The Sleepover Ch. 02

It’s Kelly, not Karen !

I’m totally male, hypocritical, and selfish. I would have a huge problem with anyone whom I am intimate with, going to another man. I would do without screwing mom in order to stop it.

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I love it when a good author finds ways to add new characters to the mix. Well, in this case not new, but better defined. This is a very hot yet kinda romantic story. It's about to get more erotic. I have been with women 20 years older and they were great teachers. Just not my mother.

It's very tough to find a decent follow up for a perfect story, but samslam outdid him/herself with this one... Definitely one of the all time favorites!

The story and storytelling just gets better and better.

I read this story a while back and happened upon it again by accident. This story is so hot! I have been devouring it and it's keeping me rock hard the whole time!

Four**4**Star story (barely)...too much "confusion" about what is going on, family-wise...

I have no issues with Brandon and Lauren being siblings...this is a great draw!! And finding out about Kristina being a virgin, and a newly-minted nympho, with predilections for incest sex with her newly-discovered half-siblings!!

But, the parents??!! That whole string is getting out of hand, what with "reciprocity" and the other crap!! This has...WHAT??!!

Gonna start next chapter...see what is what..."open-minded" as much as I can be...

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Ugh. I loved part 1, but I'm not into M/S at all....

Plus, did they grt Kristina on the pill and i missed it? She's gonna get knocked up if he keeps filling her up without protection....

Seems like I'm the only one that was hopping for the parents to fuck their kids. I think it would of been hot. Does anyone else know a similar story where the parents fuck the kids?

This one is just a little less hot than Part 1. But the parent-child sex that seems to be on tap is getting hotter, and this also gets 5 stars !

On to Part 3...

I couldn't even finish cause I don't know what's going on. I was really into just Brandon & Lauren especially with Brandon basically declaring in the beginning he is fine no fuckinh Kristina & it was also clear that Brandon only wants Lauren & vice versa but now you add Kristina as the half sister & the parents too. This just went downhill for me.

What happened to the condoms?

After reading the comments below, only one area did I agree with. The first chapter had a great plot line and character development along with titillating sexual experimentation. The second one has been one long orgasm. I have no problem with adding the folks into their relationship. Bet the Andrews would welcome some participation as well. The cabin could be an orgy house. I would really be interested in more of the dialog space between the sexcapades (sic). I have to hand it to the author for leading us all in this dramatic tale. I can't stop reading. On to Chapter 3.

Un-FUCKING-believable! Regardless of whether this is a dream, a nightmare, a fascination or what...you've gotten me off at least a dozen times with this seven-page chapter. And well more than that with the series!

Your tale of debauched sex is stirring and cock-hardening. It's a cum dream that's kept me awake a couple of times.

Interesting that you took your story this direction. It was surprise to hear those three are half brother and half sister. Interesting twist. But I have to also say bringing the parents in as sexual partners was a bridge too far for me. The first chapter was pretty awesome. Chapter 2 not so awesome for me. There are so many other paths with Lauren's friends you could take your story. I didn't read past page 2.

I see too that Brandon's no longer using condoms with Kristina. Guessing she'll end up pregnant in part 3. With that said, I like the way she ends up being their half sister, but feel bringing the parents into the mix is going to far.

Brandon forgot to use a condom with his threesome with Kristina.

This story........ Like most of the people leaving comments I liked the first chapter. There was something special about it. This one.......the train derailed. I like the story between Brandon and lauren, and I don't mind Kristina being there. They make sense when they mention Lauren needing a reason to be there. It makes sense that Brandon would have sex with Kristina. Otherwise she starts to feel like a third wheel and the readers feel bad for her. The problem I have is they don't go anywhere. Brandon is 'dating' Kristina, but yet she only comes over for sex. How does the illusion work if they are not seen together?

I'm not against the included parents thing, I'm against adding them for no reason. If the Mom had walked in on them and masturbated to watching, that would have worked. They could have noticed her as she left. That could have been the opening to her and Lauren's conversation. That would have been better then Lauren trying to seduce her mom out of the blue. catching them and seeing that, could have been what convinced mom to think about sex with her kids. Its a more natural ease into it.

In the first chapter there was an interaction between the siblings that was fun and I enjoyed. This chapter seems to have lost it. It's either they are having sex, or talking about sex. There is nothing else to this left but sex. Brandon said he would be great with just Lauren. It bothers me that he is great with just her, but now he is looking forward to doing his mom? I understand he is not a dominate person, but why is he letting Lauren convince him to sleep with his mom? Then we have the dad introduced as a possible fuck buddy for lauren...... Once again we have a character (Lauren) That doesn't want to sleep with someone. Why is Brandon okay with this happening? He is feeling weird about doing his mom, but nothing about Lauren doing her dad? I would think if he is great with just Lauren, then he would have a problem with others fucking her.

This chapter has hit the sex scenes hard, I hope the next ones actually tell a story other then who is going to fuck who. Maybe have Brandon or Lauren develop a backbone? Maybe the author will go out of his way to actually have something besides a long sex scene with minor breaks that just lead to more sex. So far in the context of this story the world is two houses (Brandon's and The parents) and a cabin somewhere. A great story needs more then just sex.

I'm going to avoid rating and see if like one commenter said, this was wrote later and inserted in. This chapter would be a three at best if I did rate it.

Just my point of view,

Buddy J.

ch 2 ruins a good story

Samslam,

sorry but I kinda agree with the other Monkey's in comments. I'm kinda being hit with cognitive dissonance by the different potential connections that you might make. Mom, Dad, The Andrews parent couple, etc... No I was happy in Fantasy World with Brandon and the 18 year old girls. All combinations of the Five. sigh.

Wow you had a great read going here for the most part, 5 stars all the way until this FUBAR. The slip on the character name is one thing but then you have to bring the old folks into this. Whom by the way are so dead set against even the slightest thought or possibility of incest, for about two minutes that is, until of course they think they might get a taste. That cost you 4 stars and the only reason I gave you the one is because beneath that one star it says, I HATE IT! That said, your a decent writer and I like longer stories like this but I guess your imagination ran out for the kind of story you had started. I hope you can pull your shit together and continue writing hopefully with what it takes to follow a good story line through. I'm older than the parents in this story so don't think this is some younger reader revolted by the thought of the parents getting involved. Its about follow through and giving your characters a mind of their own and following them where they take you, not pushing them where you want them to go. "Thanks for the effort and keep writing." W

Oh my god, loved it, was hard the whole time reading it.

This jumped the shark quickly. Dragging the parents into things snapped the elastic on the suspension of disbelief. Good example of why stories dont need sequels

The Kelly/Karen bit messed things up. Also, is Kristina now on birth control? Ever since they shifted to Brandon's apartment, there has been no mention of a condom and multiple mentions of 'filling her up.'

Only read 1&2 so far,

I love it all until dad was getting brought into it.

Also Kelly’s name becoming Karen in part 2 felt awkward.

Love the story, working on beginning of Ch 2….my pet peeve is the MAJOR character f’up with Brandon breaking up with “Kelly” in Ch 1 but Dad asking about what happened with “Karen” while working on the plumbing at the new apt early in Chap 2!

Loved it.

I don't recall reading this 2nd part of this series in the past. It's good but i am a little confused as to what happened with the concern for the need to use birth control. It seems to have disappeared unless the girls are suddenly on the pill. Maybe i missed that connection somewhere.

You lost my 5 stars when you brought in the parents....the same parents who tried to stop the half-siblings from fucking. It was a perfect brother sister threesome. All you needed to add was a little breeding and boom, perfection! Alas.....

Going great!!!! Would of been better if, you had the mother just get fucked by her son.. They doing it under his roof & not his parent's.. So, its not like they have to let the Dad know.. Since, basically the mom came over with the intend to get fucked by her son & not say anything anyways, with the Dad fishing.. If the mom tells Dad about her & their daughter, then she has to tell him about her watching their children fuck & masturbated, too.. Then explain, why she didnt tell him before.. I just hope Kristina brings her Mom over & let him fuck her, too.. Cant wait for next Chapter..

This is where you lost me. You had an amazing thing going and then suddenly and seemingly for no reason, you changed course and then got the parents involved. And after they were very against them dating because they didn't want the incest to happen. This would have been leaps and bounds better had you left the parents out and left it with their secret incest and the thrill of being caught.

So hot.

Yea! this is such a great story

Next up, the carpet installer, the pizza delivery guy and his 33 year old virgin sister who just left the convent...

Stay tuned!

Nah.

This story fell off quicker than Russia's currency.

Not gonna lie it's pretty good but I actually liked where the first book was headed like there'll be multiple girls that have sex with one guy not that this is bad it's just taking such a drastic turn like you decided that you want to change the story so it's good but it's not for me I do hope though that you do create some sort of story that's more like the first book

What a shit writer. This has great potential and then you fucked up what could have been a sexy, odd romance and devolved it into a lame duck fest. Pathetic.

WOW! Good job; thanks for sharing your work! I read this a few years ago, ran across it again,

I very much enjoyed it, although the parent's certainly bring in a complication that I'm not a fan of. Not a fan of sharing, and I loved the idea of both Lauren and Kristina being all his, even (or especially) because they are siblings.

This was tough to read through what seemed like a change in direction.

It initially felt like a fantasy, and very erotic, with an undercurrent of emotion that would rise to the surface as Brandon and his sister realized they loved each other deeply. Perhaps instead the threesome would become a committed unit, although Christina seemed to be in it a bit more for the sex.

Now it seems to be devolving into how much sex can we have, and how many people can we screw?

Still very good

About to start the next chapter...

Ruined it with the parents lost the sexy romance feel.

I preferred this without Mum, but it was good nevertheless.

5 more Stars !

Rapier

Story was fine until you brought in the parents.

I read the comments and I agree with Anon, what happen to the condom as there was no mention of Kristina going on the pill. If she didn't and no condom, she could pregnant really quick. 5 stars

I’m sorry, but you lost me here. I don’t know why these brother and sister stories always seem to devolve in a family free for all. It detracts insanely from the brother sister love story that was developing. I don’t get it. Why would the love for and making love to a sibling leed to “o, well, lets have sex with the parents”?

You are a very talented writer but this story took a wrong turn for me. And not only for me it seems.

Love it, so horny and also really enjoying where this is going. Please proceed to the next chapter.

You, my good sir, are a master of literature. Anyone to make decent erotic lit. That parentage reveal is on a whole different level of skill on par with Sir Arthur Conan Doyle! Also, all the sex scenes in this series are of of this word.

It was a good story until you bruaght the dad into it.

Um very good. But I think everyone has forgotten Kristena is not on the pill & Branden hasn't been using a condom lately. Anyway good story so far. Thanks!

Why does every great story always wind up being absolutely destroyed by the addition of swapping, cheating, or all characters getting together with everyone in the story? Seriously it happens every damn time I find a decent story. Do you guys f up the story intentionally? It's unbelievably irritating!

Lauren is so hot I just wanted her and Brandon to act like they are married and live happily ever after like a true husband and wife

You write a fun story, but I agree with some other comments that the story loses “zing” when you expand the action to more characters. The thing about taboo stories is that what’s happening is “wrong” and very very rare. If everyone is doing it, it’s not rare anymore and the taboo nature of it is lost.

For me, history has lost some of its magic.

The problem is not incest at this point, it is the fact that Brandon's relationship with lauren and kristina was special, now it is only about fucking, I am no longer able to feel that love that the three shared.

In the above story, Lauren seemed to accept only Kristina, and Brandon himself acknowledged that just Lauren was enough for him. In this story, he is clearly uncomfortable at first with the idea of ​​fucking his mother, and ends up accepting because his sister insists, and suddenly he doesn't even care that Lauren fucks their father anymore, Lauren goes through as well. a similar process, sudden and seemingly convinced of everything by Kristina, who has gone from an innocent virgin girl to an uncontrolled nympho.

Lauren's first sexual relationship with her mother felt uncomfortable for me too, very forced and sudden. It feels as if they have entered a spiral of manipulating and convincing themselves to fuck different relatives, and when one feels uncomfortable the others try to convince him until suddenly the person feels comfortable with the idea and no longer cares about anything. to happen.

This lengthy review is not a criticism of you, I just needed to let you know how the story felt to me at this point.

So, what happened between you and Karen?"

LOL!

Did you write the story, or plagiarize it?

Hint; Brandon's ex girlfriend was named Kelly, not Karen.

It's supposed to be YOUR story, you cast remember your character names?

I stopped reading at that point.

Highly disappointing.

Wonderful, so insanely debauched and depraved, absolutely sucking fucking wonderful. Cunt lapping sex maniac Lanc’s UK.

Getting the parents involved is pretty hard core. Not sure how this will go. I think you should have made it just and the siblings and how they will work it out after finding out that Kristina is related. How can they stay together and not get caught. The incest thing is tantalizing but hard to make it work long term. Can you do this or will it all collapse?

Yeah, like other comments on here, there seems to be something "off" with this chapter. Terms "rushed" and "Lazy" were used to describe this chapter. Those seem fair because of inconsistencies and confusion. For one, is brandon's ex girlfriend's name kelly or karen? ANd, there was an Initial concern to use a condom with kristina and then, all of the sudden, No condom was used with kristina. Plus, there never was one used with Lauren. Other than those head scratchers, it was a decent read. But, then dad was suggested as entering the mix. I am Not against reading about dad/daughter incest but i don't like the way the plot is being suggested for dad/Lauren. That is a turn-off. I will delay my rating for now til i see how chap 3 measures up.

I won’t pile on to what most others are saying, but will note one recurring theme I’m not big in … the “ I lined it up and rammed it all the way in one thrust” oft repeated. Not a loving technique and misses the pleasures of slowly overcoming the resistance as the pussy lubes and opens up. Also doesn’t seem to match Brandon’s super lover character.

Just my opinion, your handle (Mr. SLAM) suggests you think differently and, hey, you are doing all the work of writing, so might not be worth the proverbial two cents.

"Of course, I'm new to this but I can't imagine having too many dicks lined up wanting to fuck you." This line is where the romance wax exchanged for pure sex. What happened to Brandon only being with Kristina as a way to substantiate the time with the one he loves? That was the validation for multiple partners. Being with "Mom" is a fantasy, but what does he really get out of it that makes it worth handing Lauren off to another dude (dad or not).

Great story up to here, but if Dad is brought into the loop in Ch 3, I'll read that far and drop the story mid chapter. Sorry to be a downer, but that will have killed the story for me.

Where to start... the whole thing felt rushed, the connection with the three central protagonists were sacrafice to drag yet more characters into the sheets. There was at least a passing nod to the natural reluctance on Mom's part to bed her own daughter. The story of her turmoil - like the intimacy between Brandon, Lauren and Kristina - was, frankly, betrayed in favor of short, unengaging sex scenes.

Okay, I’m going all Sherlock Holmes here. In my comment on the first chapter, I brought up my concern about a missing partial story. Now I perceive another mystery. This second chapter seems to have a bit of a different feel to it like it may have been written by another author or may be written out of sequence from the first. In the first chapter, Brandon’s ex was Kelly in this second chapter her name has been changed to Karen. I’m a little intrigued here, but I have no way of solving these mysteries.

Both chapters were great reads. But I need to agree with the commenters before me. The concept of making Lauren sleep with her father so that Brandon can sleep with his mom is a complete turn-off for me, especially when Lauren doesn’t want to do it. The mom insisting on this is really nasty in a bad way. She is pimping out her daughter to her husband because she is lusting to sleep with her son? Not good. Not good at all. And Brandon encouraging her to do what her mom wants while she doesn’t want to makes Brandon a real scumbag user in my eyes and not caring at all for his supposedly beloved sister. I would see the dad as a sexual predator if he should agree to his wife’s demand. Kristina now seems out of control for deliberately encouraging Lauren to sleep and actually start an incestuous relationship with her dad. Lauren should not be sacrificed so that Brandon and Mom can munch on each other. No Dads, please.

Where the first part was great and took the time to go over the details, this second part seems lazy and too eager to move ahead throughout.

story keeps getting better, even though its long you never really know because you are so engrossed in the story

When did Kristina go on birth control?

I agree...No parents...Get back to a 4 on 1 orgy with Lauren’s friends...

WTF, I can see where this story is heading and if I’m right and you include the parents especially the fathers in this story. You just fucked up a great story. It was a ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ story.

I agree with the most other readers: chapter one was awesome. Getting Kristina involved - ok and reasonable but then making her to the half sister was for me a downer. Involving the mother is normally for me not a problem, but in your story with the described background: no thanks (I would say unrealistic, but here at literotica...). But including the father ESPECILALLY when Lauren have NO intentions to do so and Brandon nearly pushing her? Sorry, but no ... unfortunatly no more favorite author or story....

took a good sex story, brother, sister, and teen girls, was hot. then brother and sister sex was hot, everything was good, then just had to ruin it, with the parents and all of a sudden, dad is going to fuck his daughter anytime he wants? WTF? you lost your readers, bud. just another crap story, i know where this is going not even going to waste my time reading the rest i don't want to know.

The story started out so hot with the lingerie party. Then, adding Kristina into the mix with Lauren and Brandon was OK. However, as soon as you added the “conversation” between Lauren and her mom, you lost me. I filter for brother/sister stories, and too often a storyline is going great, it’s erotic, sensual, and naughty, and then for some reason an author feels compelled to bring the parents into it, and it just ruins it. I’ll never know where things went between Lauren and Brandon, whom I look at as the main characters, with maybe Kristina as an additional plot line to spice things up, because I stopped. I’m done. If I wanted to read parent/kid stories, I’d filter for that. I don’t.

Was a great story right up to the point you added the parents, then it dropped to an ok story. It went from a loving relationship to kind of a sleazy relationship for Brandon and Lauren. Lauren who starts out wanting her brother then decides to become the family slut and Brandon who seemed decent for the entire first part of the story, being the caring guy who just wants his sister(s) and making sure they were satisfied then talks her into screwing their dad which makes him seem like a dbag and pretty much changed the entire feel of the story. While the first chapter was excellent, I probably wont be reading chapter 3.

I really like the Brandon, Lauren relationship. Kristina as well is okay but adding the parents destroy's all other relationships. Don't think I will bother with the next chapter. I know it's the authors story but I simply like the pure romance of Brandon and Lauren, doesn't need anything else. Too many others fractures everybody's feelings and muddy's everything for me. Leave the parents to their own thing let the kids go their own way before everyone gets lost.

Wow. Made me supper horny and hard. Blow my load several times. Great story.

did the Ex-girlfriend change her name from Kelly to Karen?

But please keep the father out GzuG6D

Hoo, boy! You are really good!

I wish there was a way to set up a poll here. I would like to know if I am a minority or others think this story is really thought provoking rather than merely a wanker.

The brother sister thing was great. I think several guys had some sort of physical contact with their Sister. These stories let our imagination go where many of us did not when we were growing up. Some guys had some sort of sexual run in with their mom., I believe MUCH LESS than the sister contact? Again, ever since Oedipus there has been that weird desire and introducing Mom into this is hot to the guys, but maybe not to the ladies? In any event, getting dad involved would be GROSS! Maybe it was my very disfunctional relationship with my father, but the dad/ daughter thing is really repulsive to me.

But hey, this is the author’s story, not mine. He has done a wonderful job writing both HOT and Thought provoking situations! I applaud him for that and absolutely will not criticize him or his writing because of my messed up thoughts about families.

You can obviously see his work REALLY has me looking at my earlier years in a most analytical manner. Well done, sir. Even if you force me to open a couple closets i prefer closed.

I find it very aggravating to read some of the negative comments here on Literotica. This is a well crafted tale about a controversial subject, and the author did a great job expressing his/her creative talent! If you don't like the subject - don't read it. If you have constructive criticism - post it in the spirit of trying to help the author & do it in a respectful manner. Keep up the good work samslam & don't let disrespectful people interfere with your artistic expression.

many times before, sequels are very disappointing at best, but this was crash and burn. The parents........ REALLY!!! I won't be reading ch.3.

Why ruin it by adding the parents?

' "You think I should fuck your brother, right?" The way mom said it made it a statement rather than a question. "Well then, don't you think your father deserves a reciprocal arrangement?" '

Uuuh, fuck no I don't!!! My sister's pussy belongs to ME!! MINE!! Sorry mom, I think you'd be great, but no way do I want dad's dick anywhere near my sister's body! That pussy stays in the shape of my dick, and mine alone! Hell yeah I'm double standard selfish!!!!

(Hell, honestly i didn't want mom in there either!)

I love that they all enjoy each others love juices! A delightful pleasure ignored in too many other stories. Thank you!

I was so into this and wanting more!!! Then you ruined a perfect story by adding the parents!!!

You could have kept the parents out of it and could have added Alex or Kylie instead. I would have preferred that.

Bring back Alex and Kylie

I’m starting to worry where this story is heading..Leave the fucking parents out of it

Bring Back Alex .. You did not need the Parents .. To Me Alex made more sense

Why include the parents?. It started as a nice romance.

I read chapter 1 and 2 in a single sitting, so the big picture of the story has a flow to it. I'm ok that Kelly's name got changed to Karen. She was minor anyways. What I did notice that detracted from enjoying ch 2 is how careful the characters were in ch1, to make sure Brandon had on a condom when he was with Kristina. In ch 2, Kristina simply gets Brandon many times with no mention of protection. Did she suddenly get on the pill and the reader doesn't know? I thought the first time they came together there might be an "oops" moment where they suddenly realize that they forgot the condom and panicked for a few paragraphs, but it didn't happen. Then they had sex again and again, and no one seems to notice. Is the author trying to set up a surprise pregnancy to deal with in the next chapter or is he inconsistent in writing and everybody's safe and we forget about the previous chapters and move on like nothing has happened? I don't get it. However, I've liked reading it so far and will continue, but my constructive comments I hope will help the writer to be more consistent between chapters so the story flows more smoothly.

The first part was perfect with the 4 18 years old. Where are Alex and Kylie?.

The story is getting bored. I will not read chapter 3 anymore.

Why include the parents. It started as a nice romance not it is a dull boring story

Dammit. I hoped Alex would return. Instead its kristina. Dont care for the parent thing tbh.

I just encountered Literotica this year, 2019. The collection of stories is extensive with a broad range of writers with fictive imaginings. The"Sleepover" series touches many relationship threads… too many for some as we find in the comments. The imagination in chapter 1 featured four curious teen girls getting lessons from an accomplished guy. The chapter developed a special bond among a brother, sister and a friend whom the reader did not yet know was a half-sister. As the chapter ended, this reader was satisfied that the saga had concluded. Later it was discovered that there is a Chapter 02 which reveals Kristina's origins and the greater inter-family history which opens a whole new set of possibilities.

I was satisfied that the story could have ended at Chapter 01. I was settled with the number of characters in the frame. You, Sam, took Chapter 02 to threads I had not expected; your imagination is larger than mine.

I'm going to read Chapter 03 with an open mind and anticipate it will earn my "5" as did the first two chapters.

Sam, write on.

im going to give your next chapter its first read, i hope it stays just a 3 way romance, involving mum qnd dad just RUINS whats a good love story with possible marriage and future kids.

Too many people, too complicated now, I’m just gonna ignore the next chapter, it hurts leaving a story unfinished but I’d rather leave it with Brandon, Lauren and Kristina, just a nice happy romance between siblings.

good almost to this point ... too many involved when the senior generation was included ... wont read the last chapter

The age differential just isn't unusual. The "endangering close families" is a much more credible objection.

Why do you people feel the need to ruin a series by trying to make it more complicated than it needs to be? Adding more people into the mix doesn't help a story, and in your case completely smashes what could have been a wonderful three way romance. Such a shame, I don't think I'll even look at the next chapter.

I gave it 5*. Like the mommy fuck, dad daughter, not so much. Maybe cause I fucked my mommy but would never do that damage to my daughters.

I wanna fuckkk

Ya blew it

Different strokes for different folks, but moms and dads gross me out. I'll stick with sisters and cousins. Thanks for the story until that stuff though.

Maybe she wants Lauren to fuck her Dad, while she fucks Brandon side-by-side, just like Mom and Dad and Mr. and Mrs. Andrews do at the cabin, That would make a cool sequel right? Also, can't help wondering if Lauren is on the pill.

When all the girls were together Brendon had to wear a condom when he fucked Kristina . Then he starts having unprotected sex with her with no mention of any protection. Either on the pill or he ends up knocking her up.

Really love it but I must point out a minor flaw that disrupted the story's flow for me. I found it made me have to double back at times to clarify what was happening when you switched back and forth between the first person and third(?) person narrative perspectives. Brandon is your Narrator but at times you refer to "Brandon" in the third person in one sentence and then switch back to "Mom" from the perspective of Brandon narrating in the next. A minor problem in what is otherwise excellent editing.

I agree with anonymous (01/02/18) – leave the dads out of it. As far as that goes, I think Lauren and Kristina are enough, though I'm not sure where else it can go after and incestuous bisexual three-way. I have read this and most of your other stories and while I haven't cared for all of them, when they're good, they're very very good, and when they're bad, like this one, they're fantastic. For a long time I didn't think you would top 'My Virgin Sister', but this one does. Maybe I'm just old enough to prefer young girls.

what a great read. very erotic. can't wait to read chapter 3!

WOW, there aren't too many step further that this can be taken - but I know a couple. Since this is many years old, I'll find out in the next chapter if they all make it all happen. Thanks again for writing such a erotic story!

I really hope the dad's don't get involved. That would ruin the really good story you have going...

just my 2 cents...

Would love another chapter.

Stop the suspense, 'we' need to know what happened next !

Just get weaving - what's keeping you ?

I'm hoping they all end up in the cabin for big orgy/swapping holiday weekend.........

Rapier

As brilliant as it is, should have kept it simple with out adding the father(s) into it leaving the brother as the alpha male ijs

but I had to read the rest just to see what everyone else meant. I agree, it was better as a private thing with just him and his sister. Kristina was okay, but it's meant to be about the two of them mostly. It's just getting weird with all the other characters (of course sex with moms just weirds me out in general). You kind of loose the taboo deliciousness when everyone starts fucking everyone, then it's like it just seems everyday, and where's the fun secret from everyone? That said, I think the answer to Lauren being unwilling to sleep with dad is to have KRISTINA do it instead. Give her a little more experience.

Speaking of which, how could they mistake the meaning when they say "we wanted artificial insemination, and your dad donated sperm" "so?" "we did it the old fashioned way" - he's her father no matter how the sperm was donated! Why would she tell them that if she wasn't saying he was the father?

And maybe I missed something, but why does he always use a condom with Kristina until suddenly on page 4 (I think) he's cumming inside of her without one?

I want to hear about alex

"OHMYGOD" & "Unfuckingbelievable" must be favorite phrases of yours.

I've been following this since the very beginning with The sleepover.

The story at least with the kids fucking their parents

You really do need to wrap this story up

Say one chapter with Mom and Dad

Then

The finale with both families at the cabin

Seriously? No time for the ‘two-family orgy at the cabin’ follow-up chapter(s)?

Again, I'm late to the party on comments. I agree with parts of the comments I did read. I expected to find out the "secret" of the parents was that they were actually also brother and sister. Didn't like that they made Kristina their sister. I don't like the idea of the parents coming into the "party". Too many partners makes it confusing (just like Karen/Kelly...Kelly was Brandon's girlfriend in Chap. 1 and in Chap. 2 she is Karen?). What's next? The DNA shows that yes, Kristina is their bio sister but that her "dad" turned out to be Lauren's father and he wasn't as infertile as they thought? Then do we get the dads and Brandon to have sex with each other? I'm good with letting the story end here and using our imagination to take it any further. You could take all the comments into consideration (and I've only read about 6 of them) and make a new story using them with totally different characters. JMO Anyway, I look forward to reading more of your stories.

While I do like where it started and most of the second chapter. The whole Kristina is a Sibling, while not entirely out of nowhere with her comments about the parents at the Cabin, I don't think the Trade off for him getting to Bang his Mom is that the Sister has to Bang the Dad, if they wanted a 3rd person for the party, hell even a 5th they have 2 people from the First story that are ok with the whole Banging Brandon with the other girls. But I'm just a Reader and probably won't read the 3rd chapter because I'm not looking forward to the Dad being involved, Props to the Mom for only Banging her Daughter and not her Son because someones gotta Bang the Hubby else its cheating part. Though a Side step (Because characters have Agency and all that), They could bring the Mom in without her getting dick, Like she did while watching her Kids fuck, So long as she only has sec with Lauren (Maybe even Kristina), By all rules we know she can be involved, Not sure where cumshots/eating cum filled orifices fits in but TECHNICALLY it may or may not breach the no penis rule.

Honestly, Lauren doesn't want to do the Dad, you can have her do it, its your story and all, But we don't need to hear about it, if that makes any sense, she does it once and doesn't like it or doesn't do it at all, whatever works, Kristina really should not be given that much credit on her input because she said it herself, she isn't that experienced (only 1 person to date and it ends up being her Brother), But just because Lauren Could have sex when ever she wants, but if she isn't attracted to her Partner why bother? (That parts from Experience, Lack of attraction leads to bad sex.)

And Lauren also states that she isn't really attracted to her Dad, And that the idea is a little ew (Paraphrasing) and I can't really blame her for it. The pay offs not all that great really, and IF we end up with the Mom/Dad being regulars in the story in the Sexual way, the story is going to be Convoluted to all hell.

In conclusion, please for the love of all that is Incestuous and Holy, Please don't bring the Parents into it just for that sweet Incest Trifecta. Bring Alex back, Brandon liked her. Speaking of, Brandon wasn't sure about the Mother until a few days later either. Gotta love that Character Development.

Don't worry about 'who who' owls or mistakes. It's cleaer genetic attraction drew all siblings together. And this isn't a simple cuck tale as 'mistake' implied. The mom is clearly respectful of her modified reciprocal vows. Perhaps a few glitches could be caught by a fellow lit author in careful edit prior to professional publishing. Genetic attraction is the secret thread tying the story's events together. Well done.

Adding the parents and (eventually, the Andrews, I assume), is a mistake. It takes away from the story and just turns it in a swapping orgy. No thanks. The whole 'Kristina is your sister' swapping debacle is a bit too contrived just to expand the swapping. It's unnecessary. If you are into wife swapping, then go to that category.

Personally, if I were Brandon or Lauren, the first thing I'd do, is ask for a paternity test, to see who my father is. After all, their mother is obviously a swinger that doesn't care who fucks her, and her husband is one of those guys that gets off watching someone else doing what he shoud be taking care of. So realistically anyone could be their father.

Incest stories are, by their very subject matter, supposed to be a very private and intimate thing. Thats part of the appeal. By making the same mistake so many other authors make, by adding in more and more characters to the mix, it's the exact opposite of what makes a good incest story, completely ruining that secret intimacy that appeals to incest fans, it's just another swapping story.

You need to keep track of the characters in the story, it's not like there are too many of them. Who is Karen? In chapter 1 the girlfriend was Kelly.

like it very much..

hope there will be part 3 where it will be a family gathering and that is a very happy healthy family life and wish that i would be part of a loving family.

While I couldn't rave high enough for chapter one, (whew!) this one is slowly turning me off. Bringing mom in is borderline, but dad? Total turnoff.

Personally I dont see why brother isnt agreeing with her not wanting to fuck dad. I mean, what guy wants to share his girl(s) anyway? I sure as fuck wouldnt be sharing Lauren with anyone! Sorry mom, it was a nice thought, guess deep down Im just a two woman man these days! ;)

I LOVE the first 10 pages of this story (combining chs 1 and 2), after that it gets a bit much. If you are to do a ch 3 which doesn't seem likely, my advice is to pull back from the parent discussion. If Lauren wants to keep playing with her mom, fine, but cut everything else out. No discussion of her relationship with Brandon to the father and no more talk of Brandon and his mom. I think the secrecy of Brandon and Lauren makes it the hot story that it is. I love the dialogue you give to this story. Some authors just focus on the sex thinking that's the hottest part, but for me it's easily the minds of the characters. The better the dialogue, the better the situations are set up and the moral dilemmas are dealt with.. I just think the hotter the story becomes. Taking this story as an example of what I'm talking about, it turns me on exponentially hearing how badly Lauren wants it, how much she craves her brother. And I love that it becomes a story about how close the two of them are as brother and sister yet marriage remains never considered. Some people take it there stupidly imo. They are brother and sister and will always remain that way, but they crave each other as well. That's hot. Well done sir.

loved the entire story until the dad was brought up. would have been a 5, but I think a 3 fits better now

Loose ends need tying up please.

Will she wont she?

Will he wont he?

Will he get to 'have' the other half sister?

etc. etc.

Really liked this story up until a parent became involved in the relationship. Don't particularly like incest stories with parent/child incest.

I love your first story and I even I liked this one but why did you to have to go with present tense, It's kind of annoying.

I love the story so far and would love another chapter.

Both stories are so well written, The half-sister doesn't bother me. but started to lose me when the mother was added. And totally lost me when they start talking about bringing the father in.

Other problem I have is early in the story they were careful about using protection/ Then all of a sudden Brandon and Kristina are going at it with no protection. Or is this a set-up for something later on?

The name slip with dad saying Karen instead of Kelli would have been forgivable if Brandon hadn't done it also. What he should have said was "Besides, after all the fighting Kelli and I did," that would have made it look like dad just forgot her name.

It would have been the best for the story to move on without involving the parents.

It started going downhill when mom got involved and i just had to quit it the moment the dad got added. Brandon should atleast be possessive over her sister but instead he wants her to fuck her dad when she herself doesn't want it.

More with four?

Hard to say, depends on how you handle it.

Looking forward to more !!!

This was a fun chapter. Your writing style is still wonderful. Dialogue is believable and realistic. Narration and descriptions are clear enough without dominating the flow of the story. And let's not forget character development. All good, all well done.

The most important thing I want you to know about how to move forward with this series is that whatever you decide to do will be the best choice. I decided a while ago to try to be more appreciative of Authors' efforts, and their generosity in sharing them with us For Free (tyvm).

Having said that, my only suggestion is that whatever new couplings might take place, small scenes with high levels of resisting incest that yield to the taboo attraction. Otherwise, you wind up with Group Sex, and I find that the Incest dynamic gets too watered down, even when elegantly rendered.

Add them in.

As another reviewer mentioned, it's heading towards too much of an incest free for all.

Makes it less special.

I liked the story until the talk about having their dad join. That ruined things for me, the story basically went downhill for me after the inclusion of the mother, where I started fearing that the dad would also get involved.

For most guys it's very different to share a woman with another woman, compared to sharing her with another man.

I would expect Brandon to be a bit more possessive of Lauren. I certainly would in his place.

If the author wanted to add more sexual partners, what about having one of the other girls join them again instead?

I vastly preferred the first chapter to this second one.

Seems like the author forgot a character's name when writing this second chapter:

Her name is Kelly, not Karen

liked this story but... kinda wanted sister to say she only want brandon. for male willing to share brandon with safe females... but she only wants brandon herself.

I've highly enjoyed reading both these stories. But wasn't the break up in the first story with a Kelly, and then dad in this story talks about Karen..? Doesn't take away from the story much, but just an admin note..

Wow!' In my next life I want to be Brandon, or Lauren, or Kistren. Hell I'll even settle for one of the parents. Again WOW!!!!

I'm a little ashamed to say it but like to keep my incest limited in stories. There is a hypocrisy to it but hey we're already talking about incest, why not be a hypocrite while we're at it. :-P

I've found a jive with sibling incest, I can work with mother son, I'm least comfortable with father daughter but when I'm desperate. However, when you start throwin' them all together in a free for all you've crossed my threshold. The mom threw me off and just as I started to come to terms with it you throw in the dad too... I'm with Lauren on this one. At least leave the daddies out of this.

Very hot except...

You lost me when you added the parents into this very good story.

I hope you do another chapter but drop the parent and let Kristina , Brandon and Lauren work it out for them selves.

I like a good daddy/daughter incest story but not at all in this story that stands very well by itself. Keep the parents out of any future stories on these young siblings.Just turned me off when you put the mom in, then thinking about adding the dad.

... here about the parents' involvement. I'm satisfied with the three siblings' participation. Perhaps with the occasional get-together with the other two young ladies.

Ok, maybe more than occasional.

Please keep these coming.

(no pun intended)

RaM

Hope you keep this story going. I was all for Brandon and Kristina getting together, but now I can't wait for the parents to fuck them also.

I'm much more comfortable with (half)sibling incest than parental involvement, whether father or mother.

Lost me in the last few pages.

I wanna see what happens next

I'm just waiting for Alex, the black girl to come back. I'm not feeling the daughter/daddy issue. Great story overall.

I'm still worried about K getting in the family way.

Maybe Lauren can watch mom & dad get jiggy with it and then decide if she is going to do daddy.

Love the story. And can't wait for Chapter 3.

I just finished page 4, after Lauren and her bro tag team their half sister. Did I miss something or did he shoot a huge wad of cum into Kristina's fertile pussy. No condom. They have been pretty careful about that so far during the whole story. Why haven't they discussed getting Kristina on the pill before now, since they are going to be doing the zuga-zuga on a regular basis now. Just wondering... oh well back to page 5... Great story.

Yes, I too think this is great. I like the dynamic of the parents swapping and Katrina becoming a half sister, added to the incest of Lauren and her brother. I think Kylie and Alex being dropped early on is a good idea. Too many characters, when later in the story Mom was going to be included also. However, I don't know that I think this should go further. I too am not a fan of Daddy/Daughter sex and in this case it looks almost coerced. Daddy/Daughter sex can too often seem like rape. The man is older, usually larger, weilds authority over his daughter that usually a son can shake off when contemplating his mother. I'm wondering if this should end right her, though it is kind of an awkward way to wind it up. Just my thoughts. I think Brandon's handling of Katrina's first time was good, though I think it'd have been better if the other three girls had given them the privacy of the room for her first experience instead of it becoming a spectator sport.

I think this may have been the best story I have read on this site. Nice flow to it, great content with very good detail. Loved it ! I think there is a little more to write about without going to far. Great read ..

As always, your writing skills are amazing. I thoroughly enjoyed these two chapters and really hope you'll continue this to the inevitable conclusion where both families are eventually fully swapping everyone. Don't listen to the naysayers. Let your imagination do what it does best and just run with it. You're amazing.

great writing style, the parents having an open relationship was a crazy twist! Bravo, bravo. Hope you continue.

Don't bring the dad into the sex it will ruin whats going on and is good about the story I know it may sound fucked up but I'm not really a big fan of the dad daughter incest so please leave him out of it if you write another chapter and if that means leaving out the mom then so be it

Everything that ithadtobeiowa was absolutely spot on. And Sam, unfortunately the appreciation isn't allowed over 5, I definitely would have scored higher! Thankyou, both from an entertaining story to read and the amount of orgasms I had reading your depraved wild imagination and what it can think up lol. 😊

It works for the story you're making. Follow the plot that you made. Don't cater to the whims of others because they want to jack/jill off to your story. Make yourself proud with your well made, engaging and truly entertaining story.

Damn... Amazing story. Like how intricate you made the plot line...

Don't add Dad. That'll just make the whole family weird, and it'll mess up what Brandon, Lauren, and Kristina have. But I do think that you should expound on this Mom thing with Brandon...

any future plans?

I actually loved this story so much and what Brandon and Lauren got that i actually think about it, it feels strange but i just kinda love what they've got. And i don't know if you should add the dad... be sure to keep what Brandon and Lauren have.

Your story's stellar so far, please don't add the dad, it'll dilute the whole essence and just turn it into a family orgy.

Adding the dad will ruin what's between Brandon and Lauren. But, the story was incredible

Two are a couple, threesome starts to be a multitude (but handled with care, maybe works), foursome or five some is sure disaster, always somebody results wounded and hurt. Lets parents play by one side and the kids by they our side. Give them the chance (with the parents compliance, if you want) to be a threesome independent (it seems to work for them), is my opinion, of course, you are free to write all that's you want, but this is a sexy story driven to be a complicated relationship if the parents are actively involved!

However, I like the story, is hot and interesting!

I apologize for my English, is not my native language.

This story is really hot!

I hope that the author wants to write another chapter more at least!

You make a blue balls!

Good Job!

Im not tryin to talk shit or anything, but I think including the dad seems kind of stupid because i feel as though it would ruin what Lauren and Brandon have.

I agree with an earlier comment about personally not wishing to include the dad in the story, but that Brandon ultimately gets to sleep with the three girls without anything detracting from that. I would also love to reintroduce the other two girls into the story, even if they sort of barge their way into a little orgy. If there's two things I love in my pornographic fiction, it's incest and harems. A man can dream. :P

Love the intensity of the sex and the suspenseful exposition of desire and secrets.

Love to read about group with both parental sets and sisters. Wondering why he didn't ask for anal when sister says "anything you want."

What really appealed to me was the almost harem like nature of this story. I feel like introducing another male would detract from the established tone. It'd be interesting if Brandon was able to "steal" him mom away from his dad.

Can't wait 4 more keep up the good work. I'm guessing this will all lead to the cabin 2 sets of parents in a pile there kids in another.

Who is Karen?

Brandon had a girlfriend in Ch. 01

Her name was Kelly.

Great continuation of an already Hot story . Got me off more than once.

Looking forward to the next chapters... no matter where they go. Sure it'll be Hot.

Don't stop now!!

I only read brother/sister incest stories. I thought a love story would build between either Lauren/Brandon or Christina/Brandon once the story was completed. Bringing Dad in to fuck Lauren doesn't appeal to me at all. Keep it between the siblings!!

I hope you haven't quit on us. Please continue.

Ch 3 - Mom & Dad joins. Kristina suggests her parents to join too.

Ch 4 - The Andrews watch. Kristina joins her half-family.

Ch 5 - All in orgy.

Extra chapter - All in orgy plus Alex and Kylie.

I really don't understand Brandon, he was quite hesitant to include Mom into his harem but suddenly insistent to add Dad. Does he secretly has a crush on him? I first thought that the series would end up with just Brandon and Lauren since it was established that he loves her over the other girls but now I don't know anymore.

Sorry to say but I'm a "one penis per fantasy" kind of guy, so adding another cock into the story really turns me off. This is my stop for the series but it was great while it lasted.

So... I guess Kristina magically went on the Pill without telling anyone? Condoms became a thing of the past in this chapter. Didn't she JUST lose her virginity in the last chapter?

Maybe a retroactive edit might be a good idea... :)

Please sir/madame hit me again. 😉

Starting to be quite good actually... Keep it up, waiting for next chapter...

Reminds me of stories from nikki_2021, which I consider the best, this is coming a close second.

Forget the naysayers. This is one of my most favorite stories on this site, and I would love to see the logical next step, getting BOTH Mom and Dad involved. Perhaps eventually all of the Andrews as well. Excellent plot so far, you have kept me guessing. Now bring it home!

too far

I completely disagree with everyone else. The more the merrier. I am all for a full on orgy with all characters named so far (minus the bitchy contortionist exgirlfriend)

The first chapter was amazing. This however feels like no real plot was put in the process like the previous one. Just delete chapter 2.

As soon as the mom became involved my reaction was "oh..."

And then dad wants to Fuck me too

Really ruins the feel and flow.

So the parents have their thing, the kids have their thing. Keep it separate. Maybe they can all have a laugh and have their own separate weekends at the cabin...

Chapter two took a turn half way through and I finished the story hoping we would pull up from the tail spin...

I agree with everyone that this doesn't need to happen. I was happy for Brandon and Kristina becoming a thing and Lauren just sweetens it up, especially if both got pregnant one day, but they are BRANDON'S GIRLS!! Glad you made her reluctant about it and not really wanting to which could eventually lead to feelings deepening between the three. Legally Kristina isn't related to them so Brandon and her marrying and having kids won't be crazy to everyone else. Just please, if you continue this, don't add the fathers. Maybe have the mom become overcome with lust for Brandon, with her not telling the father, and they sleep together. Overall I like the story but please once again the father isn't a good idea. Listen to your fans and people who simply like the story and don't do it!!!!!!!!!!!!!

...well I guess everyone else has pretty much said what I was thinking, so no real need to go off on the parents being thrown in. The whole dad and son in the daughter is a huge turnoff for me. To me it's Brandon's girls and he's their man, anything else detracts from it. So I suppose its just as well that another chapter hasn't been written yet, I won't be forced to decide wether I want to read it to have my hopes dashed or expect redemption ;)

Sorry to say, but I liked the first story better.

I didn't mind the threesome between the siblings (AT ALL), but then you began to introduce the parents into the mix.. That was a turn off for me. I'll probably read chapter three when we get it, if only to see if you can save the story at the end. But judging from where it is now, I fear I might not be able to give it any rating...

Now that that is done, I just wanna say that I really like your writing style, and you seem to have a fairly good understanding of people, which makes the character's responses seem so natural (albeit a little too willing at times). ;-)

Keep up the good work

this site would be sooooooooooooo much better off w/o the asshole of LIT!!!! Gave you a 5 for a great read!!

I'm sorry, but while I really enjoyed "chapter" 1 and the beginning of chapter 2, I am really turned off by the involvement of the rents in this. Sibling incest is one thing, but intergenerational incest is revolting. I've never understood how any guy in his 20s can get turned on by a woman in her 40s or 50s, but especially his mother. Younger women may possibly get turned on by their daddies, l suppose, although that's a psychological aberration too. But think of the whole package: people are more than their sex organs, however attractive those may be. They're also more than their bank accounts, as attractive as _those_ might be. Wrinkles are not sexy in either gender. (As an older man, I know better than to put a move on a 20-y/o, b/c I hate being laughed at. That's even if I wanted to stray from my marriage, which I don't.) Soooooo . . . I'm outa here.

This is a great story and I will continue to read it no matter what you do but I think that adding the dads would degrade the story and make it less interesting. I am personally a fan of brother/sister sex so adding the girlfriend and the mom wasn't a huge leap. However, if the dads get brought into the mix than Brandon's role as the alpha male would get put into question and he would eventually get left out of all the fun since Lauren would then be accessible to both parents. Also, how has Kristina not gotten pregnant yet? At the beginning they were fucking with condoms but now it seems like they don't care anymore. That could be an interesting plot twist if either Lauren or Kristina got pregnant. What happened to the other two friends from chapter one? It seems like they have just disappeared into thin air. Maybe you could bring them back into the mix and some of the original excitement back into the story. Regardless of how you write chapter three, I will wait anxiously with high expectation and will probably enjoy it no matter which direction you go in. Keep writing my friend!!!

I have really loved this series so far, I am in awe of your character building, although as mentioned in a previous post personal descriptions are lacking. I had to refer back to chapter 1 just to remember what Kristina looked like, and had to assume that the mother was just an older and possibly curvier version of Lauren. New chapter after a long length of time deserves renewed descriptions.

I am a tad concerned about the dynamics when and if Dad gets involved. As things stand, Mum and Lauren are bi-curious and using each other as new toys, but the primary couple are Brandon and Lauren with Kristina as the side kick. In your description of Kristina's thoughts on Dad and Lauren getting together, I can only see Brandon being left out as Lauren, Mom and Dad live under the same roof and are so immediately accessible to each other. The living arrangements would need to change some how because with Lauren living at home and both being accessible to and accessible by both parents in a sexual role, Brandon will eventually feel left out or unintentionally by the effect of time or distance, be left out. Either way, the dynamics would leave him as the side kick.

Just my thoughts.

Since this is my first post to an author in over a year of reading this site, I hope you get an idea of just how much I love your writing. I do not in any way mean to denigrate your skill or work.

Hugz

please continue this

This is my new favorite Literotica story.

This and the first chapter were written very well and lots of fun to... Ahem, read. Having Kristina turn out to be a half-sister was a nice twist and your writing is very descriptive.

I do have one comment/complaint, however: the parents. I don't think that Brandon and Lauren should get involved with their parents because it doesn't feel quite right based off of how you've written them so far. Admittedly I'm not very into parent/child incest (especially daddy/daughter) but Brandon and Lauren seem to be more of a couple with Kristina their happy third, a couple basically, which is why I feel them swapping with their parents would counter to who you've built them to be.

Write whatever you want, obviously, and I'll probably read some of it, but I just don't think their parents would fit with the story you've already developed.

- Best of luck to you

First I'm not going to complain about the addition of the parents as I think enough people have so instead I'll give you a couple suggestions.

1) You need to show more and not tell so much you're lacking description on most of your principle characters. I barely know what anybody looks like I think you gave a small blurb at the beginning of the last chapter but that wasn't very descriptive, and you haven't as far as I recall described the mom or dad. And seeing as your main descriptor for them is mom and dad which you over use horribly, sorry but if you have to use the same word twice, thrice, or even quadruple in the same paragraph you my friend are over using that poor word and need to find another.

2) Speaking about mom and dad you need to remember when mom and dad is Mom and Dad aka when to use the verb form or when to use the noun form. As in descriptions of relationships or if they are being used as a name. If you're using Mom as an place holder for her name it Mom not mom, and the same is true for dad.

This story was totally awesome! Coupled to "The Sleepover Ch. 01. Once I started I couldn't put it down. I wanted more and more!!

Now I'm sad that it is over. My sister and I didn't have much of a relationship growing up. I regret that now that I'm older.

Thank you for stirring up the passion again in my heart!!

I truly hope your are going to continue this story .... excellent writing

This is a great story I like the line that is it going in. I hope there is more where this came from. How about a chapter 3?

So where's chapter 3?

How do you get that incest is morally wrong, but swinging isn't ? Based on what standard? If we go based on your reasoning for swinging, then as long as they are two legal and consenting adults, it isn't morally wrong. Otherwise, you're being a hypocrite and holding double standards. If you want to try and use the bible, God said you shall not lie with your children. Doesn't mention siblings. Thus, by that logic, sister/brother sex is okay. Also, before God said that, he made the ten commandments, one of which is thou shalt not commit adultery. Thus, it was viewed as more of a problem then incest. Thus, also making swinging morally wrong. The bible also says that a man shall not lie with a man and a woman shall not lie with a woman. Thus condemning lesbianism, which was in the storyline for the swingers. Yet, you say that incest is morally wrong and swinging is morally right? That is being a filthy hypocrite. You can't condemn one without the other. No matter what standard you hold it to.

You should keep Kristina Lauren and Brandon, but take away the parents.

I agree with Anonymous about keeping Brandon as the Alpha male. As soon as Dad is introduced, Brandon is demoted and that changes the whole line of the story for me.

This story is perfect so far up until the dad got involved when I read these I like to put myself in the guys shoes and pretend he is me like I'm reading an old journal entry and it makes it that much better but when you broght in the dad's it threw me off and I just could not enjoy the rest of the story and I just found myself wishing it was over. though I wish and hope you don't add dads too later story entry's I know you are the author and you will do what ever you plese. but if you do not mind the next time you add other story's that involve family specify who would be involved so readers who don't like fathers in the mix like me could avoid it. I would also like to say you are a great story teller I read one of your other stories and I just loved it I just love stories that involve bro, sis, and moms in it thank you for the stories ;)

I like this story a lot. It has a ton going for it, and you write well :-)

That said, there are a few things that bug me. I'm not suggesting that you change any part of your story to please anyone - even me - I just want to leave a comment because the story is pretty good so far and I am curious about chapter 3.

So, the things that bug me are:

A - The fact that you equate swinging/wife swapping with incest as if they are equally bad. I personally think that swinging (and I say this as a swinger) is not morally wrong in any way because it's all about consenting adults having fun. As you wrote, it adds spice to a marriage. Incest is morally wrong on a whole other and bigger level.

B - That said, I am not opposed to reading stories about incest because something that is taboo is strangely hotter. I do believe that if two people fell in love and then found out that they were related (such as siblings separated due to adoption or something) then they should be allowed to be together. For me, love is key. Thus, having the brother and his sister(s) get together does not bug me, BUT I'm also a mom, and any sort of parent child incest creeps me out. I had to skip over that part of this story. That said, I also believe in equality, so if you are going to have the mom get with the son, it's only fair that the dad should get with the daughter too.

C - The final thing that bugs me is that the mom got over the incest thing way too easily. She must have been already thinking about her daughter in that sort of way for her to go: "This is wrong but what the hell, why not?" That just doesn't happen unless she already really wanted it. The only real problem I have with the dad just agreeing is that it's not realistic for every person in one family to just suddenly want to have sex with no real thought. It would be far more believable to me if the parents had a long standing joke that their kids were both so hot that they just couldn't help but want them a little. That would explain why everyone agrees to try it so easily. It would also explain the kids doing it first, because subconsciously, they'd have picked up on that vibe.

If I had my way, you'd add the friends back in, lol! I get that Lauren is jealous of them and never truly wanted him to have sex with them in the first place, but that was part of what made it so much hotter (the first part) than this second part. He basically had a little harem going, lol!

Good job! 4* :-)

You did a good job on part two. Can't wait to read the next installment... Keep up the good work....

i didnt like kristina. one of the other girls wouldve been fine (especially alex) but i didnt like her character and how he always had to make her feel better about herself. the way that lauren basically forces him to go out with her was a turn off. the first chapter was great though! just couldnt finish this one...

You sir, have outdone yourself. I wasn't sure at the beginning what I thought of the direction you where taking this story. However, I quickly got caught up due partly to your increasing ability to describe the scene and make it so vivid in our minds eye. I'm uncertain if it is simply the fact that I have grown to love the characters as you have described them or just that I feel I can relate to many of them; but I found myself relishing in the humor that you brought to this story. It has been my observation that stories on this site lack humor and focus solely on the passion of the situation. You have done a fantastic job of blending this story to encompass a whole range of emotions, not just lust and primal urges.

I wholeheartedly disagree with one commenter in particular and simply submit that you should continue to write as you have been. I for one love this story, love how you have written it and can't wait to see how you will have the rest of it unfold.

I feel I must comment on a hidden talent. I find it very impressive that you were able to continue this story with a 4 month break between the first installment and this one and have me totally believe that it was written in one sit down. I distinctly got the impression that you had this part of the story in mind the whole time you wrote the first installment. I can only hope that you do as well in the third (possibly 4th) installment.

Again, my hats off to you good sir, I applaud you.

continue??

O.K., there is some validity to the complaint about excessive use of the word fuck". And simultaneous orgasms, while not rare, don't happen with every fuck as seems to happen here. (I'm jealous, I'll admit, 'cause I've only had a few S.O.s. I discovered early on that If my partner comes first, things work out better all around.)

Now, since this is fiction and a fantasy, people, just go with the flow of it. If it offends you, then quit reading it. But you'll always wonder what happened.

Samslam, I do hope you have chapter 3 in the pipeline. I don't care what direction the plot takes, it's just an absolute treat to read a well written work. Again, Thank You!

The first story was pretty good but not great, because it's not so much a story as it is a non-stop sex scene. It's is more porn than erotica. We'll written porn, but still porn.

Adding mom was a mistake, and I skipped half half of this story because of it. Adding dad would ruin it entirely and gross me out completely. A mother/son story can work for me if it's well done (check Northern Light as a good example), but the (grand)dad/uncle character that you seem to relish I find disgusting, perhaps because it's almost always sexual abuse in real life.

That's OK: every person likes different things, and you write these stories mostly for your own satisfaction. But do keep your audience in mind: not everybody is keen on the 'everybody fucks everybody' type of stories, and it seems more like you're running out of original ideas and keep rehashing the same scene but with different names. A joke is never as funny the second time around, and it's better to stop at the top, instead of dragging on into insignificance.

Finally, two minor remarks:

1: There's a bit of over-abundance of the word 'fuck'.

2: Not all orgasms have to be simultaneous.