All Comments on 'Born Into Darkness Ch. 03'
by wingedangel324
- 5 Comments
Too short. If you don't mind can you translate the words that aren't English please. From how Dean is using them I think he is using them as terms of endearment but I want to be sure.
Hi it’s wingedangel I’m sorry that it’s too short I’m still new at this just bear with me. I’m typing my story through word doc and I’m guessing 11 pages still isn’t enough, I’m sorry about that and I’m afraid to say chapter four will be the same, I just didn’t want you guys to wait . As for the Greeks
o ángelós mou = my angel
glýka = sweet
prinkípissa = princess
agápi̱ = love
glykýti̱ta = sweetness
Sorry about everything guys. Just comment on the plot and chatracters.
You are doing great....such delicious tension
EDITOR! Your sometimes garbled sentence structure and total misuse of past/present/future tense, lead me to believe that English is not your native tongue. You need an editor, badly. You have wonderful ideas, it's just that the language barrier keeps you from smoothly and cleanly transferring those thoughts into written word. Good luck!
I love the story but you definitely need an editor. I would like to offer my services. My email is 😊