by rocketskate
I’ve read a couple of other of your stories which I thought were quite good but felt a little let down with this one. I would have expected with 30 stories already and several of them marked highly then, as your latest one, this story would be very good but unfortunately I can’t say it is. The story itself about the dominant mistress and the two slaves one of whom is cuckolded is different. Always a good thing. But the way the story is written is something I would have expected of a first story not from someone who’s written the Anal Queen and the Latex Queen. I think you could have done with a beta reader or an editor or maybe both.
Disagreeing with your ‘anonymous’ critic… they always are! Enjoyed the story and will endeavour to read more. I do like your style and the content struck a chord!
This story was a very good basic concept that was a final proofread away from its best possible version. The story was almost hot enough to overcome it.