All Comments on 'A Tale of Two Paramours Ch. 35'

Exactly how I hoped it would end. Had he picked Jessi, they would have both eventually ended up miserable....she seemed like the kind of person you could really only take in small doses, a night or weekend here & there. Also, the age difference would’ve become a problem further down the line. Trust me, I have firsthand knowledge & experience on that. Anyway, loved the story...Thanks for the journey.....

Thank u

Would not have guessed it. Yes, had rooted for Jessi, as she seemed to work on herself and make progress. But that she found happiness herself and nudged the other two towards the happy ending is a totally unexpected surprise.

Great plot and character development plus lots of fun stuff and spiced with some deep concepts make for a marvelous reading experience. Moreover, from my changing reactions to the chapters I learned some things about myself.

Thank You

Very well written. Thank you for your efforts.

Thanks for the story, one of my favorites! I look forward to more!

Thank you for a great story. Every chapter twisted in a way that I did not expect you are a great author and I look forward to reading more of your work it is good to find someone writing in the current day and Not many years ago when you cannot find The author. Keep up the good work

I begin with my only critique: While my main thrust in writing is playwrighting, I have taken many writing courses with some amazing published authors. I’ve taught creative writing for 30 years at the secondary and university level. (But so have so many baristas, so I guess that doesn’t mean much.)

Here’s my bone to pick: I’ve heard from so many great writers one constant mantra: “Do not use contractions in your narrative. That’s simply lazy. But, unless you want your characters to be considered self-possessed assholes like the guys in David Mamet plays - always let your characters SPEAK in contractions. No one who ever hopes to get laid in their lifetime speaks in perfect grammar. NOBODY!” I understand how how you wanted to paint Mark, but that paints him with a DO NOT FUCK ME sign.

That being said, this was the most moving story I’ve read on this site. For me, and I’m sure I am in the minority, there was too much sex to accompany the outstanding character development. Now and then I’d skim through the sex scenes to get back to the story. While the sex scenes were amazingly hot, you’re story was better.

Thank you.

That so few of the perverts here lauded you for your efforts.

Pearls before swine!

I really enjoyed this story. I was fortunate enough to only recently find it and was able to enjoy reading the whole series over the course of a week or so, instead of the five year span in which it was originally posted. The character development was excellent and I much more enjoy stories that go deeper than just the sex with plenty of emotion and drama outside the bedroom. The construction of this story certainly lent itself to that and I'll be sure to look for more of your work, Kveldulf. Thanks for the great read and I hope to find more about these characters.

I thought this story was great fantastic writing I am now at a loss as I felt part of all their lives. Thank you very much for your efforts it was a great journey

This was an excellent series and I'm rather sorry it's over... but it ended right.