All Comments on 'Venusian Nights'
by TamilynBowman
- 5 Comments
So what the first girl, the prostitute, anything to do with the second girl, Mint? Also what happened at the first girls job interview?
So nice world set sort of up. On Venus for the most part with girls I have no idea about. Second scene has Mint having sex with some girl name starting with S. However the author gets lost in the she did this the other did that.. Mint has a dick and pussy and does S, maybe as it’s not clear and the sex scene keeps changing person of reference and the author mixes up whose dick is in whose cunt a couple of times. I had to keep score on a bit of paper to figure it out..... now I’ve forgotten.
So a shit story in actual fact as confusing shit happened a few times and none of it was linked to the other bits. Imagine watching pulp fiction the movie and only seeing the couple rob the cafe, the dude shot on the dunny and the black guy getting fucked up the asswhile tied up. Make sense of that shit without the rest of the movie.
Welcome to this story. 1 Star and only as I can’t go lower and the idea might be good as I like hermaphrodites, respect prostitutes and living on Venus would be awesome.
Voting is not on this story.
It’s shit and you can’t vote which is dodge.
So 30% of the story or 90% of page 1 is a clickable Internet link.
The text is blue and if clicked it gets underlined and then it can open an Internet link too....... the same story on Literotica. Now you have to Windows showing page 1 of the story.
Tamilyn, I love your writing. Your imagination. The world you created. I want more
Jackspeed2u Shut the hell up. If you don't like, it explain why and MOVE ON. Don't sit and come back and write over and over again 3 times about why it's annoying. Just shut up and go away.