All Comments on 'Unexpected Interest Ch. 02'
by CoCoNiy101
- 30 Comments
Luvin ur ability 2 give us that warm & fuzzy feeling! I kno every1 who read this did so w/a smile on their face! U prolly now hold the record 4 the most Awws in a 3pg ch. I'm willing 2 assume most ppl that come 2 this site enjoy erotic tales, so thanx 4 givin us a lil sweet w/our spice! ;oD
This was very entertaining...keep up the great job! Thanks for the update...now do it again...soon;)
Anjel54
The time frame was a bit confusing because I would love to read where they left off on the first date but all in all this was a great second chapter! These two are madly cute together and seem very realistic, and I love how you go into details especially with Natasha’s job. These two really seem like they could actually be real people somewhere because it doesn’t read as fiction so great job! Plus I love the buildup for these two, can’t wait to see what is in store for them. Keep up the good work!
Now meet and Greet the Relatives. maybe make Friends with Grandma and Grandpa knowing his way about taking better care of their Health.
Loving this story so far. You're not like other authors that have sex scene after sex scene. You give as a realistic couple. And personally I imagine myself as the woman in stories and wish that could happen in my life
These two are so sweet. The build up is great and I can't wait to read more about them. Thanks for the update!!
I love this!!! Keep up the good work. I hope these two will go on to get married and have kids!!!
This story is amazing so far.
I keep on checking everyday to see if there is a new upload. I can't wait.
amazing story! i hope you're gonna be coming up with part 3 soon....please please please! i cant wait to know what happens!
I'm like everyone else eagerly awaiting the next installment of the series. I've read hundreds of them but this is my first time commenting on one bc this is really good so please take your time but don't take to long.
I finished part one and had to read two, now about to read three. I love it! This is the first time I have read one that was really based off the couple really liking each other, and I loved the part where he ask her about the shower. It had nothing to do with race just a guy wanted to know a girl wanted him. Keep this up!
I really like the plot and the characters, but am distracted by the grammatical, spelling and fact errors. As a lawyer, I almost stopped reading because your court scene is so inaccurate (for example, Natasha's client is a plaintiff, not a defendant, and the suit would never play out that way), but I decided to press on because the story has charm. I do think an editor would help turn this and your other stories into really great ones.
This is a good start. However, it is a bit rough around the edges. I suggest (even now) that you reread and edit it a bit. For future reference, perhaps you could write it, hold onto it for 2 or 3 days, then read it again. This may help you pick out any mistakes that are still there before you submit.
Okay, off to read Chapter 3.
I love all the choices of music in this lovely story so far, especially the PATD. I love them.
Get an editor, or just stop posting. Please!! You don't know the difference between "their" and "there". That's third grade grammar!
Your story is really fantastic but you need an editor badly. When I read confederate powder on the funnel cake I nearly peed my pants laughing! It's confectioner's sugar or powdered sugar. It was a cute grammatical error. People don't need to be nasty about the errors. If they are bothered by them either stop reading the story or offer to proofread and correct the piece in its entirety for you! I think your body of work is lovely and the grammatical errors I can easily overlook because the material is so good. Keep writing and don't let uncouth douchebags deter you.
From all this sweetness.. I'm luvin it.. The chemistry feels great.. Thank you for sharing your work with us crazy, lonely people.
I enjoyed the story but you should avoid subjects you do not fully nderstand. You really got muddled with the whole Organic vs Genetically Modified.