by Queen_Vicki
Great start and i like the direction this is headed. But it wasn't long enough. Update soon plz?
very interesting start i am looking forward to reading more
O.K. you got me reeled into this story. Please get chapter two to us as soon as humanly possible. But don't forget to make the Alpha suffer alot, he is being such an asshole.
interesting!!! I love the twist. that alpha is an ASSHOLE! I hope he will not get near the witch. I hope she won't care about his mate b.s. Not sure how serious the shifter could be about her but he does care at least. I guess it was the witch's blood that told him she's his mate? I'm definitely intrigued by the story. keep writing!
Ike turner and whats love got to do with it screaming anna may name
Interesting plot and characters. The ALPHA is so unreasonable though. How come Roger is attracted to her when she is the alpha's mate? And why didn't the alpha scent her before?
I noticed some spelling and grammar errors which can be easily fixed. I am looking forward to the next chapter ^0^
lol that was funny and good. he is in love with the person he dont like which is his's old black ass. that a witch. love it!!!! and i cant wait to read the next chapter!!!
Can't wait for the next chapter love it hate and love is the best
I was not expecting that...I was expecting the shifter to not like witches or somthing but Him?...wow...this is going to get interesting can't wait to hear more!!!
He's abusive and treats females like crap--how could he possibly make a good mate for Sallie, or anyone for that matter?
Nothing like love to bring down a bastard Alpha like Xavier. Now lets hope he changes his evil ways for his witch. Cant wait for the next chapter.
yes, this alpha is a complete ass. Looks like this is going to be a good one. However, you need to edit carefully there were a few typos and minor spelling mistakes that could become a problem.
....dead-end stories that are so great but never gets updated and eventually finished.
This story has renewed my interest in reading Literotica's stories! So I really hope that story gets regularly updated and has a conclusion, despite havings things like a life or a case of writer's block interfering.
I love the characters: Sallie Mae, Xavier, Roger and even the villainous Helen.
Girl, can you please try to update this story on a regular basis? Cuz, I have already read this chapter three times already, as if I am a dope fiend and this story is my drug.
Don't make me harass you.
i think this could be a good story but i'm a bit confused on how the hell he couldn't understand that Sallie Mae was his mate. Plus i have to agree with the others Sallie needs a much better mate then that Asshole of a Alpha.
Donna
SHE'S A WITCH!!! She could've easily whipped up a potion or kept up a barrier that was able to conceal her "scent". The asshole Xavier probably couldn't catch it because of those said barriers. I believe that while at home, Sallies barriers were down during the attack and the scent mixed with the blood which then transferred on to the heffa Helen.
I'm just speculating. Maybe I'm wrong. Anyhooo...GREAT JOB!! I hope that because of his behavior toward Sallie she was released from being his "mate" and she gets with the shifter!! YESSS!! =)
i love how this story went, its totally different from other stories that people write on here. Xavier has so much begging to do, and even that won't be enough for Sallie Mae to forgive his stubborn, rude, ass!! she deserves so much more than a guy that changes his feeling last minute just because he finds out that she is his mate. he has to actually feel bad for how he treated witches in general. the shifter is a much better mate for Sallie Mae than Xavier. =-)
great all around please !!!!!!!!!!! but whats gonna happen to roger ? and how is she he's mate all of a sudden
Thank you sweetie for explaining her shields or barriers were down doing the attack. She was not expecting for someone to attack her in her own home so why would she put them up? lol.Also witches uses shields to protect themselves from being invading on mentally, and emotionally and for the wolves scent wise. While she was working for the wolves she would put up her shield, to avoid conflict with anyone,because she knows how they feel about human witches. So therefor the Alpha could not pick up her scent, until she did get attack.
I would like to send a huge THANK YOU, to everyone who read my story. I appreciate the feedback, and I will take your comments into consideration, and again Thank You.
I'm looking forward to what you have instored for the next chapter. I didn't expect him to hurt Helen, I thought the tears were for her. OMG wait til he finds out the blood he smells is of his unimportant magical human... That punk ass!
I hope you can update this story soon along with your others as well.
Well done and by the way the Alpha seems like a nut and an asshole. I'm wondering how you will make him redeemable.
*****
I am sooo ready 4 da nxt updated u have captured my interest completely great job.
This is how she could make him pay. If she is his mate to hell with him she should go with Roger & crush him from the inside out. Yeah at this point I hate the alpha, but & I want to see him suffer for the way he allowed his pack to treat her & mostly the way he treated her. But it's ur story I'll love however it turns out, & I can't wait to see how he takes it know she is his mate. Please post again soon.
He fires her and doesn't recognize till she is attacked that she. Is his mate. The pack hates her and she has been defended by a tiger...that's a reealy deep hole to start in.
Interesting story so far. I would really like to see where it goes from here. Does Sallie Mae have two mates.
i loved ur story cud updated it soon.reali soon am dying to knw wat to the alpha
Please do not keep us waiting too long.......this story is great!
I think this is my new favorite story of yours. Keep up the great work.
I am one of those confused and asked a question, but I wouldn't have asked if I know. I knew somehow that ms. author would reply or post a comment so I checked. Since this is my first time reading about a witch, maybe the advise I could giveis to not assume that your others know everything about these magical creatures. Show us the characters ^0^ so that there won't be a need to explain or tell us readers what happened. This is the first chapter -the introductory chapter to lay out the setting, the characters and the conflict. One does not need to give us the resume or history of each character in the story in this part but at least, give us important details.
Even so, I still find the plot interesting :)
This story is so fresh. its not wam bam i love u lets make babies like the other stories. It gets a little boring to always read the same stories just using different names and characters.
I hope she gets with the shifter! Hopefully he cares for her and nothing mean/ conspiring about him... I mean he did stalk her but still hope she goes for the shifter and the alpha begs... BEGS through humiliation to be denied! Muahaha!
Hope you update soon hehe :)
That fucker! I so wanted him dead! I think I still want him dead - that douchebag of an Alpha!
Argh, the twist was awesome & you are a great writer to get me to hate that raging used tampon.
5 stars for an excellent start!
I am busy away writing chapter two of Shifting Hearts, and I should be finish with it very soon. But in the mean time you can always follow me on twitter to get updates on what I am doing, and everything else.
I don't do reviews but, this story deserves one and more! I am so on team alpha Xavier. I disagree with some of the people that want her to end up with the shifter. Go for the alpha, he might be able to change.
Vicki,
I've been stalking your page for updates. Please, please, pretty please, update soon.
I need another fix and soon please.. I read this story almost everyday like some kind of stalker.. Which I am and I'm a proud stalker. But only for you my Queen...lol
While reading this I thought I was in one of those topiairy maze gardens. Ok we get that he ain't diggin' witches or humans.............ok......You leave us with him being pissed his beta attacked his MATE?!?!?!?!?
Come on ....give us some clarity......fill us in on the real skinny...............
I'll stand in line with the other stalkers for the update on this one. I have to know....so
please don't tarry too long wit' it.
I'm going to do another read through to make sure I was following correctly...lol
Everything fell into place....please proceed with this tale....loving the cliffhanger with multiple options for outcomes in the next installment. Very nice.
You need a bit of tweaking as there were extraneous words that confused the flow at times.
please write more, i love the way you started this story. keep writing more
I really hope you post another chapter soon. I wonder who Sallie Mae is going choose to be with Alpha or Shifter. Ooohh it's gonna get good!!!! Lmao
But come on Vicki I need another update from you !!!
what a good ending for this chapter you got to right lots lots more and fast pleazzzz.!!!!!!!
I'm eager to see what happens next. I check in everyday for it. I'm begging you!
Please update!!
please update...this story has me hooked. your style of writing is very intriguing. can't wait to read more.
Personally I think that she should go with the alpha but you should make him work for her so that the plot is good and the tiger dude and the alpha should fight for her attention but let her get with the alpha coz I want to see him work for her and that stupid helen girl to feel shamed when the witch takes the alpha soooooooooooooo please make her get with the alpha
Thanx.
too many people get to your position, (i.e. they write a brilliant first chapter) then just drop the story and stop writing!
DON'T DO THAT!!!!
please continue the story, and please do it quickly, because i am a VERY impatient lady ;) and i want to know what happens next.
so get on with it!!! :)
k_k
.... I'm just stalking your story. Just carry on.
:)
I've already read this story 26 times. Yes, 26. I know. I know.
When it comes to picturing Xavier in my mind's eye, I keep thinking of the really hot dude from "True Blood". The actor who plays Alcide. And I sometimes think of the man who played the brother in the show "Prison Break" and he played Dracula in the third "Blade" movie (the crappy one with Ryan Reynolds and Jessica Biel).
For Helen, I see Michelle Williams, thanks to her new haircut.
For Sallie Mae, I see Anika Noni Rose, but she has cornrows in my imagination.
To anyone that is reading this message, I just submitted chapter two of Shifting Hearts. I really hope it lives up to everyone's expectations, and I hope everyone enjoys it. I really worked hard on it, and might have rushed it a little, so there might be some mistakes, but please gentle. until then you can follow me on twittter.
Now I can finally rest easy & get set to enjoy new developments for this dick of an alpha. I love this intro & I'm looking forward to more in the series.
BTW: Will you be following up on Dark Serenity? Thanks!
i think this is a really cool story cant wait for next chapter im officially hooked please update soon.
So excited for chapter 2!!!! I hope Sallie Mae chooses Xavier so she can make him WORK for her and prove to her that he deserves her and that they belong together.
I posted chapter on Tuesday, and it says it's still pending. If it does not post today, I might have to post it again. or put it on my blog.
Ok something went wrong, so I riposted it. But in the mean time you guys can get an early viewing of it. Go to my twitter page which is Queen_Vicki05 or Vicki Sundai, and click on the links to my blog in my tweets.
I love your concept. Your story telling is very good. Well done.
to jazz 1190... 'his's old black ass'? I thought the witch was a young black female and he was white.
To author, unique shifter love. Wolf shifter is jerk doesn't like his mate unknowingly, different.
I can't wait to read the rest, I hope it's finished :)
FUCK you NEED an editor! Even your own comments are full of errors! Its just too painful to keep reading, 1*
So much crazy going on but I love that you brought in a shifter beyond a were.. definitely needs some editing but still pretty good