All Comments on 'Who is the Real Luke Davis?'
by Not2Pervy
- 35 Comments
It was going slow but intense. Then... it's two people being adults making plans. Blah blah blah.
A really nice story, like it could happen, isn't that what you said? I liked it and your style. 5 *****
It’s honestly one of my favorite stories but I wish you elaborate more on the actual sex part, rather than just skim through it. The build up was amazing though
Why is this being reposted less than 2 weeks after the original? Briefly scanning it I didn't see any difference.
I think I gave it 4 🌟 's initially so since it's the same story it gets another.
Great love story. A bit skimpy on the sex scenes; overall a wonderful and very romantic tale.
I haven't read any of your other stories yet to see your style. But, I wish the part if their 1st weekend together would have been more detailed. Also I think the end was rushed to much. I would have been happier with a longer weekend that ended the 1st CH. Then a 2nd chapter to go more in depth in the lead up to the meeting with "Mel". Then a longer finish into what happened after.... But that's just me and what I thought. So not really important, though U write really well and I will probably read at least 1 of your stories.... Though probably more 8D.
This was submitted as a contest story and posted early by mistake. Apologies to anyone put off by Literotica’s attempt to set things right.
Wonderful story, 10 stars. Luke's whore wife gave him a son. Then, the babysitter fell in love with Ethan, then his father, the man to give her more babies, her HUSBAND!
A pretty good story, for the most part. The spying on her through his laptop was over-the-top pervy and undeserving of her trust. She would be justified in walking away if she found out. Trust, once lost, can never be fully regained.
Thank you for an amazing story. The “slow - burn” type story is more to my liking. Only comment regarding your presentation is please use a bit more detail in your love encounters.
Wonderfully intimate (not just physically), passionate, stimulating, and completely captivating story! Terrific imagery from your words. Your narration adds a lot of depth to the story and really helps in connecting us to the characters, causing us to fall-in-like with them. The entire approach to writing this is spot on! Congrats... and keep going.
Fun story, but the ending was too abrupt. Also, they promised to be honest, but she wasn't honest with him and sent him on the 'test' date.
This is the first story of yours that I've read...... super fun and very well written. Loved all the detail. Thank you!!!!
Awesome storey, loved the slow build. Would love another chapter, how the relationship develops, how they handle her parents and the marriage. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
Lovely premise.
Good back story.
But the sex was a Reader's Digest version. Much too short.
Lacked needed very detailed foreplay/preliminaries.
All those descriptions of what her breasts were like. And and his fantasizing about them. And her need to show them to him, and there's really nothing involving them.
Blowjob seemed totally uninteresting. Just another item that had to be ticked off on a list.
Three stars.
Builds well initially, and then seems to suddenly get rushed. Also, the sex scenes, seem too matter of fact and skip any description of the exciting parts. There’s no reveal per se.
Couldn't he jst of checked the screen history to see what she had been accessing?
While some of your fans seem disappointed the Cossacks are being too polite, I found it charming, savory, and ‘not too pervy’.
It was good until the introduction of Mel. Testing him was underhanded and makes her no more trustworthy than if he had taken Mel up on her offer. If you look at other stories where people are tested like that, it does not end well.
Wonderful story, little creepy about that camera in the in-home office, or den, whatever, but very sweet story. In fact it could go well in “Romance”. Five stars, thank you and keep writing!
I think making a dream flow into reality captures life. His faithfulness instills the real meaning of life. Stories many times imitate life but not the commitment between a man and a woman. You did all that and more. Bravo you are a excellent writer and look forward to reading more of your stories. I want to see if you will fall into the real pervy category or stay true to your craft.