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the dialogues sound like a sitcom spoofing porn. thats the only way i can describe this

for a purpose — clarity. Quotation marks separate dialog from narration, a very helpful thing in making sense of a story. Couldn't get past the first couple of paragraphs due to the problems. Spend the time and effort to put your story into a readable format. Best wishes for future efforts.