story and you can only guess what it had me doing!
well if that is your loss of writer's virginity, then you have made me very happy to celebrate it with you. I thoroughly enjoyed this - keep writing!
Stephanie's lust for Benjamin's beautiful young teacher, Kelly Carlson, began the first time she met her. It was parent's night at Benjamin's school and Kelly had turned to write on the blackboard. Her short tight skirt "rode up" affording Stephanie a marvelous view of her shapely nylon clad thighs. It takes some time before Stephanie sexually surrenders her emotions and body to the young beauty, but from this moment on her mind and libido are mesmerized by Kelly's luscious body. Similarly Kelly is instantly smitten by Benjamin's stunning, very fashionable and slightly voluptuous Mom. Although Stephanie is somewhat older than her, Kelly burns with lust for Stephanie's curvaceous body. Each time Kelly touches Stephanie, it is with slightly more intimacy; never dominating or hurting her, but always subtly inviting her to submit to new sexual experiences. Captivated by Kelly's beauty, personality and open affection for her, Stephanie's body readily consents to Kelly's prolonged erotic seduction; although emotionally she is initially quite reluctant.
Emotionally fragile and under constant sexual tension from a lack of physical affection by an insensitive husband, Stephanie's body is a delectable treat waiting to be eaten. The sensuous young teacher eagerly feasts on every serving of Stephanie's delicious body. Kelly's desire to have Stephanie sexually is not to dominate or control her, but that they might experience mutual joy and fulfillment, as they surrender their bodies to each other. Once Stephanie succumbs, the foreplay and sex becomes torrid. No moment in the story is more erotic than when Stephanie lays naked in Kelly's arms. As Stephanie pleasures her longing clit, Kelly smothers her mouth with sensuous kisses and kneads her heavy breasts. Stephanie slowly masturbates herself to a furious climax, amid cries of ecstasy, as she feels joy and sexual gratification she never knew existed. Savor every passionate caress of her body, gaze longingly at her hard nipples, feel every rhythmic squeeze of her yearning clitoris and thrill to her screams of joy, as this magnificent story details her erotic journey to a Shangri-La of sexual pleasures.
Excellent first story...it left me begging for more, and left quite a wet spot on my couch! Some excelent visuals were created from your story, though it felt a bit rushed at the end... regardless, it will leave me with many nights of fantasies!
Keep up the good work, can't wait to read more.
stepjones i think you i loved the story its a shame David
didnt see the affair with Steph was going on under his nose why would steph act like it was his fault when she started her affair with kelly first and when she cockolded david the sex that she was getting and giving to kelly she should have been understanding and just agreed it was for the best that they did divorce under stressful situations.
Pat
Atlanta,Ga
Absolutely the gold standard of seduction and lesbian sex. Eroticism, lust and constant sexual tension.
Magnificent slow erotic seduction of a beautiful sex starved Mother. The young teacher prepares and arouses the shapely body of the pretty mother for whom she so desparately lusts. Finally. intensely aroused and long denied sexually gratification, she surrenders her body to the young teacher. A torid affair quickly develops, which is described in delicious detail. Her marriage soon ends and she takes the teacher as a lesbian lover. Steamy and filled with sexual tension.
White hot passion and unbridled lust. Sophisticated and so well written.
The batteries on my vibrator died before I finished the second page. So arousing and erotic. I am extremely jealous of Kelly.
Beautiful Mother learns from her son's very young, but experienced teacher. Her body quickly becomes the focus of the lesson.
This was incredible, it's just begging for a second installment. Thank you so much.
The seduction of a sexually frustrated Mother slowly and sensuously builds to an erotic climax.
The seduction of a sexually frustrated Mother slowly and sensuously builds to an erotic climax.
WHERE IS PART TWO!?! GOT TO KNOW HOW THE RELATIONSHIP GOES FROM HERE!!!!!!!!!!!!
THAT IS ONE OF THE BEST LESBIAN STORIES I HAVE EVER READ , SOME MEN ARE AS BLIND AS BATS
Stephanie's sexually repressed body ignites with passion the first time she meets Kelly. From then on the fire never dies except for her husband.
I have read thousands of erotic stories. I am a straight man. This is as good or better than anything I have ever seen on the NY Times best seller list. The quality of the writing is superb. The reader is there every moment of the way.
that was one of the best erotic storys I have read,there are some as good and better, but they did not get me hard as this one did, I was hard from the start to the end,just loved it, Iam looking forward to reading more
One of the best i ever read. I hope it's not the only one. It's so good.
A wonderful beautifully written story,Eagerly waiting for more in any genre!!!
This was my very first lesbian read. Damn! Really what can I say? Oustanding story and characters. I'm going out like now and eat some pussy.
OMG, how I wish I was an aide in Kelly's classroom. I would surrender to her before she finished erasing the blackboard. Oh, to have that beautiful woman sexually pusue me like she did Stephanie.
Exquistitely written; the descriptions of the lust they possess for each other's body is incredible! Fabulous writing!
Secret Kisses pt 2? ;)
This is amazing. Only thing I have to say is lucky Benjamin ;)
Like your style of story telling, I LOVE ALL your stories, and I hungrily wait for more.
Please write more.
LadyTsun
Love this story with its beautiful descriptions. 5/5. For me, a little more story wrapped round the sex scenes would enhance it, especially towards the end. Text editing would tidy up a few English errors too, to make it perfect.
Great story, good strong characters, very detailed sex scenes without getting to raunchy. I feel it would have been better if the story itself had a little more to it. Aside from that, I couldn't stop reading it. thank you. and well done
This was an insight into any type of sexual experience.....you got talent.
Oh, to have Kelly as your first female lover. Magnificent descriptions; you can almost smell the scent of their aroused cunts and hear their moans of ecstasy. Excellent well written story, filled with lust that cannot be suppressed!
I kept a roll of toilet paper beside me to help sop up my pussy juices - & I had 3 great orgasms as I played w/my pussy.
Thanx Hun,
Love & Kisses,
Betty18
Be Naughty
wow sexy believable writing you turned me on no end but with all the story keep writing
Two Young women burnig with lust for each other. The moment they are together sexual tension soars. Teasing, arousal and eventually their love is consumated.
wow, a lesbian story written from a women's perspective. nice. more!
Hot damn,great stuff keep writing,going to check your tag & see if theres more,double hot damn
Sexiest story I have read in well I guess ever!!!!! Oh to be seduced like that!;)
First and foremost, Bravooooooooooooooooo on having a firm foundation and a clear understanding of the English language.
Second, love to read a story written by woman, that is willing to truly express herself.
The following are not criticisms, but sincere input, feelings, insights and suggestions, to help you further your cause, reach your audience.
Add a ton more detail, as to the color, material, cut/fit of your luscious participants panties, bras and slips and why they chose to wear them.
Much more detail, as to their pussies/cunts and the appearance of their luscious tight rosebud assholes.
All of that for these two and not one tongue or finger is exploring a virgin asshole. To have one woman explore a virgin asshole of another woman for the first time, volumes could be spent in describing all of their thoughts and feelings, as their assholes are explored.
More detail describing their pussy/cunt hair, the texture, color, the direction it grows and how they as women feel about pussy hair.
Describe the feeling of their tongues feeling the smoothness of their teeth and the smell of their breath.
Describe the feeling of having droplets of sweat run down their spine, their foreheads, their upper lips.
As a man, that dearly loves women and loves to love women, hearing women talk/share in detail all of the fore mentioned, is as if, I have discovered buried treasure.
But that is just me.................Bravooooooooooooooooooooo, on your first attempt.
More detail, make me smell them and taste them. Make me feel their beads of sweat trickle down their spine, or make me feel that droplet of nectar as it flows from their luscious pussy/cunt into their very asshole.
That is a lovely story!!! Your story was quite lovely the way it was without any asshole play at all!! Like the others I would also like a sequel to this story!!! Very well done, it got me very wet!!
"Secret Kisses" is a classic tale of seduction. After being teased and exposed to the temptation presented by a beautiful young teacher, Stephanie surrenders to her desires and finds what she truly wanted.
Very Hot Sex; yummy -- too tell the truth though, I've never understood the concept of double-dildos - it seems that the women are really wanting sex with a man!!! It sucks that apparently there are way to many men who don't / won't take the time to learn to be a better lover, grrrrrr, A man should be able to please his partner "just as well as another woman" if he'd just try.
I'm a 50+ yo straight male so I dislike the adultery, but understand the temptation and giving in; they appeared to have a stronger connection than Steph and hubby.
I'd much rather have had the story be a cliff-hanger; where it ended when hubby says "We need to talk!!" -- YEP; you'd have had everyone begging you for the next part (( hee-hee; with an evil slightly sadistic grin)) ...DKP
I'll be reading your other stories ASAP, thx
Just a gorgeous, erotic story. So wish I could have been either one.
A very lovely and extremely sexy story. However it seems incomplete. Please return to this tale!
Loved this tale of slow burning passion, that turns into love. I agree with DST, you should write more on these two characters, especially as you write so beautifully. One of the best storytellers I've had the pleasure of reading on Literotica. MatureBimale2011
Wonderful story! You can't let it hang just on a cliffhanger. I enjoyed your development of the relationship and the struggle that is within all such journeys. Thank you and keep writing.
All in all, a good effort for a first story, although it would probably have been better if you had concentrated more on character development and less on the sex of which there was a little too much for a story of this length. What really spoiled the story, though, was the terribly long paragraph on page four. This would have been difficult enough to read on a printed page; on a computer screen it was damned near impossible.
Sometime ago an "anonymous" comment stressed how erotic and descriptive it would be reading about a beautiful young woman's virgin rosebud being penetrated.
You have the command of the language to bring that to fruition. Pleeeeeease do!!!!!!
Please add another chapter or two. There is more to tell and I'd love to read it. Thank you for sharing this terrific story.
I loved this story. I had to stop reading along the way to play with my pussy then i went back to finish reading. Mmmmmm.
I absolutely loved the way that you made it believable
I had a orgasm in every chapter of the story. My pussy feels like it was happening to me
I'm quite sure that you can add another chapter or two and tell about how these two women get on with their lives
As you've observed this story is a bonafied hit. So what do you think about writing a follow up story and tell us about Stephanie an Kelly, & Ben. You do realize their is another 2 perhaps or more chapters, still waiting to be written. 5 🌟's
That was amazing! The BEST lesbian story ever!!! My pussy is so wet right now! I need more!! Kelly and Stephanie need to have more sex and they need to get married like now so Ben can have two mommy's!!!! Please do a second part! :)
This story is pure heaven. I like the way of the seduction, slowly, slowly, it's so perfect.
We can feel the true LOVE in this story, it's so wonderful that Steph, Kelly and Ben can finally live together in love.
Oh yes add a chapter in order to attend the Love Wedding between Stephanie and Kelly.
Congratulations and again THANK YOU
This is the best one I've read so far you should make a second part cause I'm dieing to know if Kelly moves in
I just loved the five pages.
I like the way you describe the loving. I can
taste it on my lips as I read.
I like the two series on the nanny. Sexy.
I wonder what percentage of women
have had this type of experience.
I've read this a few times already and every single time it leaves me very wet. Loved how it turned out in the end.
Such a beautiful story, it made my panties very wet indeed - no surprise really. Please let us have some more stories soon xx
Your page 4 is almost entirely one paragraph--which is such a solid mass of ink to make this reader's eyes glaze over. Your other pages are fine, but this was one hard slog.....
Story is great. this is just a formatting hint...
I've read this a few times and I'll keep reading it again and again. It's just so good and mmm deliciously sexy.
This was a totally delightful story--I'm bi but I don't recall a more beautiful story of two women finding each other. I see you haven't written a sequel but I do enjoy the thought of Kelly, the younger woman, as a teacher dominating Steph.
I liked the story and the sex was hotter than hell!
But a couple of style points:
1.Your use of “her” and “she” was very confusing. Sometimes you used “her” twice in the same sentence referring to one and the other.
2. You refer to her “hole” several times, which is jarring and inaccurate. Why not just call it what it is; her “cunt?” It is an appropriate word in a story like this.
3. The vagina has no sphincter.
4. Page 4 has been beat to death. I guess you must have been pretty turned on as you wrote it.
The sexuality, and the thinking in setting it all up were great. I’ll look forward to more from you soon.
Don't know if you are still writing, but the erotic elements of the story were handled very well. The other elements were treated as an afterthought, which is a bit of a shame, since they would have added some much needed context. As a result, your protagonists exist in a somewhat vacuous bubble filled with great clothes and candles and little else. However, it is a very sexy, sensual existence. Thanks for writing.
Rest of the story, great. But the ending leaves too many unanswered questions. She better go easy on her husband 'cause they BOTH were fucking around. If she let's him pay alimony AND child support she's a cunt! And if her girlfriend moves in at the same time he's moving out, he will figure it out.
I hope there is more to come between Kelly and Steph and live together and maybe get married this is a brilliant story what happens in real life. xx