All Comments on 'Seducing My Brother...'
by Sorian
- 22 Comments
Apart from a few grammatical errors you wrote this as if it really happened to you and I believe it did .Very good story .
Great concept - working through the brother's girlfriend. And you certainly have very vivid sex scenes. You have a winner here.
The idea was very good, original and clever, but it seemed that everything went too fast to be believable. One moment the girlfriend has come over, and some magic wine and a minute later it's a threesome. Where's the thought process in at least one character's head? How is the brother so unbothered by it?
A good story, but you had the potential for a really great stand-out story.
This is an excellent story! Vivid, well told, and sooo exciting!
Great job!
This story was amazing. I think a follow up is required! It made me really wet reading about her and her brothers girlfriend and then when she and her brother got together... I exploded everywhere! I love love loved it!
What an amazing story. You definitely need another chapter.
I totally agree with tyciol, that last line was awsome. Please write more :)
Maybe that's the very best ending line I have ever read! You can become a great writer!
Fucking awesome! Its outragious and delicious and all that kinda stuff! Great job.
with shit stories, (I don't like dad daughter mother son sex) this is great
To read this story was like irratic,the Brother switched position like 20 times with Sister on her back,then doggie style,then face fucking her.Oh and the impossible edging for what seemed like 2 hours.Are you telling me a young 20's guy has the wisdom or patience to not cum for two fucking hours.I call Major Bullshit.this story is all over the road,I say rewrite it or just plain delete it.
A good story that could be better developed. Needs more description also. No mention of pussy hair, clit size or cunt lips engorgement. Rating of only 4 no pussy hair!!!!
Good bones, but it needed more meat on it. Expand it and you've really got something here!