All Comments on 'Wrongfully Accused Ch. 13-14'
by mandingo1234
- 18 Comments
Looks like your editor fell asleep at the wheel on this one. That was a lot messier than I remember the other chapters being. Interested to see where the story goes though.
nice 2 updates from your stories, but yeh they are both full of spelling and grammar mistakes
Great story so far. Needs a little more polish on the editing front. It was a difficult read in certain places.
Sorry but if I owned an Mercedes SLR McLaren worth however much I'd sell it and get a more reliable car and I damn sure wouldn't take it to Jackson Hole, Wyoming, with black ice patches everywhere and pot holes big enough to swallow your car, thinking your on the Haul Road up to Prudhoe Bay, Alaska. Good try though Mandingo, love your story and find each chapter worthy of another 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS!
I’ve liked your stories, but if you need more time to edit, and have a second set of eyes go over it, please take that time.
Fun story. But, buddy, you need a good proofreader, spellchecker and editor. You know how to tell a good story, all you need is good writing to take it to the next level
Please, let there be more. There are still a lot of issues that need some closure. For example, what happens with the law suit, and fate of the man who killed Jason friend and co worker. Finally dealing with family and the his ex fiancee. I didn't care about the grammar issues, I just enjoyed reading this story. Thank you. Sir.
Please continue this story, there is quite a bit more to tell. Hell, the MC hasn't even made it through half of the women yet! Lol
Very nice story telling. And very sloppy spelling and prose. Whole words going wrong, resulting in phrases that state complete nonsense. And it happens litterally dozens of times. Shame for such a nice story. One star off the five, sorry, it really becomes annoying after, what, 30 or 40 times. I mean really!
One more thing. After they show up at the frat house, it's kind of unlikely no one would have taken a pic of their wheels, including license plate. So much for keeping their identity hidden.
Interesting story 5 stars but the author really needs someone to edit his stories for him been finding a lot of grammatical errors in the stories in some places the sentence doesn’t make any sense at all sometimes…..always a good idea to have someone proofread your stories or run a spell check as you’re writing perhaps?