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by qhml1
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Outstanding!
Plus, it reminded me an old PAPATOAD story. So that's even better.
The guy that was fucking his wife is burned to death and he later starts manufacturing flamethrowers. That doesn’t seem too suspicious.
I agree, it does have a PAPATOAD feel to it. Very fun in a Donald Westlake/ Elmore Leonard kinda way. Thanks very much.
Literally a Burn the Bitch story, a certain group of readers will hate this story and a certain group of readers will love this story. Personally I enjoyed it the good guy won the bad guys lost, so 5 stars from me. Its good to read about a happy ending.
This is crap. You're a much better writer than this. There was nothing erotic about this story, and it's plot is basically this: burn the bitch's lover (while he shoots her in the head and crotch), get away with murder, and live happily ever after with ex wife's sister and lots of money. I've read your other stories, and this is so far beneath what you're capable of.
No one tells a better story than Q. This was a fun read and that's why I read,... for fun. Stories like this are the reason Qhml1 just might be the top writer on Literotica. His humor and imagination know no bounds. Top marks from me.
LOL has to be the most true to labeled story in Loving Wives btb variety! No way to dislike it and he turned a profit in the long run. ***** Winner Winner this on gets the chicken dinner. Thank You
I feel like it's better when death isn't involved for the cheating spouse, deaths just feel like a copout
Meh, it was nice enough but not all that good. A little different from most of the author's normally great work. This story falls a little short in several areas, some plot holes also... One that gets me is WHY didn't Gail try to warn him what Angie had in store for him. She said she found out a week before Angie died??? Just a tad far fetched on how the cops/feds handled the killings, I guess the sheriff in charge was deputy Barney Fife... 4 stars
I was not expecting an action piece from you and one that practically opened up with it either. Overall, I enjoyed it and i felt like it was paced well and hit all the major narrative points. Not sure how I feel about Angie catching a bullet in the face, but I suppose the fact that they were able to tie it to Brad made Johnny's alibi stick as well as tying up all loose ends. It's like the perfect crime... but almost entirely by accident. What a neat idea.
I guess this would have to be the ultimate "Burn the Bitch/Bastard" story !
Actually, it could be BTB&B...
...Burn The Bitch, Bastard, & Bodyguards !!
Four stars from here.
A well-rounded story. The term "BTB" was particularly well implemented. I liked it. Thank you! 5*!
Interesting story.
Truly a burn the bitch tale gone right.
Thanks
Another outstanding story from a good writer.
Good story, but much simpler than I was expecting.
I had a problem with there being no reason for the fire to happen, and him not leaving the blaster in one of the goons' hand, when he did the quick frame job.
Later maunfacture of a flamethrower DOES seem a little suspicious.
I enjoy a q story, looking forward to the next!
Thanks for another clever and entertaining story.
I was going to say "fun," but that didn't seem appropriate.
If this had been a movie rather than a story it would have starred a younger Arnie Schwarzenegger or Matt Damon in a testosterone charged orgy of gadgets. violence and bad guys getting what was coming to them. Nothing wrong with that in itself but it's not what I log on to LW for.
As a LW story it was a complete fail. Death is almost never a good plot device, multiple deaths even more so as they leave too many questions unanswered and too many loose ends untied. Angie's untimely demise robbed us of a corker of a confrontation between her and the MC, always an important element of a LW drama and I had a great deal of difficulty buying into the way the MC successfully pulled the wool over the eyes of the police and the feds. An ok read but not Q's best.
JR
I'm still grinning ear to ear. Death, destruction, general mayhem and a happy ending with money and a new woman. What's there not to like?
I agree, it's a PAPATOADesc BTB.
But IMHO it falls short from what we expect in a qhml1 story.
very good story, not sure if the DNA on the gun would be burnt off, but 5 from me
Perfect story for a Monday. An absolute BTB wake up. GREAT! Much better than the cuck drivel being submitted lately in the Loving Wives category.
5 +++++ stars.
5***** Flame On 🔥. Burning away the diseases of adultery and attempted murder. Using a flamethrower as a defensive weapon is a Lit first and impregnating the former sister-in-law twice in a 20 month period gives the victorious MC super stud status. Write On!
I like how instead of standing around emoting this protagonist simply sets everything on fire and watches as his enemies self-destruct. Great fast efficient read. Hits hard as a result.
Okay, did I just miss it, or did the GSW on his right arm just magically disappear, just so neither the hospital staff nor the investigators could notice it?
Need to plant me some Kudzu so I can get me a flame thrower! ***** and I want the plans!
A couple of notes;
The GSW would have been washed away at the motel. He didn't go home until the next day.
I may have mis-read but it seemed he buried her before they released her body. I will re-read again later.
Otherwise, nice way to deal with criminal scumbags
You're not supposed to take BTB quite THAT literally, you know? 😅 Nice, quick 'n' dirty fun read for a coffee break. Thanks for the story!
Terrible event, however the situation turned into something beautiful. Thanks for your writing.
I was going with four stars but you got five just for the way he took care of the bad guys.
All this action at the beginning was pretty good but it might have worked even better if you had a little build up first to set the stage, eh! What do I know? I've read a lot of your stories some are great and most pretty good. I always did terrible in English class so take my suggestions with a grain of salt but keep writing! 5 stars
Yep! I do, I really do want one of those!
I'll rate the story about four and a quarter stars.
Cute, but kinda unlikely that the Feds wouldn't connect the Blaster to the fire.
This story turned out better than I expected. Yes, this can be a tired trope, but I felt like this writer added some creative ideas and his writing kept me engaged and interested in the story. Thanks for entertaining me, Q.
Fun little five-star story from the master of fully involved pieces. Thank you.
Hooked
And not only that, the bad guy is … wait for it … Brad Burns! Thanks Q for an interesting story. *****
Too funny. Why has no one ever burned the offenders in a BTB? Simple, elegance is often elusive. 5!
Fair enuf, he didn’t have a gun handy so flame on Farmer 🔥. Lv thathe roasted the guys junk, awesome!
That was a different story. 5*. Just goes to show never mess with a farmer's kid. Especially if he's a mechanical genious.
Hey as usual you gave us a very entertaining story. I won't comment further because the last time I stated an opinion I was given Literotica's version of lockdown and an extended parole sentence. But great story.
Fun. I don't agree that MC murdered the little man. He'd ordered his thugs to murder you. They had tried. He still had a gun. He was in your house. Self-defense for sure. I didn't practice criminal law, but I'm pretty comfortable with that conclusion.
Obviously, the wife cheating and intending to divorce would weigh heavily on him whenever he looked back. That she was excited about screwing him out of the family property shows a nasty streak, but a lot of women seem capable of turning into greedy bitches once they decide they want a divorce.
But the curious thing for me was her enjoying being nasty about leaving cum for him. What did he do to deserve that? Maybe she was simply following her new lover, and he was enjoying the disrespect to the cuck. This type disrespect has been a feature in some other LW stories. But without hubby doing something to justify revenge, it seems way over the top and indicative of a nasty, ugly woman. He'd be wondering how he could have missed it.
"Why has no one ever burned the offenders in a BTB?"
I can think of a couple tales where the house was burned. But none where the cheaters were toasted.
Excellent story. The Bear approves. 7 stars, because the only way it could have been better is if the bitch lived and was found out. But not my story. I liked it. More, please, sir.
The BEAR
Good story but I was curious as to why the Feds, family didn't later connect his new invention to the fires.
The coincidental occurrence was high, hey.
I liked it. Throw some Castle Doctrine in there and how he was protecting his wife and it’s all self-defense. Standard disclaimer: IANAL, except in my own stories. :-)
Good, I guess, but really there wasn't much of interest here other than the actual burning device itself. As I'd put you in the top handful of authors currently active - maybe even top handful all-time - this just fell a bit short of expectations. Kind of like when Steph Curry drops 20 points in a game, going 3/8 from the three-point line - objectively fine, but you always are hoping for a bit better.
Action sequences like this just don't ring true in my mind. He's just a man, not a superhero.
Good story as usual from qhml1. One quick correction, “patent pending” can be attributed to products once you’ve filed for a patent even though the patent has not issued (or may never issue). A patent “prevents others” from practicing your invention but doesn’t necessarily mean you can make the underlying product (someone else might have a needed patent, etc.). You can start making your product without filing a patent but better to wait until you file a US patent application to preserve foreign filing rights. In US, you get a one year grace period after first offering product for sale during which time you can still file an application whereas most other countries require filing for patent before first sale.
Definitely a BTB in it's truest form. Had to smile when he incinerated the guys junk. If Angie thought the shit stain was smoking hot before, this would surly have impressed her, that is if she had lived, lol. It was nice that Gale stepped up and filled in for her cheating sister. Got to be pure fiction but still a good story worth five stars.
normally I would have scored this 4*. But with the lack of decent stories in the Cheating Wife/Stupid Husband category recently, I gave 5*.
What are the critics suggesting? That qhml1, like all those other successful authors, is getting flunkies to write his stories? BTB gone bad, a good story goes up in flames, what a waste of a perfectly good classic Mercedes, yeah, must be. :)
This was okay, but I agree with others who have said that it falls short from what we expect in a qhml1 story. There were a number of minor errors that should have been caught if you had bothered to proof reading the story carefully. The portion of the story that read: "...checking the magazine. Three bullets left. Then it occurred to me he would not travel without a reload, and found two magazines in his belt. I slammed a full one in, racking the slide as I walked towards the house." was silly. If there were still three rounds in the magazine there would have to have been one in the chamber, already. So why would he "rack the magazine", which would just waste a round? Also, although I am not a CSI technician, I find it hard to believe that they would have been able to recover "fingerprints on the shells, despite all the rounds exploding from the heat", after the pistol was burned in a house fire. And why didn't he just call the local authorities and tell the truth? The authorities were close friends of his, so they would have believed him and been on his side, and he had no reason to lie about anything. He was just defending himself. The statement: "The security guards could be put down to self defense, but incinerating Brad Burns' junk would have gotten me a prison sentence." was nonsense. After the body burned in the house fire they would have no way to know what was burned first, but so what if they did? He could just say that Burns raised his gun at him and in self defense he hit Burns with the blaster without thinking. 3 stars.
After thousands of men-hating fetish-cuck unrealistic fantasies, finally one real BTB, maybe a bit too brutal, but these ones are so rare that are always welcome. Needless to say: 5 full stars.
Quick, Hot and Dirty. Just the way I like them. Now buy a cybertruck from Elon and mound several of these blasters on it and you’re ready for post-apocalyptic times. 😉
I thought snuff stories were banned. It’s not supposed to be SadisticButcherotica.
"Nothing wrong with that in itself but it's not what I log on to LW for. As a LW story it was a complete fail. Death is almost never a good plot device"
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This no-Loving Wives category is filled with 99% of Fetish-Cuck tales, with a lot of extraneous content, like: Interracial, Gay, Lesbian, Pissing, BDSM, Cucking, and so on. So, what's the problem with one very rare, real BTB once every 100+ LW tales ? Not to speak about the killing of the honest cheated husband, in the recent men-hating LW tales.
Well, after seeing lately a number of fake BTBs, where the whore cheating wife almost never paid for her betrayal, this one is a good example of what should be a real BTB (other good examples we can find in the SaddleTramp and CindyTV production). Certainly these are often based on some extreme revenge, but no more extreme than the millions of men-hating fetish-cuck tales that are endlessly flooding this poor LW category. So, well done. Maybe next time, a multi-part BTB slow burning tale, would be even better. 5 stars for this one, of course.
If Jerome is rich, and presumably has a nice house, why does she need their house?
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He came home early, presumably daytime? So why is he seeing things by the light of the full moon?
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"The other guy raised his weapon" - What other guy? There was Jerome and the boss.
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"We have the Senator's personal assistant and his son" - Angie's the Senator's personal assistant? Why is this the first we're hearing about this? Seems like a key bit information! I was going to ask how a farm mechanics wife got involved with this guy.
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"She looked at me and almost grinned, telling me she had a way." - So she expected him to resist and get killed; maybe they'd kill him anyway. Except for greed, I still wonder why she wanted the house, won't she be living with her lover?
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If it were anyone but Q, would have lost a star for self-referencing LW, but 5 stars all the way.
I will definitely be looking up this authors other stories. This one was just awesome. The skank wife died way too quickly and cleanly for my tastes but Brad and one of his henchmen got that slower, agonizing death they deserved.
Short and to the point with enough mayhem for two BTB stories. Add excellent writing and what’s not to love. 5s